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Old 12-28-2021, 03:26 PM   #1
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Old 01-05-2022, 12:03 AM   #2
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Spree will…
Fuck another miscarriage out Des wife & nut in her juice poon
I pull 7 inches of flesh out her pussy,..that’s just somethin she use to
Didn’t wanna battle u chumps, but I had to, they say my text is too legit
Last time Frac ‘forced someone’s hand’...he wound up on the sex offenders list
Toss her a rack or two cos Des don’t amount to dirt
Isn’t enough in Embank to stop me from burying the faggot under a mound of earth
Who taught Des to rap? Look at this guy, swear he’s phased every time
Whatever his ‘training wills’…it’s getting met w/ two extensions placed to his side
Frac claims love when Jaden don’t attempt to be sweet
Drive fast where ever J walk & leave her dead in the street
Coward ur words mean nothin, its levels to this, don’t get comfortable homie
Only ‘Em Pact’ we wanna see come true…is Des hurling himself from multiple stories
Can’t rap cold blooded, we laugh cuz the shit u’ve drawn worse
Dude ur such a snake...u deserve a special shoutout from a Sinacog verse
& you ain’t no pimp Frac, hotels & bitches? Lame you a bitch
Yeah you roll through lobby’s w/women, but end up having to wait for a tip

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i actually like spree. i mean, he never even bites
but he drinks bud light, which is also what i’ve thought about every bar i’ve seen him write
tread gingerly around me, otherwise i’ll make u die slow
watch des pull up and shoot to put him underground if ry’s home

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How u do 16 lines in an 8 line battle? Unreal… bums chill
Im finnah make you regret being out of turn like the bitch ruggs killed
Rino & Spree.. 2 brainless losers who have no name or future
Im a world beater, while u goofs couldn’t have a target audience as the vegas shooter
I'm mean, rude.. me n des v. these dudes?
ill have the whole crowds jaws dropped while slayin u, this jada in Scream 2
Sprees jaden lines will fall flat, itll read like every diss is hurried
Hes a landscaper,.. he butchers trees while rino butchers wording
U cashin checks at Walmart, while I have ur girl soaked in nut
Now u come home to no food done & shes all about space like Don’t Look Up
Don’t trip spree, ill have you out this tourney in a second
And why they call u rino? Ur more of a Jackass… always hurting for attention

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Spree will…
Fuck another miscarriage out Des wife & nut in her juice poon
I pull 7 inches of flesh out her pussy,..that’s just somethin she use to
lollll.. nasssty imagery... miscarriages are boring for des nowadays though

Didn’t wanna battle u chumps, but I had to, they say my text is too legit
Last time Frac ‘forced someone’s hand’...he wound up on the sex offenders list
light.. basic angle

Toss her a rack or two cos Des don’t amount to dirt
Isn’t enough in Embank to stop me from burying the faggot under a mound of earth
not feeling this

Who taught Des to rap? Look at this guy, swear he’s phased every time
Whatever his ‘training wills’…it’s getting met w/ two extensions placed to his side
okkkkk.. setup needed work

Frac claims love when Jaden don’t attempt to be sweet
Drive fast where ever J walk & leave her dead in the street
coool I dig this

Coward ur words mean nothin, its levels to this, don’t get comfortable homie
Only ‘Em Pact’ we wanna see come true…is Des hurling himself from multiple stories
lol I like this.. this is fire

Can’t rap cold blooded, we laugh cuz the shit u’ve drawn worse
Dude ur such a snake...u deserve a special shoutout from a Sinacog verse
nah

& you ain’t no pimp Frac, hotels & bitches? Lame you a bitch
Yeah you roll through lobby’s w/women, but end up having to wait for a tip
execution is off.. concept is there. didn't really like this closer


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i actually like spree. i mean, he never even bites
but he drinks bud light, which is also what i’ve thought about every bar i’ve seen him write
wordy but cool. hits.

tread gingerly around me, otherwise i’ll make u die slow
watch des pull up and shoot to put him underground if ry’s home
ehh

How u do 16 lines in an 8 line battle? Unreal… bums chill
Im finnah make you regret being out of turn like the bitch ruggs killed
lol nice

Rino & Spree.. 2 brainless losers who have no name or future
Im a world beater, while u goofs couldn’t have a target audience as the vegas shooter
light at best

I'm mean, rude.. me n des v. these dudes?
ill have the whole crowds jaws dropped while slayin u, this jada in Scream 2
I kinda like it but the connection is weak.. fell flat at the end

Sprees jaden lines will fall flat, itll read like every diss is hurried
Hes a landscaper,.. he butchers trees while rino butchers wording
LOL.. simple but I dig this

