08-21-2018, 09:50 PM | #1 |
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Raizen vs Defiant vs John Dillinger - John Dillinger wins
NBL Season 11 Week 7 Due SUNDAY 8/26/18 Minimum - 10 lines Max - 20 lines - NO BITING - NO FEEDING - NO SWAYING - AGREE ON LINE LIMIT - IF NOT AGREED, MUST MATCH 1st VERSE Don't edit after your opponent has posted. 2nd person to post can't edit after the 1st vote comes in. Don't be an idiot. Don't use your opponent's pic unless it's a pic battle. May God have mercy on your souls!
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08-22-2018, 03:42 PM | #2 |
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08-22-2018, 07:07 PM | #3 |
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@Raizen
mad I stole his shorty she told me that he’s a cheap thrill had bro seeing more red than the Henny bottle that we killed swear dude’s my kid, your mothers landing strips a runway almost brought SPF 50 when I heard I was facing my son Raiz both are near the bottom, so it’s no chore to bury ya and leave DR right beneath us like a map of North America not fighting if we meet, pull out the fire make his face fall have em show up and call you Blue like umpires in baseball I’ve yet to see a dope line or for that matter a smart bar like a white boy in the hood you won’t ever be dropping hard R @Defiant feel like leaping then hop frog, punches leave em with lockjaw then show up to your crib knockin like I’m looking for a lost dog told your sister switch it up or I’m out, slackin on the neck game shes smart to start giving me head from the side, call it her left brain bullets for this chump, nothing but a slouch and a whiner come fill you up with more lead than a pencil pouch in a binder don’t come in asking for 10, acting like you’re some star how do you expect to win here, you’re 0-5 in a league that requires 1 bar off yourself or I will, no one cares about this mans death not talking a backwards label name when I say the strap won’t Jam, Def Last edited by John Dillinger; 08-22-2018 at 10:14 PM. |
08-23-2018, 10:46 PM | #4 |
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ayo Dillenger....
bullets'll fly on anyone who knows this candy clown I'll spray once. and his whole fam'll get it, like his hand-me-downs no one'll miss u, dog, and that rattles ur hurt pride mom'll see ur corpse float down a canal...wishing it happened the first time i don't even care if ur bitch come to town and she wanna get down i'll leave a slug in her cunt if she wanna start fuckin a round my bars are unbelievable when I'm droppin these hits ur style's unreal, cuz reality bites and STILL wont copy ur shit get shit crackin' when I'm packin the glock There's a Time to Kill, and he gon' swing from his neck like a grandfather clock Uh..."Defiant"? oh, you're some kinda rebel? you run around with a crew? name sound like the gamer tag of a kid yelling "Mom, get out of my room!" hear about me, all you see is stickups and gun clips when I hear "Defiant"...all I see are selfies with duck lips anyone fearin' this cupcake? the answer is FUCK NO balls so small, if he grabs em, he'll finger his butt hole my barrage of punches'll make his jaw flap so fast, he gon' look like Bone Thugs switched to mumble rap u too soft to battle. a sensitive bitch I'll splatter all ova the scene. u'll just break down. like my next verse, when you're voting for me Last edited by Raizen; 08-24-2018 at 11:10 PM. |
08-27-2018, 12:57 PM | #7 |
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mad I stole his shorty she told me that he’s a cheap thrill
had bro seeing more red than the Henny bottle that we killed st8 swear dude’s my kid, your mothers landing strips a runway almost brought SPF 50 when I heard I was facing my son Raiz cool name flip both are near the bottom, so it’s no chore to bury ya and leave DR right beneath us like a map of North America had to look up what u meant by DR, the line is stretch to use first letter of both names not fighting if we meet, pull out the fire make his face fall have em show up and call you Blue like umpires in baseball what? I’ve yet to see a dope line or for that matter a smart bar like a white boy in the hood you won’t ever be dropping hard R lol this was cool bullets'll fly on anyone who knows this candy clown I'll spray once. and his whole fam'll get it, like his hand-me-downs nice no one'll miss u, dog, and that rattles ur hurt pride mom'll see ur corpse float down a canal...wishing it happened the first time ok i don't even care if ur bitch come to town and she wanna get down i'll leave a slug in her cunt if she wanna start fuckin a round lol not bad my bars are unbelievable when I'm droppin these hits ur style's unreal, cuz reality bites and STILL wont copy ur shit hits get shit crackin' when I'm packin the glock There's a Time to Kill, and he gon' swing from his neck like a grandfather clock decent closer As you can tell I only reviewed the verses you both wrote against each other. With that, I have Raz taking with a couple harder hits. John wasn't bad but didn't do enough to take the W here. |
08-28-2018, 10:13 AM | #8 |
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08-28-2018, 03:59 PM | #9 |
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mad I stole his shorty she told me that he’s a cheap thrill
