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Old 03-08-2020, 10:50 AM   #1
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Exclamation GWL WK 1: Inno vs NYCSPITZ [INNO WINS]


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GTL WK1: @Inno vs @NYCSPITZ

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Old 03-08-2020, 11:30 AM   #2
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Old 03-08-2020, 08:33 PM   #3
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Old 03-13-2020, 09:02 PM   #5
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@NYCSPITZ ext?
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Old 03-13-2020, 09:03 PM   #6
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yup. I'll take it TOO
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Old 03-14-2020, 11:12 PM   #7
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He talks trouble
Talks a bubble
With the red in the back
You dead cat
I got a sleek leather jacket to combat
The metal jacket
It’s ready
For combat
I got bars for days
You eat chocolate bars for days
My spigga...
U Puerto Rican, you spitting these bars, I’m...
Angry seething I’m killing these bars, I’m...
Raw with it
Jay Electron with it
Enter the Ethernet
Ride out like tron with it
You dim witted
I’m dim with it
You tin titted
Fucking the wizard of oz nigga -
You done did it
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Old 03-14-2020, 11:55 PM   #8
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She’s always right when things go left between us in fights
Her righteous words cut deep into my flesh like a rusty knife
Cold bitter taste of her stare when she knows shes won again
I’m convinced her black heart pumps ice through her veins
Quick to suffocate my progression, a fork in my life’s road
I’m always in her site, though she could kill with her eyes closed
Quick to cut me off before each point is made, shes the blade
No she doesn’t hesitate, not one to delay in choices she makes
Always confident but I guess ignorance is bliss playing with fates
Her and mine, though I’m always left behind when decisions are made
She just sits there looking dead at me with those deep blue eyes
Knowing she’s once again gotten to me with out so much as a try
The love is gone, we don’t fuck anymore she just lays there
The passion is dead, I just do what I need to do and avoid her stare
Friends don’t come over because she reflects to them her worst
Truth is, if virtues could translate to money she’d have an empty purse
The undermining tone plays under my skin like background music
But tonight I take all the abuse she spouts and use it....

You should see the sight, she opened up like an empty road
Letting me in this time without a fight or even reproach
Her cold stare oddly welcoming, almost a warmth to them
Strange how she looks so peaceful that it makes me grin
No longer loud and abusive, tonight she quite and gentle
As I notice Those blue eyes like oceans I could drown in
At this moment remembering what it was that made me jump it
And I whisper to her, “this time I’ll get the last word in”
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Seriously?

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Old 03-15-2020, 11:35 AM   #10
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ny:
lol yeh this aite cool cypher i think some bars actually hit but most of that was a miss still appreciate the run.. some vocab came off nice like you had a good idea you were trying to get out but i didnt feel it came out to its potential you showed..

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pretty cool, very emotional and poetic, i think you really brought it to the match.. cool flow vocab all hot.. all in all i nice little piece i think it was well flushed out..

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i think he brought more to the table.. gl guys
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Old 03-15-2020, 02:36 PM   #11
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Think NYC took this too lightly, no doubt dude is a topical legend but he either A. Thought he was being no showed or B. Just doesn't give a shit. Lol couple okay bars but like Candy said it was a cypher verse hard to accept as a topical.

As for Inno, i thought he wrote on an "safe subject" when regarding the picture but i liked his story through and through and thought it was super relatable, it read smooth and was pretty straight to the point, had some decent vocabulary and imagery here and there and i liked the conclusion. You didn't need much to win this week but i think you did more than enough and am excited to see you get a head of steam as the week's progress!

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Old 03-15-2020, 11:42 PM   #12
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NYC - Typical demotivated stuff from him just to show. Dude just doesn't try but when he does he comes with it, always a gamble whether or not it's going to be shit like this was. lol @ tin titted, rest was meh even as a joke.

Inno - Good shit painting the emotional picture of lopsided arguments with an ignorant SO that wants it her way. Shit hits close to home in terms of past experiences, lol. Solid drop that flowed well throughout, good take on the topic too.

Vote - Is it even needed? Inno obviously, stop fucking around NYC.
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Old 03-16-2020, 09:03 PM   #13
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Inno
I would never hit a woman but it seems like the character in your piece is asking for it.

V Inno, doesn't look like NYC tried. Which is a shame because he's got some talent.
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Old 03-21-2020, 02:46 PM   #14
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NYC must've typed up his verse in 2 minutes lol.

inno- that was some deep good shit. the way you ended it was perfect too. almost chilling. i loved it

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