U cashin checks at Walmart, while I have ur girl soaked in nut
Now u come home to no food done & shes all about space like Don’t Look Up
lmaoo

Don’t trip spree, ill have you out this tourney in a second
And why they call u rino? Ur more of a Jackass… always hurting for attention
nahh.. not feelin this closer bro

shiiit. close battle. Even though I got spree/ryno with the em pact LOTB, I got blue chews jaden with fewer misses and bit more consistency. I felt there were some throaways here and there.. now I agree with answer that 8 lines is best.. just grab your best 4 bars and hope for the best. good shit fellas, but I got blue chews for jaden here.. it could go either way tbh
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Spree will…
Fuck another miscarriage out Des wife & nut in her juice poon
I pull 7 inches of flesh out her pussy,..that’s just somethin she use to

Oh shit, straight out the gate with a heater. This was brill, liked the personal angle and misdirection used tbh. I think this started strong, definitely felt damaging to the opposition off rip.

Didn’t wanna battle u chumps, but I had to, they say my text is too legit
Last time Frac ‘forced someone’s hand’...he wound up on the sex offenders list

LOL this one was a little lighter, but a decent jab none the less all in all. I liked the flip on the forced someone’s hand as I haven’t seen that before.

Toss her a rack or two cos Des don’t amount to dirt
Isn’t enough in Embank to stop me from burying the faggot under a mound of earth

I liked the concept and nameflip somewhat, wording felt a little unnatural to me with the under a mound of Earth but not bad it’s felt it needed wording a iittle differently tbh

Who taught Des to rap? Look at this guy, swear he’s phased every time
Whatever his ‘training wills’…it’s getting met w/ two extensions placed to his side

I wasn’t such a fan of this one; training wills made me think you were gonna talk about Des’ age and him writing a will or something so I’m glad you steered away from that here but the execution here felt a little too simplistic and flat, it lacked some sting it may otherwise have had

Frac claims love when Jaden don’t attempt to be sweet
Drive fast where ever J walk & leave her dead in the street

Not a fan of this one, not sure who Jaden is or if it’s Frac’s chick somehow but either way that’s the just I got and referring to her by just a single letter felt like low hanging fruit and not all that difficult to come up with to me.

Coward ur words mean nothin, its levels to this, don’t get comfortable homie
Only ‘Em Pact’ we wanna see come true…is Des hurling himself from multiple stories

This was a bit of a stretch for me between Em Pact and Impact, maybe it works better in your accent than it translates to me in mine. I like the idea, felt the execution lacked a little or maybe I’m missing something where Des has stated he would throw himself off a building rather than battle you guys or something. I dunno, just didn’t really connect with me for whatever reason.

Can’t rap cold blooded, we laugh cuz the shit u’ve drawn worse
Dude ur such a snake...u deserve a special shoutout from a Sinacog verse

I liked this, simple but effective, not seen Sinacog post up for a short while but his infamy lives on I see.

& you ain’t no pimp Frac, hotels & bitches? Lame you a bitch
Yeah you roll through lobby’s w/women, but end up having to wait for a tip

This was a better line to close things out, I enjoyed the personal angle and line, thought it was worded cleanly and executed well. Overall a consistent verse, only 1-2 dry spots where I wasn’t feeling much but the majority of the time you guys worked well together I felt
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i actually like spree. i mean, he never even bites
but he drinks bud light, which is also what i’ve thought about every bar i’ve seen him write

This was a light jab for me, off to a slower start than I felt your opponents got for sure, the bud light reference so early in the line made it a little predictable as to what you were going to do also here so the payoff lost a little moment for me when it came to the end of the line.

tread gingerly around me, otherwise i’ll make u die slow
watch des pull up and shoot to put him underground if ry’s home

Rhizome, right? I get it, not seen this name play done before on him though I’m sure he’s seen several similar but I liked this one as I haven’t seen it.

How u do 16 lines in an 8 line battle? Unreal… bums chill
Im finnah make you regret being out of turn like the bitch ruggs killed

Henry Ruggs? Best I’ve got for this one and that seems to make sense to me. I thought this was just okay, could be that I’m missing something completely here but the one I’m thinking of involved a car crash that would make the out of turn reference applicable. Either way, it was a light jab to me here.

Rino & Spree.. 2 brainless losers who have no name or future
Im a world beater, while u goofs couldn’t have a target audience as the vegas shooter

This was nicer, clean and worded well, I enjoyed the target audience flip. This is probably your strongest so far.

I'm mean, rude.. me n des v. these dudes?
ill have the whole crowds jaws dropped while slayin u, this jada in Scream 2

This one feels too simplistic for me, I dunno, it’s not necessarily bad just not particularly fresh feeling or executed harshly, it reads more statementish and that kind of took away from the sting of the punchline to me in truth.

