02-19-2020, 04:34 AM | #1 |
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What about this
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02-19-2020, 04:50 AM | #2 |
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"when I could have chose to flee" at the start sounds rushed to fit the beat, beside of that shit sounds good to me. Enjoying the vibe and what you've put together here. Not a text that sticks with me for any unique reasons, but it's a text I can relate to and vibe with which is dope. Would bump/add to playlist on Spotify.
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02-20-2020, 02:29 PM | #3 |
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Thanks my dude. Also just realized I posted this here and not audio. But thank you for listening
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02-20-2020, 07:23 PM | #4 | |
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02-21-2020, 05:31 AM | #5 |
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You have a lot of talent sister girl...This was very enjoyable.
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02-21-2020, 11:12 PM | #6 |
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Really dope first 34 seconds on the flow, energy and mic presence. You're a lyricist that can bring those punches and I like that. The honestly and the insight to who you are is appreciated and apparent in your lyrics. However, the rest of the track it seems as the energy and harmony isn't as pronounced, no hate just an observation. Overall, I really appreciate you sharing this with us. Thank you.
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02-25-2020, 08:52 AM | #7 | |
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Bodey: Always. Shit was dope. Kinda cool it ended up on OM or I wouldn't have seen it. Kinda forgot there even is a audio section here, cool to be reminded about the opposite.
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However, if you want to hear a trashy mic with (for the time being) bad vocals that needs works and isn't quite on beat, delivery and mic presence still being worked on constantly, then sure, why not?
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02-25-2020, 02:45 PM | #8 |
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your delivery has no attitude or personality to it, it sounds stale, lyrics seem all right, but your whole delivery needs work..then again it might be your voice all together that's turning me off, hard to tell
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