*at precinct* WHAT IN GODS NAME WERE YOU THINKING WHEN YOU WERE DROWNING THOSE INNOCENT BAB- *wipes smudge off cops face* got it :)

BWHAHA · 08-21-2013, 08:39 PM

@PancakeBrah

This is Norwegian Wood. Feel the violin undulating
The strings so underestimated. I’m feeling violent.
And the color violet is all I see after it’s souls decimated.
I feel better about yourself already. Reading the instructions to this do-it-yourself machete.
The annointed king of pointy things. I exist, so you know you aren’t above me.
My monsters handcuffed. Behind bars. Do you want me?
The ultimate scenario. Not even slightly unfocused.
Unzip your skin-tights with my opus. Inform you of it.
When you look down, get hit right in the forehead.
Sit tight. Fellatiate. My salamander while you salivate. The master
I want to be the reason you drink. This feelings n’sync.
And there ain’t a lake full of timber the could ignite the embers, I think.
Of course you look up to me. In a naked portrait of myself you’d quit. Exaggerate my abdomen
Accentuate the crevices. Give me a 12 pack. Extenuate. I’m extra masculine

Geno · 08-21-2013, 08:49 PM

Fuckin awesome.

Vulgar · 08-21-2013, 08:53 PM

lol shots fired.

PancakeBrah · 08-21-2013, 09:05 PM

Ok.

Were the strings truly underestimated, though?

BWHAHA · 08-22-2013, 12:23 AM

don't be rude young cake. Ask McCartney.

and if itz 2 anybodiez accord this wasnt about cake but i was making it known bout something we discussed.

BWHAHA · 08-22-2013, 12:24 AM

jerkz

Certain · 08-22-2013, 12:47 AM

I liked this a lot. The off-kilter flow with the wonderful mix of images was pretty great. Every thought transitioned smoothly. Every line was fun, and a few were funny. I guess it just seems like you wrote this with joy.

Certain · 08-22-2013, 12:48 AM

I'm a blackbird singing. You're a bassoon-playing buffoon
who couldn't bloom in the concrete crack's dirt inches.
Plying a toon. Watching a tool. Yellow-bellied everything.
Peddle bennies, sell and swing. Smell the melting wedding rings.
I'm your pusher. You're nearing a cliff, and you might fall.
Find a cushion, then kneel onto it and lick my balls.
The ultimate scenario. My hands don't tremble as they crush the keys.
I'm exploring hidden temples hid by brush and trees. Enter without touching leaves.
Dismember you and crush your dreams. You'll never be in love again.
Severed wings, bicuspid bends. Meant to leave but fucked instead.
Bend so deep, I touch the end. Corner store. Boys in backstreets.
Brian nicked the tip of a J. Kevlar clips, that's how we pack heat.
Thousand stacks meet. Pounds and cash. You're green with penis envy.
I choose the funhouse mirror, but your seeded dreams are tempting.

Darth Yoda · 08-22-2013, 09:46 AM

wow!!

dead man · 08-22-2013, 10:03 AM

I want to be the reason you drink. This feelings n’sync.

w00t

BWHAHA · 08-23-2013, 01:22 AM

Thanks!

oats · 08-23-2013, 01:38 AM

Very very gewd

Defy Gravity · 08-23-2013, 08:46 PM

This is Norwegian Wood. Feel the
violin undulating
The strings so underestimated. I’m
feeling violent.
And the color violet is all I see after
it’s souls decimated.

decent I don't know what undulating is

I feel better about yourself already.
Reading the instructions to this do-
it-yourself machete.

this is dope as fuck

The annointed king of pointy things. I
exist, so you know you aren’t above
me.
Mymonsters handcuffed. Behind
bars. Do you want me?

great follow up

The ultimate scenario. Not even
slightly unfocused.
Unzip your skin-tights with my opus.
Inform you of it.
When you look down, get hit right in
the forehead.

great word play

Sit tight. Fellatiate. My salamander
while you salivate. The master
I want to be the reason you drink.

