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Old 02-19-2020, 10:37 AM   #1
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Default How To Rap: A Beginner's Guide To Achieving Online Recognition

"Any fool can know. The point is to understand." - Albert Einstein


1.) Starting Out and Avoiding Typical Rookie Mistakes

Hop hop is a confession, I can't promise you'll be the best
But you can follow these six steps to achieve a modicum of success
Remember that gush of fresh air when you were choking out of breath?
You started spittin' for the same reason you started smoking cigarettes
The hope of fitting in; yet the light you emit probably darkened quick
Was hard to admit you loved the art and wanted to be part of it
But you dove right in; Understanding a flow is so very tough
For an introduction you must accept the fact that you're going to suck
Hope you're up for taunts from vets and watching them all tease you
Rhyming one syllable at a time with no multi's to read through
Every topical seems new; I have some advice to burn
Concentrate on aligning words that don't appear to rhyme at first
I'll confirm this isn't the time to let spelling consume you
How a word is written when you spit it should be irrelevant to you
Development's crucial; 'Best' doesn't necessarily have to rhyme with 'Vest'
I'll confess my first line, "don't test my hidden machine gun nests"
Yes, one mental image can drum up quite the dumb sentence
It's a typical line from a newcomer; Simple, and has a gun reference
Yet strangely effective, that is until you peel back the whole fruit
Cuz real shooters don't rap... and real rappers don't shoot
The gun phase is so moot, you won't proofread a post for months
Too closed down; Once you do endless possibilites open up
If you wrote enough to make your mark you'd have pages of garbage
Think your posts are amazing? They aren't, but that's the pace of the process
Most will copy their favorite artists, you need to find your own voice
Yet the style you're good at may not be your style of choice
That's beside the point, working backwards saves plenty of time
But for now you should harmonize on the last word of every line
Coincide the syllables so they rhyme, don't forget to trim your fat first
Condense your rap terms, remember that how you present your verse matters
The learning curve never flatters, tie it together and make a knot
Anyone tells you they spit this on the spot, trust me, they did not
You're seeing a finished product brimming with confidence from the best around
These clowns worked on their text for hours, don't let it get you down
Invest in yourself, a rap name can run careers to the ground
So don't call yourself "Jay" or "Lil" anything if you want to appear profound.

2.) Punchlines and Learning the Complexities of a Verse

The time for punchlines is here, you'll think your first one is hot as fuck
I remember mine, "a-head of my time", but a clever line is not enough
When what you drop is viewed as a failure, most jump off of the roof
They stop their improvement, but not caring is NOT an excuse
Embrace the possibility of losing, cuz it's definitely a sure thing
But relax it's still early, and all your respectability is worth earning
This is your shortcut through the weeds, hope you following my steps up
Tell a personal story at least once... topicals always get love
Don't be a cocky fuck, if a good idea came then type away
Why be afraid of something that might never see the light of day?
If one of your punchlines seems great, don't shine a a light on that shit
Using CAPITAL LETTERS and exclamation points!... way too obvious
Don't bother with it, controlling what the reader knows is smarter
If they miss something it's on them, the subtle approach hits harder
Use dashes-to-slow your bars, feel free to give it a try whenever
It looks better and it's smoother for connecting lines together
When rhyme schemes get severed don't fall back to your weakness
The first word of the next line is all that you need kid
'Did' you understand? Although it should be a last resort
Connecting four words can move you forwards, you need to practise more
And stay the course; Rhyme the final word for as many lines as you can
Do not double back if you can help it, why revise a masterplan?
You're now a rapper man, so say something that gets attention
But stick to what you know best whenever you spit a sentence
If you fake it you'll regret it, they will see right through that noise
Remember weaker bars can be disguised by a meaningful voice
Call it fulfilling a void, but avoid topics that distract your wit
With no warning you'll see multi's forming, often by accident
Spotting them is half the battle, continue connecting the dots slow
Bridging those pitfalls while cautiously stepping over the potholes
God knows making multi syllable bars are basic
As vocab raises, rhyming 'get' and 'shit' will even start to make sense
It's all in how you say it, rhyming 'eyes' and 'pause' isn't any better
But disguise them amongst other words and they'll really fit together
Hide a lie between two truths, in practise it works forever
Just remember de-feet and urine lines will never be considered clever.

