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Old 07-02-2017, 04:28 AM   #1
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Hittin rock bottom..
but thats my foundation
To come back stronger on em.
I gotta be patient.
Said I wouldnt make it.
I came from the basement.
Now we at the top..
you should see the look on they faces!
Half of my city dont fuck with me
But I dont let it phase me.
Holding onto memories of our past together pains me.
But it changed me.
Total 180.
Never thought Id see the light
man life is crazy.
Just cause Im calm and humble now,
dont mean I wont rumble pal.
Chew these rappers spit em out.
But I aint full yet.
You could Still hear my stomach growl.
Yall dumb it down.
wheres the substance?
Give us something we could feel.
Besides the trap houses, doin drills in the field.
Who the fuck told us to get respect you gotta shoot n steal?
Prove our gangsta to everybody constantly.
Consciously..
..Make decisions that put us in positions to proceed cautiously.
Walk with heat..
...Dont know if he gon dap you up
or draw the piece.
When you walkin on the street!
Now you peep my artistry?
Paint pictures for yall to see.
Wanna be happy my life is prospering.
But depression gets in and I fall to knees.
Pray that I can make it through Autumn leafs Fallin from trees.
Just until next year..
...Ima be in Cali you can bank on it.
Put my money where my mouth is.
I'll write a check upon that statement bitch.
Dager-ous.
Pretty bitches love my style though. Somethin bout how I smile at hoes.
Time ta go.
Vamonos.
I ain't got time for those.
people place or things thats gon distract me from the common goal..
thats to stack this bread and do all kinda shows
Buy a condo in the hills then just chill homie
layin low.
I aint get all this game for free youngin I had to pay my tolls.
Remember there aint nothin slick to a can of oil.
Dont eva question my street knowledge.
Im here to provide answers for ya.
But know I can destroy ya.
Paranoia.
Hello gorgeous you like foreskin?
I like pork'n.
Stick a fork'n - I'm Kevorkian.
I might Torture men when I find a pen.
My rhymin been the finest since my body left vagina bitch.
Try to come up with lines that itch.
That means they need to bite, ya trick.

Strong demeanah like John cena
cant see me through my palms neitha.
Arms reachin.
Yall tweakin.
Thinking I wont get on either?
Im beyond ether.

Yall Decent

Not the same dude from high school, this time around I mean business.
This industries a mean business.
Full of false prophets,
take me back to when lyrics mattered.
These clowns crowdin around the game ain't got nothin to say...
...guess thats why we callem mumble rappers.
Buncha actors.
Breakin up with my hood bitch how I dump a ratchet.
somethin tragic.
Run from caskets.
I'm tryna escape death, live immortal through my music
something you can't encase in flesh.
Re trace my steps.
Seemed to have lost my mind on the road while I was chasin checks.
But still came correct.
blatant threat. 
Iont got it ima take
either way ima gain respect.
Hang the best.
This a game of chess.
you basic text.
Somewhat foul... flagrant? Yes.
At the bottem of the barrel is where yall laid to rest.
Heart check'em...
...nah fuck it cave his chest...
Get the back story on the switchblade
he gon get a whole in depth.
Focused? Yes.
Nah I lied, sometimes stress derails my mind.
Chemtrails in skies.
Fishtail your ride, I hope you die.

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Old 07-02-2017, 04:28 PM   #2
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This kinda felt like this would probably sound better out loud, as a rap. Lyrically the rhyming was fairly basic but I liked how it all sounded off the cuff, just rhyming for the sake of rhyming. Lost of nice ideas that were coming out quickfire. Some of the rhymes also I think rely on accent and pronounciation. But this was a nice sharpening of the tools.
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Old 07-03-2017, 11:39 PM   #3
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I hate there is no way to show pronunciation on text. Bc ur right lol but good lookin
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Old 07-04-2017, 12:59 AM   #4
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Its not about pronunciation. Im pretty sure the beat of us pronounce shit a milluin different ways as we read the same way i do. This would prolly be fly in a ausio form. A lil rough from the short bar to longbar transitions. Thought there were some gems in there tho.
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Old 07-04-2017, 01:44 AM   #5
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How do you create a certain flow in text, or can you? @Genocide
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I think this was simple, but dope. your format was mostly for audio, and that is ok, no prob at all.

I would like to challenge you to keep the flow, and yet add some complexity to it?
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