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Old 11-27-2018, 10:22 PM   #1
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NWL:Season I: Week VII



Verses ares due: SUNDAY at 11:59 PM EST

Voting ends: TUESDAY at 11:59 PM EST

Line Limit: Minimum:10 lines, Max: 30

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Old 11-27-2018, 10:43 PM   #2
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Old 11-28-2018, 07:04 PM   #3
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Old 12-02-2018, 01:51 PM   #4
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I'ma start writing at some point today, hopefully I can finish. If not, ext to tomorrow possibly? I'll keep it short regardless, I know u usually drop around 16 ish so I'll try and hot around that number
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My last thought.. Reach-

It doesn't hurt to. It's something I'd do if I were you
I never did- A mountain I created so I can burst through
& it seems simple when I'm void of mind
All the twist and turns & jagged edges let me enjoy the climb
Unique if I must say- Parts of the journey had me brittle & weak
If I could share this path with a soul with the same vision as me
It'd be worth while, I'd be more in touch & feel like Earth's child
But it's me against the world like it was fitted with a turnstile
I could use all the help, it seems selfish indeed
The moment I fall, I stall.
Just reach- There might be someone who would help when in need
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This is that obstacle course
That, Flat Earthers outnumber ‘rounders’, observe.
Drones glued to a web, worldwide in fact
‘Engines’ get searched, yeah, that’s the genome we lacked
20/20 used so close to the face…Damn, what a waste
Cuz 10 is a dime, but a nickel worth chase
But 2 cents still won’t ever buy you some taste
Learn your place, either drugs or leggings, we both getting laced
This that Make America Great Again!!!
That migrate to win
That, you can’t cross a boarder that’s been closed within
But you CAN cross hairs and get buried without a cross for sins
This that catholic addict, bones buried in attic
A touch of god touching lost young youths is a habit
“In the name of our savior”
This that masonic behavior
Chants so demonic for a chance full of promise
Pumping veins for the vain
This is a game, we’ve been played
This that, I’ve reached the tipping point
and sometimes you just gotta
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20/20 used so close to the face…Damn, what a waste
Cuz 10 is a dime, but a nickel worth chase
But 2 cents still won’t ever buy you some taste
Learn your place, either drugs or leggings, we both getting laced
This that Make America Great Again!!!
That migrate to win
That, you can’t cross a boarder that’s been closed within
But you CAN cross hairs and get buried without a cross for sins
That won it, flames...I enjoyed both verses tbh but that sealed shit.

V / Adonis...
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Old 12-04-2018, 11:27 AM   #10
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Talk about tough...I went through two reads of both verses and was conflicted....Adonis brought some fire inspired terror however digressed in regards to the topic...Razah placed me on that journey of climbing and one can envision themselves in the overall experience due to his detailed storytelling angle. Therefore I'm giving it to Razah.
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This was. Good short to the point battle. You both used the topic very well and didn’t miss a detail in your interpretation. Honestly having a back abd forth with this one. Razah came with a more descriptive wording which gave his verse great imagery that captured the topic nicely. Also enjoyed the emotional tone it had aswell. Adonis came with a more direct in your face take this type of piece lol. While Razahs emotion was subtle Adonis’ was the focal point of his writing. I enjoyed the quick short lines.

Overall man I think I’m going with Razah on this one. I felt like his wording was a bit more polished and there for lead to a smoother read.

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