3.) Moving Forward by Working Backwards

Once you think of the punchline first, you're on the right track
Seems that working backwards is the unspoken secret of rap
Pick your ending and keep it in tact, then beef the core back up
Save your most relevant set up line until just before the punch
You can even add a corny pun, set up lines allow this stuff
Sound like algebra? Nah, let me show you how it's done...

Example from 'Meme':

Concept - "drone" on/talking relentlessly
Hook - aerial view

Set up --> The gravity of the situation can no longer carry you through
Set up --> You fearing the truth, it's scary to you when the stereo's mute
Relevant set up --> So if you wonder why I'm up in space staring at you...
Punchline --> It's cuz I can only watch you drone on and on from an aerial view
Connect --> You don't have a voice like Ariel dude...


Then on to the next bar, rinse and repeat about forty times
Don't worry about the Little Mermaid reference, wordplay overpowers a corny line
Pop culture territory inspires, and famous persons are favored
Don't be afraid to pre-write bars and insert them into verses later
In simple terms give your ideas a way to gel a bit
Now let's make an entire bar rhyme, and have it maintain its relevance...

Example from 'Rhymehunter':

Teaching seven deadly sins cuz I'm John Doe by choice
Screaming heaven let me in but I lost most my voice


Each word lines up with a droids precision when remote controlled
You need that robot flow to match, as above so below
Every syllable is cohesive, one word off would destroy the illusion
You have to work hard at the start in order to enjoy the conclusion
Class is in session students, all homework is due quick
Off color remarks are only read if you don't follow the blue print
The key to success is prudence, we've come full circle in this revolution
But if you suffer e-motion sickness how can you ever expect a movement?

4.) Editing, Wordplay and the Art of Patience

I distribute multi syllabic rhyme schemes cuz they appear the hardest
Yet there's another facet of rap that only appeals to martyrs
Steel your heart it's the editing section, welcome to the fields we harvest
The first draft reveals the art, the revision reveals the artist
You have to be more than the sum of your parts and have a real target
But some of you aren't, you rap uncharted to take a stab in the darkness
All we see are the holes and improvements that could've been made
If you never intended to bring your best then you shouldn't have came
You're either good or you're lame, why complain when better drops will do?
If you want to improve, add set ups to punchlines whenever possible...

Example from 'Meme':

My sex drive is nuts... A Porsche, Cadillac or a Stinger
I bet you got a Toyota like a Mandalorian action figure
A toy Yoda, *snickers*, add you to the sea-of-victims
I got such a clean-cut-image you can see-blood-in it


The sequence fits, with a double barrel you don't aim to hit
Rhyming to the punch in the same line vastly strengthens it
I may try to upgrade your shit but I'm not done with the lecture
Now let's find subtle connections that only shine under inspection...

Example from 'Meme':

I'm no Bruce Wayne but all these clowns I've grown to hate
Each flow is slain like Lois Lane when there's no S-Cape
No escape...


Flow is SLAIN/LoiS-LANE; the last and first letters connect
To create the word in question, alternate spelling doesn't reflect
Use this method until the madness of it becomes automatic
And explain your wordplay as part of the verse, never in brackets...

Example from 'Rhymehunter':

Correct;
You going off the rails, skipping all the stairs for the bannister
Until you're implored to surrender like Tyrion Lannister
Imp-lord-to-surrender; I got to list the facts
A song of ice and fire only makes opposites a track...


Incorrect:
You going off the rails, skipping all the stairs for the bannister
Until you're implored (imp-lord) to surrender like Tyrion Lannister


Hope you're familiar with the show Game of Thrones on HBO
I just had to make it known that brackets break the flow
Like static on the radio, the opposites-a-track line was solid
And it stemmed from a process I otherwise wouldn't have thought of
A lot of terms don't need to be pointed out like planets forming
Everyone can tell it's enormous, some things are self explanatory...

Example from 'Rhymehunter':

My style's radiating, I get what ->Chernobyl intentions be
Yet giving all your time and energy won't make you an online celebrity


No explanation needed, don't question a horse when in the saddle
Mortar every brick of your castle, and be sure to pick your battles
There's no such thing as a good rapper, no king or the GOAT
There's just people who edit their work and people who don't
You're supposed to be receptive, don't bring the pen and pad for notes
Using your cell phone is best for jotting ideas as you go
Don't oversaturate with your posts, it's best to take some lessons
Why make three insignificant rhymes when you can make one epic?
Seasoned veterans are raw and spit with no mind to follow it
I can't offer hints 'til ya practise mental patience like psychologists
Your style is your fingerprint, uniquely your recipe
The rule of thumb is don't post until you've already begun your next piece
A text emcees learning curve puts you straight in a circle
But patience is a virtue only the greatest can turn to
Like Malcolm's death by the nation of Islam in HDR
Complaints start but play it smart and editing should be your favorite part.