This feelings n’sync.
And there ain’t a lake full of timber
the could ignite the embers, I think.
Of course you look up to me.
In a
naked portrait of myself you’d quit.
Exaggerate my abdomen
Accentuate the crevices. Give me a 12
pack. Extenuate. I’m extra masculine

I don't know where each rhyme begin and end. cool concept and execution. tons of pop references. I like it

BWHAHA · 08-27-2013, 09:37 PM

thanks. uppin one last time ya

Wise Wiggles · 08-27-2013, 10:37 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by BWHAHA

@PancakeBrah

This is Norwegian Wood. Feel the violin undulating
The strings so underestimated. I’m feeling violent.
And the color violet is all I see after it’s souls decimated.
I feel better about yourself already. Reading the instructions to this do-it-yourself machete.
The annointed king of pointy things. I exist, so you know you aren’t above me.
My monsters handcuffed. Behind bars. Do you want me?
The ultimate scenario. Not even slightly unfocused.
Unzip your skin-tights with my opus. Inform you of it.
When you look down, get hit right in the forehead.
Sit tight. Fellatiate. My salamander while you salivate. The master
I want to be the reason you drink. This feelings n’sync.
And there ain’t a lake full of timber the could ignite the embers, I think.
Of course you look up to me. In a naked portrait of myself you’d quit. Exaggerate my abdomen
Accentuate the crevices. Give me a 12 pack. Extenuate. I’m extra masculine

I liked this part.

Yet I loved it all.

Yay.

Fuck Vaginas!

Exis · 08-28-2013, 10:44 PM

You are one twisted individual it seems, I really like it lol...your word usage is dope man.

CopyPat · 08-29-2013, 01:07 AM

haha very good. lake of timbers was sneaky with nsync

anointed king of pointy things

this was small but dense. no wasted words
enjoyed as usually. certain haha nice bro, nice
u guys shoulda collabed this i guess aha

YDK · 08-29-2013, 03:17 AM

Lmao this reminded me of the song Pauly shore saw my penis.
disturbing yet very entertaining. Complex flow good multies creative wordplay. This was tight lol good shit man

Zombie · 08-31-2013, 03:32 AM

i'll one up this verse and post my verse.

08-21-2013, 08:39 PM	#1
BWHAHA Sophomore Member Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 176 Rep Power: 4754289	at precinct WHAT IN GODS NAME WERE YOU THINKING WHEN YOU WERE DROWNING THOSE INNOCENT BAB- wipes smudge off cops face got it :) @PancakeBrah This is Norwegian Wood. Feel the violin undulating The strings so underestimated. I’m feeling violent. And the color violet is all I see after it’s souls decimated. I feel better about yourself already. Reading the instructions to this do-it-yourself machete. The annointed king of pointy things. I exist, so you know you aren’t above me. My monsters handcuffed. Behind bars. Do you want me? The ultimate scenario. Not even slightly unfocused. Unzip your skin-tights with my opus. Inform you of it. When you look down, get hit right in the forehead. Sit tight. Fellatiate. My salamander while you salivate. The master I want to be the reason you drink. This feelings n’sync. And there ain’t a lake full of timber the could ignite the embers, I think. Of course you look up to me. In a naked portrait of myself you’d quit. Exaggerate my abdomen Accentuate the crevices. Give me a 12 pack. Extenuate. I’m extra masculine

08-21-2013, 08:49 PM	#2
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08-21-2013, 09:05 PM	#4
PancakeBrah SOBER Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 13,052 Battle Record: 2-5 Champed - AOWL Season 2 Rep Power: 85899406	Ok. Were the strings truly underestimated, though? __________________ If I ventured in the slipstream Between the viaducts of your dreams Where immobil steel rims crack And the ditch in the back road stop Could you find me?

