07-19-2015, 11:58 PM | #1 |
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Witty 0-2 vs Mr. J 0-2 - WITTY WINS
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07-22-2015, 08:51 PM | #2 | ||||
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Cuz dead man said 1 word, n u made 2 entire fuckin threads about it Ur life is so fuckin backwards, its rly got me chokin' with laughter Cuz black RAPED u, yet ur the 1 who cudn't take no for an answer MJ is HISstory, he ain't smooth, criminal? nah the kid's a liar So watch him Scream when I put this burner to his wig n fire My diss to u got views, dudes loved the shit that witty dropped ur shit got 4 replies, and one of 'em was ME giving you pity props I'll steal ur car and sell it, u'll be using a pushbike to get places I'll have u back pedaling, like lars after lyin that GoW was a kid rapist U a feminine bitch, I'm as sick as satan, leave ur team dead So it's english money, Ima put the nickel plating to this queen's head
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07-23-2015, 03:57 PM | #3 |
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Wit's the Bane to Mr. Wayne, but Mr. J is different from that bat shit
riding my name the only time this snatch came out on top, Brad Pitt it's a good thing you don't record tracks, I can't think of nothing worse either OM's or discussion, seems like you the only one bumping your verse I'll put this soft heart cream puff in a plastic bag, don't play funny par fuck a milk carton, they'll find you buried in a box of lucky charms he's on dead man's dick quicker than rigor mortis ..really scumbag? just play necrophiliac, ride it out, that's how you make a witty comeback on a side note happy birthday Wit, may you get all your Bday wishes peep this mag clip, it will erase your thoughts like your AOWL predictions
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07-24-2015, 02:24 PM | #4 |
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Witty, ur whole verse was good. The personals were on point and the wording was crisp. Not a huge fan of the MJ line but it was still decent. The opener was dope tho, and im not English but something tells me if I was I would like the closer more, but it was still OK. Pity props was lulz n lars back pedalling was a good flip on a concept everyone is doing this week, I like how u went a diff direction tho. Overall this is a solid verse bro, props.
Mr. J. ---I don't get how 'riding my name' ties into this? Like the snatch/brad Pitt part tho. ---Ehh this is played, bumping music/bumping threads, seen it a few times. ---I didn't really like this, u say forget the milk carton like ur setting up a him being missing concept then say he's buried in a box of lucky charms. Went from setting up him being missing to him being dead, which may have been ur point and I'm stupid but I thought it took away from the punch. And lucky charms...cmon u know that's played. --+Wasn't feeling witty comeback, I thought u could've flipped it a lot better. ---I don't get it. But I don't fuck with aowl. Overall: I like some of mr j's concepts but I feel like he over thinks the wording, he tries to word it like a topical. That's just what ingot from it. Wittys verse was good for all five bars n that's a rarity these days. V. Witty |
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07-24-2015, 06:40 PM | #6 |
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U act like u don't care, it's all a joke, but I think ur head is clouded Cuz dead man said 1 word, n u made 2 entire fuckin threads about it ok Ur life is so fuckin backwards, its rly got me chokin' with laughter Cuz black RAPED u, yet ur the 1 who cudn't take no for an answer lol MJ is HISstory, he ain't smooth, criminal? nah the kid's a liar So watch him Scream when I put this burner to his wig n fire I see what you did but nah breh My diss to u got views, dudes loved the shit that witty dropped ur shit got 4 replies, and one of 'em was ME giving you pity props hmm, I thought this was going to be a harsh line but you rationalized giving him props I'll steal ur car and sell it, u'll be using a pushbike to get places I'll have u back pedaling, like lars after lyin that GoW was a kid rapist aight U a feminine bitch, I'm as sick as satan, leave ur team dead So it's english money, Ima put the nickel plating to this queen's head aiiiiiight overall that no for an answer line was LOTV, rest was just avg Mr. J Wit's the Bane to Mr. Wayne, but Mr. J is different from that bat shit riding my name the only time this snatch came out on top, Brad Pitt no it's a good thing you don't record tracks, I can't think of nothing worse either OM's or discussion, seems like you the only one bumping your verse needs more umph I'll put this soft heart cream puff in a plastic bag, don't play funny par fuck a milk carton, they'll find you buried in a box of lucky charms this isn't really creative. sometimes you've got to read your lines to yourself as if you're a new person he's on dead man's dick quicker than rigor mortis ..really scumbag? just play necrophiliac, ride it out, that's how you make a witty comeback I think on deadman's dick should've been the punchline here on a side note happy birthday Wit, may you get all your Bday wishes peep this mag clip, it will erase your thoughts like your AOWL predictions ok you've got an idea but none of your lines hit cool little battle. mvgt Witty
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07-25-2015, 02:44 PM | #7 |
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3-0 Witty. More votes pls.
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07-25-2015, 03:52 PM | #8 |
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LOL I don't usually like voting on battles in mentioned in but, Witty got this.
The raped you line was HARDDDDDD and creative Didn't expect that from Wit tbh lol closer was nice too Mr. j had a sick opening line, loved the flip off wittys ish tbh and the milk carton ish was creative to me. iunno maybe I'm too old for this text shit, but I liked that regardless, Witty got you here, just bette wording that made the punche's come off stronger imo
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07-25-2015, 04:01 PM | #9 |
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Ur life is so fuckin backwards, its rly got me chokin' with laughter
Cuz black RAPED u, yet ur the 1 who cudn't take no for an answer I'll steal ur car and sell it, u'll be using a pushbike to get places I'll have u back pedaling, like lars after lyin that GoW was a kid rapist vs. I'll put this soft heart cream puff in a plastic bag, don't play funny par fuck a milk carton, they'll find you buried in a box of lucky charms Both did alright, had two quotes from Witty and 1 for J. Witty was just more consistent with jabs, but that lucky charms line was quite solid from J...more lines like that and he could be doing it big. V/ Witty
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07-26-2015, 08:42 AM | #10 |
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Witty has potential to be nice at text, very crisp execution of his concepts and it flows nice. Mr J is still finding his feet and working on how to get the best out of the ideas he has swirling around his head. I think Witty was too clean for him here. I liked most of his verse it was consistently okay with nothing really bad. Mr J, on the other hand, had a couple of misses that cost him. I liked his opener but in the end Witty had the consistency to see this one out. Vote Witty.
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07-26-2015, 12:59 PM | #11 |
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U act like u don't care, it's all a joke, but I think ur head is clouded Cuz dead man said 1 word, n u made 2 entire fuckin threads about it Ur life is so fuckin backwards, its rly got me chokin' with laughter Cuz black RAPED u, yet ur the 1 who cudn't take no for an answer My diss to u got views, dudes loved the shit that witty dropped ur shit got 4 replies, and one of 'em was ME giving you pity props U a feminine bitch, I'm as sick as satan, leave ur team dead So it's english money, Ima put the nickel plating to this queen's head Ive read your battle verses in the past but I didnt like them... I liked this one tho... Almost quoted the wig line... G0W line couldve been worded better... it's a good thing you don't record tracks, I can't think of nothing worse either OM's or discussion, seems like you the only one bumping your verse I'll put this soft heart cream puff in a plastic bag, don't play funny par fuck a milk carton, they'll find you buried in a box of lucky charms Cool verse but wording hurt u a bit here... Bumping line was your best line... Witty had the better worded verse and more lines I liked... Vote- Witty... Bye...
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