Sprees jaden lines will fall flat, itll read like every diss is hurried
Hes a landscaper,.. he butchers trees while rino butchers wording

I liked this one, good misdirection and a double-attack on the opposition but saving the butchers wording til last kept the payoff until right at the end which worked really well.

U cashin checks at Walmart, while I have ur girl soaked in nut
Now u come home to no food done & shes all about space like Don’t Look Up

This one was simple and effective here, definitely a marked improvement over the past couple lines and I’m feeling it in terms of wording and execution.

Don’t trip spree, ill have you out this tourney in a second
And why they call u rino? Ur more of a Jackass… always hurting for attention

Nice, enjoyed this closer also, thought you ended this very solid with back to back lines toward the end. This is a difficult one to vote on for me because Spree at the beginning came out the blocks wilding, that first shot at Des was fire, then we got a kind of mixed bag of stuff I either thought felt like a light jab or missed got me for whatever reason and opening with what was essentially the LOTB kind of made the rest feel a little undercooked, you know? Frac and Des started off a little slower but definitely gained traction as this went on, got stronger towards the end and went on a run of back to back bars I was feeling somewhat. I think here it’s that consistency of back to back bars that had me leaning their way over that one crazy line from Spree at the start.

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Fuck another miscarriage out Des wife & nut in her juice poon
I pull 7 inches of flesh out her pussy,..that’s just somethin she use to

wording butchered this but I like the idea

Didn’t wanna battle u chumps, but I had to, they say my text is too legit
Last time Frac ‘forced someone’s hand’...he wound up on the sex offenders list

lol @jaden

Toss her a rack or two cos Des don’t amount to dirt
Isn’t enough in Embank to stop me from burying the faggot under a mound of earth

was confused until I saw you pointed out his aka, I never like that cus it needs to be said but cool nameflip, nameflips don't do it too much for me anymore but creative

Who taught Des to rap? Look at this guy, swear he’s phased every time
Whatever his ‘training wills’…it’s getting met w/ two extensions placed to his side

ehh bit forced in my accent at least

Frac claims love when Jaden don’t attempt to be sweet
Drive fast where ever J walk & leave her dead in the street

Ok concept, good personal

Coward ur words mean nothin, its levels to this, don’t get comfortable homie
Only ‘Em Pact’ we wanna see come true…is Des hurling himself from multiple stories

the em sound in empathy and impact are different so a bit forced. good wording otherwise.

Can’t rap cold blooded, we laugh cuz the shit u’ve drawn worse
Dude ur such a snake...u deserve a special shoutout from a Sinacog verse

lol cool does sin say snakes too thought it was all about THE DRAGON THE DRAGGIN DRAGON THE SNAKE DRAGON okay got it

& you ain’t no pimp Frac, hotels & bitches? Lame you a bitch
Yeah you roll through lobby’s w/women, but end up having to wait for a tip

light but nice personal

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i actually like spree. i mean, he never even bites
but he drinks bud light, which is also what i’ve thought about every bar i’ve seen him write

cool, wording could be better. punch was a bit drawn out

tread gingerly around me, otherwise i’ll make u die slow
watch des pull up and shoot to put him underground if ry’s home

rise home? I don't think you shoot anything to raise a house

How u do 16 lines in an 8 line battle? Unreal… bums chill
Im finnah make you regret being out of turn like the bitch ruggs killed

lmao

Rino & Spree.. 2 brainless losers who have no name or future
Im a world beater, while u goofs couldn’t have a target audience as the vegas shooter

eh bit dated, good wording

I'm mean, rude.. me n des v. these dudes?
ill have the whole crowds jaws dropped while slayin u, this jada in Scream 2

scream/jaw dropped i've seen

Sprees jaden lines will fall flat, itll read like every diss is hurried
Hes a landscaper,.. he butchers trees while rino butchers wording

lmao okay, idk if butchers is the right word for removing trees though. coulda said he destroys life while ryno destroys wording or something. can spree confirm if he uses cleavers to cut down trees?

