11-27-2018, 10:22 PM | #1 |
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Adonis vs Razah[RAZAH WINS]
NWL:Season I: Week VII
Verses ares due: SUNDAY at 11:59 PM EST Voting ends: TUESDAY at 11:59 PM EST Line Limit: Minimum:10 lines, Max: 30 Voting on 2 battles is required. TOPIC: @Adonis @Razah Last edited by Inno; 12-06-2018 at 04:36 PM. |
11-27-2018, 10:43 PM | #2 |
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Chiggity Check yourself before you....
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11-28-2018, 07:04 PM | #3 |
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12-02-2018, 01:51 PM | #4 |
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I'ma start writing at some point today, hopefully I can finish. If not, ext to tomorrow possibly? I'll keep it short regardless, I know u usually drop around 16 ish so I'll try and hot around that number
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12-02-2018, 03:45 PM | #5 |
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cool. ill post tomorrow
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12-03-2018, 02:33 AM | #6 |
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My bad, but what a dope ass pic lol...
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12-03-2018, 05:22 PM | #7 |
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My last thought.. Reach-
It doesn't hurt to. It's something I'd do if I were you I never did- A mountain I created so I can burst through & it seems simple when I'm void of mind All the twist and turns & jagged edges let me enjoy the climb Unique if I must say- Parts of the journey had me brittle & weak If I could share this path with a soul with the same vision as me It'd be worth while, I'd be more in touch & feel like Earth's child But it's me against the world like it was fitted with a turnstile I could use all the help, it seems selfish indeed The moment I fall, I stall. Just reach- There might be someone who would help when in need |
12-03-2018, 06:38 PM | #8 |
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This is that obstacle course
That, Flat Earthers outnumber ‘rounders’, observe. Drones glued to a web, worldwide in fact ‘Engines’ get searched, yeah, that’s the genome we lacked 20/20 used so close to the face…Damn, what a waste Cuz 10 is a dime, but a nickel worth chase But 2 cents still won’t ever buy you some taste Learn your place, either drugs or leggings, we both getting laced This that Make America Great Again!!! That migrate to win That, you can’t cross a boarder that’s been closed within But you CAN cross hairs and get buried without a cross for sins This that catholic addict, bones buried in attic A touch of god touching lost young youths is a habit “In the name of our savior” This that masonic behavior Chants so demonic for a chance full of promise Pumping veins for the vain This is a game, we’ve been played This that, I’ve reached the tipping point and sometimes you just gotta Let Go… TOPIC:
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12-04-2018, 11:27 AM | #10 |
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Talk about tough...I went through two reads of both verses and was conflicted....Adonis brought some fire inspired terror however digressed in regards to the topic...Razah placed me on that journey of climbing and one can envision themselves in the overall experience due to his detailed storytelling angle. Therefore I'm giving it to Razah.
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12-06-2018, 04:35 PM | #11 |
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This was. Good short to the point battle. You both used the topic very well and didn’t miss a detail in your interpretation. Honestly having a back abd forth with this one. Razah came with a more descriptive wording which gave his verse great imagery that captured the topic nicely. Also enjoyed the emotional tone it had aswell. Adonis came with a more direct in your face take this type of piece lol. While Razahs emotion was subtle Adonis’ was the focal point of his writing. I enjoyed the quick short lines.
Overall man I think I’m going with Razah on this one. I felt like his wording was a bit more polished and there for lead to a smoother read. Razah |
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