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Old 07-10-2016, 01:05 PM   #21
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@UnbornBuddha bitch ass is scared to get at me on skype.. How u gonna call me out then duck when I accept your challenge?
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Old 07-10-2016, 04:09 PM   #22
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Old 07-11-2016, 03:09 AM   #23
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Old 07-11-2016, 07:07 PM   #24
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All good these days.

Welp. I looked.

Quarter O,
although I agree with Big baby that it sucked, perhaps eventually you will go on a multi-year healing journey to merge your split self, learn how to write what you wanna say, creating epic multi-topicals with some of the smartest writers in the world, even if it took some friction along the way.

The people giving you feedback are all overrated, stuck inside an artistic box. Keep doin u man
I value myself on attempting to climb out of my box every time I post...which is why my last piece was not well received, and understandably so. How I write now and how I was writing even a year ago is completely different, if you cared to look.

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Old 07-11-2016, 07:25 PM   #25
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Good shit unborn

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Old 07-11-2016, 08:15 PM   #26
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Wow man why do you need feed? You already know you're the best.

Congrats.
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Old 07-11-2016, 11:33 PM   #28
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Quit quoting me, or talking to me, man.

Fucking creep.

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Old 07-14-2016, 12:20 AM   #29
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Old 07-25-2016, 06:31 PM   #30
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Okay since you asked, I read this and found nothing memorable. There were attempts of cleverness and an attempt of a more feral style, but it came up as uninspired. And your last rhymes were very trite, all -ologies without any manipulation of complex schemes. So the content wasn't enjoyable for me, there's nothing that will make me remember oh this is Quarter O piece. The thing that you have going for more in this piece is the tone, a braggadocio swag, but even this comes off as novice. There also grammatical faults that could be improved upon by co-verbs and simple conjunctive rephrasing. As it stands now, this wasn't anything that is worth keeping. My biggest suggestion is to read some good writings here, and try to find what makes them good. And build on that, create a knowledge basis, this was too simplistic and uninspired.

I disagree.

"Cuz chicks is harder to come bi like chicks that's strict dick"
This is clever, and makes perfect sense. I like it.

".... they'd save the last dance, giving me big dick privlidge""
nice statement here. You haven't said anything important yet, but the wordplay is pretty good.

"...Legs up - gynocology"
Nice, I laughed at this one.

"Jaden shit, going 'gainst biology"
Good reference here.

overall I liked it. It didn't try to hard, and it doesnt flow terribly.
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Old 07-25-2016, 06:38 PM   #31
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I hope your potential career as a rapper isn't what's keeping you from going full-time at Pizza Hut

cuz I got sum bad newz brah
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Old 07-25-2016, 09:40 PM   #32
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Vapeo it's okay if you disagree, but if you do please do not quote me, and disagree with fallacious strawman premises. Thanks.
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