had bro seeing more red than the Henny bottle that we killed lolish, I like the angle it's fresh swear dude’s my kid, your mothers landing strips a runway almost brought SPF 50 when I heard I was facing my son Raiz decent nameplay, cool enough both are near the bottom, so it’s no chore to bury ya and leave DR right beneath us like a map of North America nah not feelin, compiling their initials is a reach & domincan being below NA is mehh not fighting if we meet, pull out the fire make his face fall have em show up and call you Blue like umpires in baseball dece... kinda basic blew/blue wp I’ve yet to see a dope line or for that matter a smart bar like a white boy in the hood you won’t ever be dropping hard R lol this is okay feel like leaping then hop frog, punches leave em with lockjaw then show up to your crib knockin like I’m looking for a lost dog good wording, avg bar for a show up at your door idea.. okay told your sister switch it up or I’m out, slackin on the neck game shes smart to start giving me head from the side, call it her left brain okay okay... solid lol bullets for this chump, nothing but a slouch and a whiner come fill you up with more lead than a pencil pouch in a binder nah too basic, needed more for a lead/pencil line imo don’t come in asking for 10, acting like you’re some star how do you expect to win here, you’re 0-5 in a league that requires 1 bar swag, good jab off yourself or I will, no one cares about this mans death not talking a backwards label name when I say the strap won’t Jam, Def solid np, pretty dece JD I like ur short & direct style... nothing I would call an absolute banger but I think you were pretty consistent with 'solid' lines throughout... cool read vs. bullets'll fly on anyone who knows this candy clown I'll spray once. and his whole fam'll get it, like his hand-me-downs ehh, saw too many hand me down lines back in the day like this, flip was okayish as a gun bar no one'll miss u, dog, and that rattles ur hurt pride mom'll see ur corpse float down a canal...wishing it happened the first time decent i don't even care if ur bitch come to town and she wanna get down i'll leave a slug in her cunt if she wanna start fuckin a round no lol... very 2004ish with a circle/fuckin around idea my bars are unbelievable when I'm droppin these hits ur style's unreal, cuz reality bites and STILL wont copy ur shit decent statement bar on the phrase.. okay get shit crackin' when I'm packin the glock There's a Time to Kill, and he gon' swing from his neck like a grandfather clock the he gon swing part wasn't a great tie in for me, this was cool tho for a clock/time ref oh, you're some kinda rebel? you run around with a crew? name sound like the gamer tag of a kid yelling "Mom, get out of my room!" lolish but mehhh hear about me, all you see is stickups and gun clips when I hear "Defiant"...all I see are selfies with duck lips nah anyone fearin' this cupcake? the answer is FUCK NO balls so small, if he grabs em, he'll finger his butt hole lolol, funny but light my barrage of punches'll make his jaw flap so fast, he gon' look like Bone Thugs switched to mumble rap nah u too soft to battle. a sensitive bitch I'll splatter all ova the scene. u'll just break down. like my next verse, when you're voting for me been done I've got JD here, Raizen's second half hurt him
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08-28-2018, 06:20 PM | #10 |
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Vote jd. Can't break down right this second but in short.
Jd was consistent an direct. Nothing overly memorable mind but for the most part everything got a tick. Raiz could be pretty decent but just use sway to many played ideas. But that ain't a critisism cus how were you to know I guess. But I would suggest upping the creativity. Vote jd comfortably Oh but whoever's posting the canal line... Props. That shit was dope |
08-28-2018, 06:52 PM | #11 |
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mad I stole his shorty she told me that he’s a cheap thrill
had bro seeing more red than the Henny bottle that we killed Decent I guess swear dude’s my kid, your mothers landing strips a runway almost brought SPF 50 when I heard I was facing my son Raiz I liked this both are near the bottom, so it’s no chore to bury ya and leave DR right beneath us like a map of North America nah not fighting if we meet, pull out the fire make his face fall have em show up and call you Blue like umpires in baseball nah I’ve yet to see a dope line or for that matter a smart bar like a white boy in the hood you won’t ever be dropping hard R ok Vs bullets'll fly on anyone who knows this candy clown I'll spray once. and his whole fam'll get it, like his hand-me-downs Liked this no one'll miss u, dog, and that rattles ur hurt pride mom'll see ur corpse float down a canal...wishing it happened the first time nah i don't even care if ur bitch come to town and she wanna get down i'll leave a slug in her cunt if she wanna start fuckin a round awful my bars are unbelievable when I'm droppin these hits ur style's unreal, cuz reality bites and STILL wont copy ur shit I liked the concept but execution was lacking get shit crackin' when I'm packin the glock There's a Time to Kill, and he gon' swing from his neck like a grandfather clock nah Decent battle...a few misses from both, Son Raiz was lotb for me. Vote JD
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08-28-2018, 07:56 PM | #13 |
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I’ll break down my vote shortly but I got JD here some simple stuff but some clever stuff. Raiz is aright too just needs more aggression I think with his bar. @Defiant is a faggot so you both win for showing but I got JD here
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