07-09-2019, 11:23 AM | #1 |
HE / HIM / FRAC
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John Dillinger 1-0 vs Ryno 1-0 - RYNO WINS BY NS
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Due Thursday, July 11th Minimum - 6 lines Max - 10 lines Line limit can increase if both agree 24hr ext to be granted by opponent NO biting NO swaying NO feeding Don't edit after your opponent has posted 2nd person to post can't edit after the first vote comes in Don't be an idiot Don't use your opponent's pic unless it's a pic battle Agree on a line limit or match the first to drop |
07-09-2019, 08:28 PM | #2 |
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i'll shoot a text to ya hood, let ya homies know u'll be dead in seconds
no iphone, i'll put an aero through this square just to spread the message sweet talk ya slut, if the balls in my court she'll be slurpin on some cock irony at its finest, im the rebound guy that'll have the bitch posted on the block make a choice, shootout or bare knuckle? step & im boxing u off a whim if he chooses the gun overhand, its cuz he's tired of catching them on the chin i've got a tag team that'll shake the Net, give a call & im sprayin this clown this aint free agency, but for the right contract i'll bring both the K's to ya town tittie fk ya broad w/ the gat, if i unload watch her chest get diminished quit w/ the gimmicks, i'll 'torch her' rack & break her back like a Lex Luger finish u suuuuuuper trash Last edited by Ryno; 07-09-2019 at 08:57 PM. |
07-12-2019, 11:36 PM | #3 |
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i'll shoot a text to ya hood, let ya homies know u'll be dead in seconds
no iphone, i'll put an aero through this square just to spread the message you had me staring at my iMessages for about 20 mins, I don’t see it sweet talk ya slut, if the balls in my court she'll be slurpin on some cock irony at its finest, im the rebound guy that'll have the bitch posted on the block ehh pretty basic here. Decent make a choice, shootout or bare knuckle? step & im boxing u off a whim if he chooses the gun overhand, its cuz he's tired of catching them on the chin feel this was a bit forced, aside from that it’s a cool concept i've got a tag team that'll shake the Net, give a call & im sprayin this clown this aint free agency, but for the right contract i'll bring both the K's to ya town this was cool tittie fk ya broad w/ the gat, if i unload watch her chest get diminished quit w/ the gimmicks, i'll 'torch her' rack & break her back like a Lex Luger finish alright |
07-13-2019, 08:12 AM | #4 |
He / Him / His
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i'll shoot a text to ya hood, let ya homies know u'll be dead in seconds
no iphone, i'll put an aero through this square just to spread the message The first thing is I'm not sure why you wrote "aero" instead of "arrow" since I don't really see any tie-in to aero. But also, I think you could've made it a little more concrete that you're talking about the "share" icon with some kind of reference to it in the set-up. Either way this is a cool concept that I felt landed, but I think it could've been a bit stronger if it work reworked. sweet talk ya slut, if the balls in my court she'll be slurpin on some cock irony at its finest, im the rebound guy that'll have the bitch posted on the block this is cool, no real complaints. make a choice, shootout or bare knuckle? step & im boxing u off a whim if he chooses the gun overhand, its cuz he's tired of catching them on the chin something about this is just recursive and the slingshot method wouldn't cause you to "catch anything on the chin". i think the wording could've been better i've got a tag team that'll shake the Net, give a call & im sprayin this clown this aint free agency, but for the right contract i'll bring both the K's to ya town i like the overall idea here, it would be cool but my biggest hand-up is that nobody would rightfully call Kevin Durant or Kyrie Irving "K" for short. Just kinda something you made up yourself to make the wp work tittie fk ya broad w/ the gat, if i unload watch her chest get dimished quit w/ the gimmicks, i'll 'torch her' rack & break her back like a Lex Luger finish this was cool, I dig the old school wrestling bars but I wouldn't refer to tittie fucking someone with a gun as "torching" her, so that's kinda weird overall solid verse, just a few things I thought could use fine tuning Last edited by Answer; 07-13-2019 at 08:47 AM. |
07-13-2019, 12:07 PM | #5 |
HE / HIM / FRAC
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i'll shoot a text to ya hood, let ya homies know u'll be dead in seconds
no iphone, i'll put an aero through this square just to spread the message Aero was misleading, unless there's a connection to Aero, which there isn't. Cool bar overall sweet talk ya slut, if the balls in my court she'll be slurpin on some cock irony at its finest, im the rebound guy that'll have the bitch posted on the block clever, but my first reaction is being the rebound guy isn't much of a boast. Still a quality bar make a choice, shootout or bare knuckle? step & im boxing u off a whim if he chooses the gun overhand, its cuz he's tired of catching them on the chin I get it, but I'm not feeling this kind of flip lately i've got a tag team that'll shake the Net, give a call & im sprayin this clown this aint free agency, but for the right contract i'll bring both the K's to ya town without 'net' in the setup I would've been lost. I agree with Answer, this was close to not being understood tittie fk ya broad w/ the gat, if i unload watch her chest get diminished quit w/ the gimmicks, i'll 'torch her' rack & break her back like a Lex Luger finish only kind of works both ways. Not bad, not great to me, but again, I'm not particularly feeling that kind of punch lately |
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