09-30-2018, 09:10 PM | #1 |
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Ryno vs. Listen - Ryno WINS
NBL Season 11 Week 5 Due FRIDAY 10/5/18 Minimum - 10 lines Max - 20 lines - NO BITING - NO FEEDING - NO SWAYING - AGREE ON LINE LIMIT - IF NOT AGREED, MUST MATCH 1st VERSE Don't edit after your opponent has posted. 2nd person to post can't edit after the 1st vote comes in. Don't be an idiot. Don't use your opponent's pic unless it's a pic battle. May God have mercy on your souls! @Ryno @Listen Last edited by ~RustyGunZ~; 09-30-2018 at 09:14 PM. |
09-30-2018, 10:55 PM | #2 |
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09-30-2018, 11:22 PM | #3 |
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10-04-2018, 07:07 PM | #4 |
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@Listen you're mine now pussy...
I'm Ali to these new texcees, come n get ya grill lumped dummy No matter what battle Liston, he'll get his jaw cracked till he's floored like Sonny Cash at hand? I'll shame this man, he 's never been able to flash big guap Only time u 'bantu knots' together is gettin' ya wig fixed at the African hair shop I'm bout to let it go, hit ya fam w/ the blam or kill ya peeps really slow? These 'arms'll leave ya kids breatheless', ill bear hug ya daughter till the bitches head explodes This cat is wack, couldnt flip a O let alone lift n blast the mac if he's 'pushing weight', its cuz i buried em alive 6 ft, trapped w/ rats I'm known for rippin' viscious body shots, man this cat'll be tippin' Uppercut'll lift 'listen up' like I was trying to get the whole class attention |
10-04-2018, 09:15 PM | #5 |
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They say big baller Ry a headache, but he got lit up after all
Laid there motionless in a body bag as his concussion protocol Get bodied closed casket after fumes from the boiler room, It was a cold call and enough Diesel to leave you without a view Now you wanna knuckle up? Your hand game is wus & scrawny & if we being honest Ry, I’ve seen more GAIN(s) at a hood laundry Cocky fuck that big head look like 'shoot at me apparel' Give you a REAL reason to be gas'd…from dodging my barrel Kill yourself! I swear to God… that’s your number 1 civic duty if I was Ry I’d be on suicide watch like seeing a bad smith movie
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Whoever said Listen is Swerve is wrong lol V/ Ryno
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10-06-2018, 04:00 AM | #8 |
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Listen I'm sure I've peeped some of your stuff an it was slot better. This was a white wash though you proper slept on this. Spend more time on your concepts and researching opposition. Then think how you can make something that really stings. Or is LoLz.
Ryno done better before but he didn't need to here TBH. Opener was lotb V ry |
10-08-2018, 01:33 PM | #9 |
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I'm Ali to these new texcees, come n get ya grill lumped dummy
No matter what battle Liston, he'll get his jaw cracked till he's floored like Sonny (Pretty good opener. Wording is crisp. Not a fan of a List for Listen name flip (wouldn’t pronounce the T). The tie ins were good though) Cash at hand? I'll shame this man, he 's never been able to flash big guap Only time u 'bantu knots' together is gettin' ya wig fixed at the African hair shop (Good too. Wording is crisp again. Bantu knots is clever. The tie in a bit long winded but doesn’t take away from the punch much) I'm bout to let it go, hit ya fam w/ the blam or kill ya peeps really slow? These 'arms'll leave ya kids breatheless', ill bear hug ya daughter till the bitches head explodes (This was just okay. It’s like you had two different concepts going - physically squeezing her and shooting her - but you didn’t weave them together well imo) This cat is wack, couldnt flip a O let alone lift n blast the mac if he's 'pushing weight', its cuz i buried em alive 6 ft, trapped w/ rats (I’m missing something. I’m not getting the trapped with rats meaning/connection to pushing weight.) I'm known for rippin' viscious body shots, man this cat'll be tippin' Uppercut'll lift 'listen up' like I was trying to get the whole class attention (Good concept. You could have tied it in stronger. Some wording issues - you kinda gotta just look at the “listen up” part by itself for it to work. This wasn’t bad though. I thought it was a solid closer) They say big baller Ry a headache, but he got lit up after all Laid there motionless in a body bag as his concussion protocol (Lol I didn’t get this one at first. This is pretty good. Headache is a good tie in. My only issue is you calling the tent a “body bag”) Get bodied closed casket after fumes from the boiler room, It was a cold call and enough Diesel to leave you without a view (I’m getting the reference and catching the tie ins but the connections are too loose. The wording isn’t clean and it’s not clear what you’re saying. Now you wanna knuckle up? Your hand game is wus & scrawny & if we being honest Ry, I’ve seen more GAIN(s) at a hood laundry (Lol this is okay. Slightly basic but the concept is funny. Wording is hindering it a bit too) Cocky fuck that big head look like 'shoot at me apparel' Give you a REAL reason to be gas'd…from dodging my barrel (This was just too basic of a flip. Big head was a good tie in but punch was too basic) Kill yourself! I swear to God… that’s your number 1 civic duty if I was Ry I’d be on suicide watch like seeing a bad Smith (I don’t get this at all) Ry came with it and took this by a comfortable margin. His wording was very crisp and had good concepts while I think listen had okay concepts and struggle with the execution. Rhyno takes this one pretty comfortably. Mvgt Rhyno |
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