WEEK FIFTEEN: MASTER ROCK (6-7) vs SINACOG (0-7) ROCK WINS 3-0

[Adverse]

AOWL Season X WEEK FIFTEEN

@Master Rock @Sinacog

Verse Due: WEDNESDAY AUGUST 4TH @ 11:59PM

Line min: 10

Max: 40


Rules: http://www.netcees.org/showthread.php?t=150311

Topic:






GOOD LUCK

[Sinacog]

In a steeple cathedral; two chinese scissor sisters ROCK THE DARK -- OMINOUS DARK --
They have sex for ten zillion EONS; for the OMINOUS DARK -- SPARKING THE HEART --
I am the demon of hell; SEMON CELLS-- SEMON CELLS -- SEMON CELLS-- BODY OF HELL --
SHAWTY/SHOTTY WILL MELT FROM A BODY IN HELL-- Frostbitten dragons are killed in a second
A MILLION weapons -- cenobite pen' dragon; end damage -- bend cabbage --
LEAD AVERAGE -- i killed demons and devils in a nether dimension -- feather ascension --
A fish's ascension -- a fish's ascenion -- a fish's ascenion - I AM ENDLESS TORTURE--
FIRE SCORCHING FLAMES FROM THE BLUE/BLEW TERRAIN -- SCORCHING FLAMES --
I'm a chiniese scissor sister with my sister CHRISTINA -- HYENAS --
TWIN HYENAAS -- TINS AND DREAM HUTS -- COUNTLESS BEAMERS --
I am the autmatic weapon -- shot at haven with a mac eleven --
STANDARD HEAVEN -- I AM ENDLESS -- SPARKING RHETORIC --
HEARTLESS MONARCH -- sparking rhetoric -- I AM DEFICIT --
I am DEFICIT -- efficiency to torture twin HYENAS -- with a BEAMER --
I am a chinese scissor sister slashing JAPANESE SOLDIERSS--
JAPANESE SOLDIERS ARE KILLED ON BOULDERS WITH OIL--
BLACK SOIL!?? FIRMAMENT -- GERMAN KIDS KILL GEORGE WASHINGTON --
DECLARAION OF INDEPENDENCE!?? SEGREGATION WILL BE ENDLESS -- PENACE --
I'm AJ THE MENACE -- *CRACKS DENTAL* go see the DENTIST --
For I am the soldier of GOD WITH A MILLINEUM ROD --
SPARK RHETORIC WITH HOLY OIL ANNOITING --
POINTING AT CHRISTIAN VERSES -- MISSION HEARSES --
BLITZSCREEN VERSES -- GULLOTINE CHOPS YOU TO SMITHREENS --
POP *DUDES* with GULLOTINES AND SMITREENS --
I'm GOLIATH Vs. DAVID -- A PARIAH VS THE MESSIAH --
I am KING OF STARDUST -- BARS LUST OVER BAR DUN--
BAR DUST -- BAR DONE -- BAR FUN -- BAR NONE --
I am the CABBAGE HERDE FROM EMANCIPATION PRCOLOMATION
STATUS NATION CONQUER LAYMEN -- POPPING MATICS!?? STOP ABRASIONS --
CONQUER RABID!?? STOP ABRASIONS -- POPPING MAGNUMS!?? CONDOM TROJAN --
For I am the endless BLIZZARD -- the storm at night/knight --
I AM THE ENDLESS BLIZZARD -- the storm at night/knight
PORN DELIGHT -- SCORCHING FLAMES SCORCH TERRAIN --
POURING RAIN/REIGN I'm INSANE -- NOVACANE --
I am a endless blizzard killing lizards in a blizzard --
I am the epitome of reason and endless seasons
COMETH OH LIGHT -- I am the second coming of christ --
COMETH OH MIGHT -- I STRIKE LIKE LIGHTNING -- PLIGHT
SIGHT -- ALL EYES ON ME -- SIGHT -- DOG FIGHTS SLOPPY --
FOR I AM THE ULTIMATE WRITER OF SUPREMACY HAVING SEX WITH A GULLOTINE..
I'm a freaking gullotine -- SEAING THINGS FROM KISS THE RING --
KISS THE RING -- ZING ZING ZING ZING ZING ZING!!
I am the censor(SENSOR) breaking' pencils - there is no equal --
THERE IS NO EQUAL -- I killed steeples in cathedrals --
I am the LORD AND SAVIOR -- BORN CREATOR BORN CREATOR --
SWORN TO VAPOR SWORN TO VAPORS SWORN TO VAPORS --
I killed creators on the foot of thing -- SOMETHING SOMETHING SOMETHING--
I caught bullets as Z MULLET Z MULLET Z MULLET --
I'm torturing SKULLS TORTURING SKULLS TORTURING SKULLS -
I am BOLD MC -- cold as a winter fleece - I AMZING!!
I am ZING I AM ZING I AM ZING!!--
I killed GULLOTINES I KILLED GULLOTINES I KILLED GULLOTINES --
I KILLED GULLOTINES I KILLED GULLOTINES I KILLED GULLOTINES~~
I KILLED FREAKING GULLOTINES I KILELD FREAKING GULLOTINES I KILLED FREAKING GULLOTINES --
I AM NOTHING I AM NOTHING I AM NOTHING I AM NOTHING I AM NOTHING I AM NOTHING --
I AM NOTHING I AM NOTHING I AM NOTHING I AM NOTHING I AM NOTHING--
I AM A SCISSOR SISTER I AM A SCISSOR SISTER I AM A SCISSOR SISTER--
I AM A SCISSOR SISTER I AM A SCISSOR SISTER I AM A SCISSOR SISTER --
I *CUT* IRISES I CUT IRISES I CUT IRSIES I CUT IRISES I CUT IRSES I CUT IRISES --
I CUT IRSIES -- I'm cutting fiber beings I'm cutting fiber beings I'm cutting fiber beings