08-22-2013, 12:47 AM	#7
Certain Mad fucking dangerous. Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 12,072 Battle Record: 40-19 Champed - AOWL Season 3 - Art of Writing League (2x) Rep Power: 85899402	I liked this a lot. The off-kilter flow with the wonderful mix of images was pretty great. Every thought transitioned smoothly. Every line was fun, and a few were funny. I guess it just seems like you wrote this with joy. __________________ I'm just swinging swords strictly based on keyboards, unbalanced like elephants and ants on seesaws.

08-22-2013, 12:48 AM	#8
Certain Mad fucking dangerous. Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 12,072 Battle Record: 40-19 Champed - AOWL Season 3 - Art of Writing League (2x) Rep Power: 85899402	I'm a blackbird singing. You're a bassoon-playing buffoon who couldn't bloom in the concrete crack's dirt inches. Plying a toon. Watching a tool. Yellow-bellied everything. Peddle bennies, sell and swing. Smell the melting wedding rings. I'm your pusher. You're nearing a cliff, and you might fall. Find a cushion, then kneel onto it and lick my balls. The ultimate scenario. My hands don't tremble as they crush the keys. I'm exploring hidden temples hid by brush and trees. Enter without touching leaves. Dismember you and crush your dreams. You'll never be in love again. Severed wings, bicuspid bends. Meant to leave but fucked instead. Bend so deep, I touch the end. Corner store. Boys in backstreets. Brian nicked the tip of a J. Kevlar clips, that's how we pack heat. Thousand stacks meet. Pounds and cash. You're green with penis envy. I choose the funhouse mirror, but your seeded dreams are tempting. __________________ I'm just swinging swords strictly based on keyboards, unbalanced like elephants and ants on seesaws.

08-21-2013, 08:53 PM	#3
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08-22-2013, 12:23 AM	#5
BWHAHA Sophomore Member Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 176 Rep Power: 4754289	don't be rude young cake. Ask McCartney. and if itz 2 anybodiez accord this wasnt about cake but i was making it known bout something we discussed.

08-22-2013, 12:24 AM	#6
BWHAHA Sophomore Member Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 176 Rep Power: 4754289	jerkz

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08-23-2013, 01:22 AM	#11
BWHAHA Sophomore Member Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 176 Rep Power: 4754289	Thanks!

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oats Steel Cut Join Date: May 2013 Posts: 5,073 Battle Record: 19-10 Accomplishments - OM HOF (2x) Champed - Fight Night LXXXIV - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 79005425	Very very gewd

08-27-2013, 09:37 PM	#14
BWHAHA Sophomore Member Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 176 Rep Power: 4754289	thanks. uppin one last time ya

08-28-2013, 10:44 PM	#16
Exis ............ Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 3,938 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 0	You are one twisted individual it seems, I really like it lol...your word usage is dope man.

08-29-2013, 01:07 AM	#17
CopyPat Mic Check Join Date: Mar 2013 Location: Calgary Alberta Canada Posts: 707 Battle Record: 13-10 Rep Power: 3742221	haha very good. lake of timbers was sneaky with nsync anointed king of pointy things this was small but dense. no wasted words enjoyed as usually. certain haha nice bro, nice u guys shoulda collabed this i guess aha __________________ My syllable count approximately a billion, bounce. You cannot compete.

08-29-2013, 03:17 AM	#18
YDK ghost in the matrix Join Date: Apr 2013 Location: Covington, KY Posts: 4,564 Battle Record: 14-25 Champed - Art of Writing League (x2) - Lime Green Poetry Association Rep Power: 8181109	Lmao this reminded me of the song Pauly shore saw my penis. disturbing yet very entertaining. Complex flow good multies creative wordplay. This was tight lol good shit man __________________

08-31-2013, 03:32 AM	#19
Zombie Senior Member Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 125 Battle Record: 5-0 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 2645336	i'll one up this verse and post my verse.