10-15-2014, 10:40 PM | #1 |
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Big Apple Fanatics ft. Certain
yo
im the awesomest , no one could rhyme better, im the boss at this, call me Mr. Steinbrenner, the interlocking letters, atop my New Era, were forged in a melting pot with true pressure bow in the presence of greatness, this dynasty keeps giving gifts, its been so damn gracious, if you come round here , repping other places, Ill break your legs like Lawrence Taylor did while wasted, face it, you lames are just so damn basic, 94 proved, winning is contagious, refuse to lose, that's how your supposed to live, go hard on the block, like Charles Oakley did, when its time to battle, I got unlimited ammo, as I go to the pen, its Girardi, Mariano, game over, never sober, love to catch a buzz taking more shots than Alex Rodriguez does, am I coming off hyper?, need to mellow out?, naaa Melo aint out, he just re-signed and bought a bigger house, and to my rivals , just know that your hate is wack, cause in the end, I come through, like jeter in his last at bat, no matter where im at, this passion will never die, cause till the casket drops im representin NY I have 27 rings on my middle finger. Feeling specious, killing speakers with my "luckiest man" chilling speeches. So clear your bleachers. Certain's known from Flatbush to Bronx. The islands are mine: I've got Long, Manhattan and Staten ensconced. Flatten your brims like a quarterback sacked by Yumeniora. When the madness begins, I retract and come back as a human horror. You're out of your league. Go back to the minors, Me? My cash supply is something like Paul O'Neil's bat supplier. The Cap's retired, but I'm Brett Gardner, getting on first with ease. Stealing a base, your girl and Curtis Granderson's job security. The fuck are you thinking? Train's moving. Ride or get off it or I'll have you passing out faster than Calderon in the triangle offense. My swagger rivals obnoxious, strut in and boast a grimey gaze. One look, cowards'll stutter like John Sterling for most of '98. Sublimely great: The Sultan of Swat, Colossus of Clout. Smalls'll be taught in all I'm about: calling my shot and watching it out. Stopping to pose. No autographs please. All the kids want to be me. Broadway's best: They let me drunkenly kiss married women on TV. And you? You're nothing to see, please. You're a bastard, a sad urchin. With delusions of grandeur, you're a bad person — practically Chad Curtis.
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10-15-2014, 10:54 PM | #2 |
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10-16-2014, 09:54 AM | #3 |
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10-16-2014, 03:43 PM | #4 |
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this was kinda weird. at first i was gonna say MW ur style was too basic as far as the rhyming but the sports references were there and they were pretty decent so it worked, but yeah like i say came off a little too bland for me. but then i read certains and he tried to complexify(ur welcome cert) the rhyme schemes while keeping the references and it just didn't really work as well as urs did. came off a little forced and MW was just way more natural in comparison. Overall the idea was pretty cool and the references were pretty good, although i wish they woulda been funnier instead of just yeah here's the reference. its a fact kinda shit. but my vote goes to mw on this one
Vote:mw Also i think if NYCSPITZ attemped this it would be pretty good. u shoulda 3wayd with him, no?
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10-21-2014, 02:50 AM | #5 |
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10-21-2014, 07:32 AM | #6 |
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I dunno, I liked both verses in different respects, Mike Wrecka had the flow downpat. Butter smooth right throughout. It comes off effortless when it's far from it, so many people struggle with 'flow' in text, Mike doesn't here. It's almost too smooth for text to appreciate it and, admittedly, it does come off a little bland from a purely text point of view because of that.
Certain's read to me as if it was the better verse because it had more content, more punchline orientated, more formatted for what it was - a text verse. You would struggle fitting it to a beat, though. I liked it, don't get me wrong, this isn't a slight on him at all... both verses were good, I just enjoyed different things from both, and disliked things from both also. Keep those pens moving!
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10-21-2014, 02:08 PM | #7 |
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This was nice fellas.
Yo mike to test lars theory I rapped your entire verse outloud n tho hes mostly right..there were a few choppy parts. Like a-rod and the ammo/ mariano segments Certain had a dope verse too in the more traditional way. Thst fkn jose Calderon line was fkn crazy Love it The borough ensconced shit Fkn dooe verse certain Nice shit guys
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10-24-2014, 07:36 PM | #8 |
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This was really good. Think I liked certains verse better than Mike though more simple his was nice too. Doesn't have to be to be complex to be a cool verse . But certain did it well while I could feel the arrogance reading this thing.
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10-24-2014, 08:39 PM | #9 |
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is certain from nyc??
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10-25-2014, 12:24 PM | #10 |
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10-25-2014, 01:23 PM | #11 |
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Yall both did your things. Well written on both ends The sports references were great guys.
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10-26-2014, 05:10 PM | #12 |
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This was an amazing piece. can't believe Certain is from NY
then again I'm from the NW area like Wise..I enjoyed both verses the references scattered through both of you was great it showed a different aspect from both writers especially since I hardly see MW write like this regardless I felt like both did. a great job as far as staying in their form of style great work fellas
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