[Master Rock]

Take a whiff of the vast air
while so many go on unaware of their environment without a care
as the elements initiate their affair
reality strikes awakening all their nightmares
besides where the particles collide
as a matter of fact, in a blink...let em reside
as my third eye creeps upon its climb...gently trudging scraping up on the inside
tearing the fabric, unraveling lies, as the pieces of the earth cried,
shuffling while we're left peeping through its tethered blinds...
nothing to see here but the misaligned... as the light steeps into the magnificence of its find,
a spark spreads through the traversal hand of time
and space
who determines the center of the universe's place...a divine taste?
while revelation laced, exposed the vine, the matters are all composed of the maker's mind in case
I find the grandfather being clocked in, now the chronological's hands are in a held in a bind, spin
the doctor's vision of my time
I seek the breath of the wise grand design
munching the fire where darkness dines
into the void who crawls inside?
wormholes conception redesigns the rift of distancing stars
kicking the dust behind us, we feed on the astral plane and watch y'all starve
to be, who we are, finger licks, chomping on that bar
the elements of a milky way
devouring galaxy tracing dots along the sky kissing mars
interstellar milking the ways
behind the bars contracting sars, discovering viruses exposed beyond the trapped jars
burst broken disclosed, let's suppose, a star spangle banner with hundreds of countries on earth as it froze...
but who exactly will mind their manners inside of this fold?
politicking the realness, let alone, don't let them tamper
with their dirty laundry...therefore who's cleaning out the hamper?
I'm exhausted by ones who scamper nevertheless
but this is serious business
black hole sun
won't you come or are we all to succumb
the void of perception
embedded in our psyche, what's a decoy
ohhh. boy...the media rises...what's next to be deployed?
the passerby's don't notice a thing
while I reflect on the inside and hear the buzz of the ring while patiently waiting for what their demise will bring
as I notice reality
bittersweetly trying to live inside this thing
cavities decay
while darkness seems to eventually ruin the day as it clings

[Nigma]

Sin

Well, I can say your mechanics have improved (at times) from what I've seen of you before. I assume by the writing style you are Jeso. There are demonstrations of your understanding the basic rhythm of four through the line, it's just unfortunate that you cannot remove yourself from this typecast of verse, where it's just a very loose flex and rambling of saying what you are, without ever taking a step back and writing something from a different perspective. Hopefully one day you can step outside the box, because repeating the same thing will continue to place a very low ceiling to the enjoyment of your content from a readers perspective.



Master Rock

Content
A solid stab, definitely kept it relevant to the topic. A very abstract verse, perhaps a bit too abstract in my opinion. After my initial read I do not have a firm understanding of the message in the verse, just saw many introspective references to the picture while falling down a third eye vision rabbit hole of self reflection and a different and darker perception of reality because of what you know and no one else does. It was just very vague, regardless had some stand out lines. My favourite below

"I find the grandfather being clocked in, now the chronological's hands are in a held in a bind"

Mechanics
On the scale of flow vs content your duck definitely weights heavier on the content side. Internals are scarce, mutlisyllabic rhymes at a minimum, not much in the way of transitions. There were times when the imagery on the content side was stepped but, but on the other hand I feel much of what you said could have been worded more rhythmically. Fortunately you did not need a perfect verse to take this week handily.






Prognosis
Pretty cut and dry here. I'd say Sig demonstrated some more advanced mechanics at time but that is the only category I could argue edges in his favour. Master Rock takes it with a more complete verse that better encapsulates the topic.

+1 Master Rock

[Adverse]

Sinacog, I’m not trolling when I say I do really like your style, it’s your own and you own it. I hate how your stories never become anything though, really wanted to hear about the adventures of the Chinese scissor sisters, honestly sounded like an alright premise, but you go off on tangents and end up having nothing to do with the topic. It’s crazy to me. Thanks for participating this season bud.

Master Rock
Thought this was a little spacey (no pun intended) the story wasn’t really linear in my opinion, compared to other pieces you’ve dropped this season at least. But some of the imagery was excellent per usual. You have a knack of bringing the topic picture to life, even when you do a more free flowing verse you’re always able to nail down the picturesque elements of the piece. Decent work

V/Master Rock it was an obvious choice

[Sharp]

Sinacog without short line limits is something to see. I fucked with the start, almost like he was setting up like an action story or something but he fell into talking about himself... AJ the Menace making an appearance felt so out of place. If Sinacog built his verse around the picture it could be dope. Like Adverse said, I wanted to see the subjects doing that AJ the Menace shit. Let the characters crack dental next time

Master rock dropped what I'm assuming was a key. Felt clunky at times because the goal was def the end rhyme, but tonally, it fit the picture pretty well. Like, it had a similar pallette if that makes sense?

V/master rock