5.) Dealing with Text Success, Audio and Managing the Growing Ego

You will start to get text blah's and feel the constant pull of audio
But unless you got the flow don't step outside of your comfort zone
Unbeknownst to you text hype tears like a band aid
Ninety percent of you will need Rosetta Stone for the mic to translate
Call it a heightened state of awareness, I sure don't make the rules
We all basically assumed that rhyming words together makes us cool
I'd hate to prove you wrong in songs, much less record you
This is just poetry dude, tons of uncool people have done it before you
The laymen 'balks' at your muse, rapping to them is cardboard
They're naysayers to a dark horse, they see an attitude not an artform
Too soft for the hardcore, to them you're a talking spaceship
They just don't get the cocky slang which effects your body language
It's oddly alien; Students savior tips from those whose tenure's greater
We've all had original lines that a major artist said ten years later
Those rodents sure plague us, but all plagiarism is rote...
It's now that artists line, not yours; They matter... you don't
Fame is a ladder that broke, but an easy climb don't feel right
Remember you're an online rapper, you're not relevant in real life
Won't get rich in this career, trust, I peered through wallets
On average 100 views really means about 50 people saw it
And about half of those actually read the whole thing and digested it
But if everyone thinks they're the best at this, shit, why mess with it?
Vets respond on discussion boards and are reflecting by tomorrow
But I guarantee you they will never be woke by resting on their laurels
The art of war wore itself out, yet still some seem naked
Constant battling is for beginners and the eternally uncreative
But if you really must debate it, and an opponent leaves you for dead...
Mixing personals with general punches will lead to success
Too many people can't blend in, allegedly a legend dies in crowds
The second threads start to tie you down... heavy lies the crown.

6.) Maintaining a Legacy

It's hard to define the sense and sound of true isolation
It's lonely at the top, you're better off in general population
By now you slaughtered every topic, even got archived for good measure
No one wants to be forgotten; Everyone wants to be remembered
Once you reach the pinnacle, staying there should be your lifelong mission
Time might diminish it unless you strive to do something different
Vets dismiss all up and comers, they fear the day they plummet
I've been down that road before, please steer far away from it
You can't be afraid to make mistakes, some will drop false comments
But don't brag about your accomplishments or it comes off as nonsense
Got to let the work speak for itself, even if topics seem stale
If you have to explain it after you dropped, you've already failed
That entails choosing the lesser of two evils to report to
So be sure to give back and support the people who support you
Nobody should be put on pedestal, that's where the struggle's at
The secret of rap: If you love the art it will love you back
Cut yourself some slack, own what you send out to the ether
I gave you the tool belt to do it yourself, don't just depend on features
And I'll be sitting here, watching you get famous from the bleachers
Just remember the student can never be greater than the teacher... ;)

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Old 02-19-2020, 01:12 PM   #2
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This was a long read but it was worth every bit, i wish something like this was around when i first started years and years ago, the whole climb was relatable throughout. The vets clowning and all the basic rhyming words, working yourself up to multies and punches resonated with me because i lived it. It becomes natural after a point, loved how you dissected your own verses as lessons also, was awesome to see that firsthand kind of teaching. I admire your craft and work and though i don't think I've got to the final step this was a great refresher in my eyes and would make a great introduction for newbies. Dope work man
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I feel like this should be called “Universes love letter to Lars” tbh
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Neighsayers to a dark horse surely @Universe ?
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i'm going to be honest and say i got bored by the second bar.

didactic (creative) writing never appealed to me, particularly.
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the construction of your rhymes is impressive
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This was thorough and respected its title. Honestly it motivated me to start editing cuz I barely do that as far as posting on here, unless it’s for an audio that I’m gonna post and you have to do that painful slicing of sentences so that it flows better

No but for real, this was cool
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Interestin' read...
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I just got to state, I got eight lines in and you are killing it thus far.
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This is sick thus far, I can't.
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I just got through number 1. I must take a break and return later, Universe this is too much.
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this was dope.. people are dense to pass up on this.
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