01-11-2014, 09:34 AM | #1 | |
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awwww
Ridiculing little imps
think their ways of wise these tricks magic!!! like a gay surprise but hey... Que Sera Sera with me they ain't getting far I ain't gay but with their ways they'll talk shit some more... honestly the stuff they spit is like fried raging bore so I leave them en-caged in double bladed swords to inflict there own demise record it while I strangle them with the cable cord an the LAN wire you payed me for Cable guy!
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01-11-2014, 11:54 PM | #2 |
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nice little poetic drop i guess lol..the structure makes it seem that way lol wasnt feeling the first part but it picked up more towards the end.
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01-12-2014, 09:24 AM | #3 |
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Who gives a fuck what you think lol
can I get some real feed here thanks... exidick.. I mean little bitch....exocunt?... no no I mean exodouche thats it thats got to be your name? maybe you have an alias? Hey if I was cool I would change my name like everyday... an be a total sell out... but I guess I'm not... dam
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01-12-2014, 09:29 AM | #4 |
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Last 3 lines were okay. i don't like your structure or wording. idk if you were taking a shot at Wise Ways, but it was pretty weak as a punch or as a concept. "fried raging bore" didnt make sense to me.
most of your verses would be better as cypher posts. they are short and freeform and dont have a strong sense of direction. it might be why you dont get too much feed. keep keyin
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01-12-2014, 09:44 AM | #5 | |
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I was simply writing on the scene you see in the video. I like comedy... I guess I could have added more too it. Thanks for the feed! the fried raging bore was a play on words. The spit being what they cook a boar or pig on. also you could read it more like this "honestly the stuff they spit is like fried raging bore" It could also mean that it is boring Thanks for the feed
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awwww i love cock!!, learn how to write clever, noome cares u wack fag, omg stop, op will put spam in a box!, trash |
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