11-15-2020, 05:36 PM | #1 |
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WEEK 7: iSpaz 2-3 VS Mac 2-3 SPAZ WINS
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11-15-2020, 06:31 PM | #2 |
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good luck TEN LINES
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11-16-2020, 12:56 AM | #3 |
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But don't say I can't rap like I'm not a Rap God,
Like I won't break your fucking favorite rapper's rap jaw |
11-19-2020, 07:51 AM | #4 |
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11-19-2020, 12:53 PM | #5 |
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Sure.
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But don't say I can't rap like I'm not a Rap God,
Like I won't break your fucking favorite rapper's rap jaw |
11-19-2020, 12:54 PM | #6 |
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Get your own style mf..
Yeah its iSpaz against Mac. The fact is that you couldn't shoot lead You wishin you could dead "i", but I'll kill you quicker than that skill from Red Dead Your chances of winning is slim cuz you the wackest with it You already lost off the rip so I'll break ya top off like a lottery ticket I'll get in a bitch slot. Hit it till I get a jackpot while this fool's hateful You could say you felt a hole.. like that one time you built a pool table But fuck the jokes. I want smoke and I'm runnin on no patience So when I have that can pop over that metal tre it won't be the bar waitress. You are a beast. No leash but I can sense the feelin of doubt If you got fight in your veins, I'll have you fighting to stop your blood from bleedin out.
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But don't say I can't rap like I'm not a Rap God,
Like I won't break your fucking favorite rapper's rap jaw |
11-20-2020, 09:31 PM | #7 |
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I got ur girl hittin me up askin to drop by
all she wants for christmas is you, thats the word around Spotify I hope you brought an ally into this death valley once this ends in heavy oregon traffic you'd wish u never left Cali both our names are somehow related to the Apple wave Mac's a best-seller & iSpaz got Steve Jobs rollin in his grave nigga lost three times in a row how u won 2 times is a mistery they say dont take your work home.. but u gotta work on that delivery Mac's a chef n i'm about to prepare the buffet serve the table; not thanksgiving yet but a turkey gettin roasted today |
11-21-2020, 08:13 AM | #8 | ||
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Quote:
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Vote spaz stronger bars
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11-22-2020, 08:14 AM | #9 | ||
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Closer was LOTB even with shaky wording. I'd work on coming up with better concepts, don't always settle for your first idea for a flip. You also need to work on setups and tying in concepts related to the punch to make it hit harder. Quote:
Vote: iSpaz. Neither verse knocked my socks off but both showed signs of potential. Keep writing guys. |
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11-22-2020, 08:19 AM | #10 |
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This match had
Yeah its iSpaz against Mac. The fact is that you couldn't shoot lead You wishin you could dead "i", but I'll kill you quicker than that skill from Red Dead And I barely quoted it, because of how lazy the rhyme was Then there was felt a hole... The rhyme wasn't as weak and the idea was harddd Execution though, not good. That had so much potential Mac had steve jobs, but it needed more for it to hit And again..sloppy rhyming Not feeling anything else worth mentioning from either Voting Spaz |
11-22-2020, 11:30 AM | #11 |
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Yeah its iSpaz against Mac. The fact is that you couldn't shoot lead
You wishin you could dead "i", but I'll kill you quicker than that skill from Red Dead this doesn't work very well... 'you wishin you could dead I' is such an awkward phrase. I appreciate the way you made your bar accessible to people who haven't played red dead, but you took up so much of the bar explaining it that it lessened your impact Your chances of winning is slim cuz you the wackest with it You already lost off the rip so I'll break ya top off like a lottery ticket agree with FGR... Haven't seen this exact method with lottery tickets but if you're not making shit it is dope I'll get in a bitch slot. Hit it till I get a jackpot while this fool's hateful You could say you felt a hole.. like that one time you built a pool table you're saying he has felt a hole? The delivery here sounds like you're saying he has felt a hole. But fuck the jokes. I want smoke and I'm runnin on no patience So when I have that can pop over that metal tre it won't be the bar waitress. tre/tray has been done enough in high profile battles (that dude with the lunch lady flip... Cant think of who it is right now). Wording itself is awkward. Two 'that's make the delivery weird, and wtf is a' bar waitress'? You are a beast. No leash but I can sense the feelin of doubt If you got fight in your veins, I'll have you fighting to stop your blood from bleedin out. theres def an idea here but again, awkward wording takes it ]I got ur girl hittin me up askin to drop by all she wants for christmas is you, thats the word around Spotify again, sounds like the bar is actually a compliment? I get what you're going for but not worded too well I hope you brought an ally into this death valley once this ends in heavy oregon traffic you'd wish u never left Cali Heavy... Organ? Oregon is an extra syllable. I'm also not sure it's an organ flip. I feel like this wording didn't help a reach of a concept at all both our names are somehow related to the Apple wave Mac's a best-seller & iSpaz got Steve Jobs rollin in his grave get what you're going for but wording isn't there. Clever use of your name as well nigga lost three times in a row how u won 2 times is a mistery they say dont take your work home.. but u gotta work on that delivery wording isn't bad. Concept makes like no sense to me though Mac's a chef n i'm about to prepare the buffet serve the table; not thanksgiving yet but a turkey gettin roasted today calling him a turkey makes this feel like a 70's flick lol. Really outdated slang Spaz had better punches. Both of you need more time to develop your wording V/spaz |
11-22-2020, 11:42 AM | #12 |
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i read the lottery ticket thing as tearing of the top ticket from one of those rolls of scratch offs.
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11-22-2020, 11:43 AM | #13 |
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Spazz has the opener and rippin tickets while I dig Mac’s delivery bar and Steve Jobs. This battle wasn’t great from either side but this really felt phoned in from Mac who we’ve seen a lot of improvement from but this week felt like two steps backwards. Spaz shows that he has good concepts but is lacking on execution nevertheless his misses weren’t as bad.
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11-22-2020, 12:18 PM | #14 |
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Ispaz
Yeah its iSpaz against Mac. The fact is that you couldn't shoot lead You wishin you could dead "i", but I'll kill you quicker than that skill from Red Dead I like that for the second line, didn't like the first line at all though. I didn't feel anything from Mac's verse so I got Ispaz winning from that bar I quoted above. V/Ispaz |
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