U cashin checks at Walmart, while I have ur girl soaked in nut
Now u come home to no food done & shes all about space like Don’t Look Up

:deadguy:

Don’t trip spree, ill have you out this tourney in a second
And why they call u rino? Ur more of a Jackass… always hurting for attention

ehh



ok ok


Didn’t wanna battle u chumps, but I had to, they say my text is too legit
Last time Frac ‘forced someone’s hand’...he wound up on the sex offenders list
Toss her a rack or two cos Des don’t amount to dirt
Isn’t enough in Embank to stop me from burying the faggot under a mound of earth
Frac claims love when Jaden don’t attempt to be sweet
Drive fast where ever J walk & leave her dead in the street
& you ain’t no pimp Frac, hotels & bitches? Lame you a bitch
Yeah you roll through lobby’s w/women, but end up having to wait for a tip

these were the quotes but all were really light, you guys kind of missed the mark on making a really brutal flip on the personals you had. creative enough and well worded but no killer instinct

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i actually like spree. i mean, he never even bites
but he drinks bud light, which is also what i’ve thought about every bar i’ve seen him write
How u do 16 lines in an 8 line battle? Unreal… bums chill
Im finnah make you regret being out of turn like the bitch ruggs killed
U cashin checks at Walmart, while I have ur girl soaked in nut
Now u come home to no food done & shes all about space like Don’t Look Up

theres some maybe I could call quotes, frac had a few dated references which was eh. Seen those flipped during their times maybe not as well but still. But those last two quotes by frac were better than anything ryno and spree wrote so it's a tough call... imma have to break it down further and get the numbers out

11 for spree and ryno

14 for frac and des

It comes down to the bangers for me, a meh but consistent verse isn't enough against a team with someone like frac on it that can hit your gut once or twice for the finisher

hard to vote on this and feel right with either choice but gonna go with Frac/Des
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Fuck another miscarriage out Des wife & nut in her juice poon
I pull 7 inches of flesh out her pussy,..that’s just somethin she use to

Okay I like the concept but I have questions. My questions are 1) what is a juice poon and 2) why 7? You can pretend to have a bigger dick than that here it’s OK

Didn’t wanna battle u chumps, but I had to, they say my text is too legit
Last time Frac ‘forced someone’s hand’...he wound up on the sex offenders list

Yep, that’s cool.

Toss her a rack or two cos Des don’t amount to dirt
Isn’t enough in Embank to stop me from burying the faggot under a mound of earth

Cool. I was about to tell you embank isn’t a word but I looked it up and it is - a verb meaning to make an embankment. I think you could’ve made embankment work and it would’ve been better but anyway, it’s overall still cool

Who taught Des to rap? Look at this guy, swear he’s phased every time
Whatever his ‘training wills’…it’s getting met w/ two extensions placed to his side

A little stretched conceptually IMO but not a miss, it’s kinda cool

Frac claims love when Jaden don’t attempt to be sweet
Drive fast where ever J walk & leave her dead in the street

Eh this is a boring letter play to me

Coward ur words mean nothin, its levels to this, don’t get comfortable homie
Only ‘Em Pact’ we wanna see come true…is Des hurling himself from multiple stories

Cool. Solid.

Can’t rap cold blooded, we laugh cuz the shit u’ve drawn worse
Dude ur such a snake...u deserve a special shoutout from a Sinacog verse

Lmao. I dig it.

& you ain’t no pimp Frac, hotels & bitches? Lame you a bitch
Yeah you roll through lobby’s w/women, but end up having to wait for a tip

Cool.


i actually like spree. i mean, he never even bites
but he drinks bud light, which is also what i’ve thought about every bar i’ve seen him write

Seen bud light flips before. Assuming spree actually does drink it then the personal makes it OKish.

tread gingerly around me, otherwise i’ll make u die slow
watch des pull up and shoot to put him underground if ry’s home

Would’ve missed this if I hadn’t read Lars’s vote. A little stretched sound wise but passable and the shoot and gingerly tie ins make it better. I like.


Frac


How u do 16 lines in an 8 line battle? Unreal… bums chill
Im finnah make you regret being out of turn like the bitch ruggs killed

Cool personal

Rino & Spree.. 2 brainless losers who have no name or future
Im a world beater, while u goofs couldn’t have a target audience as the vegas shooter

Execution v smooth which helped a lot. The wordplay/punch is just alright.

I'm mean, rude.. me n des v. these dudes?
ill have the whole crowds jaws dropped while slayin u, this jada in Scream 2

Wp concept feels old and the bar is centered around that more than a diss, this one’s meh to me

Sprees jaden lines will fall flat, itll read like every diss is hurried
Hes a landscaper,.. he butchers trees while rino butchers wording

Nah. ‘Butchers’ isn’t the right word to make this work.

U cashin checks at Walmart, while I have ur girl soaked in nut
Now u come home to no food done & shes all about space like Don’t Look Up

Lol. Cool. Smooth execution aided the humor.

Don’t trip spree, ill have you out this tourney in a second
And why they call u rino? Ur more of a Jackass… always hurting for attention

The jackass/hurting for attention play is dope but the rino/jackass thing is corny IMO. I still fuck with the bar but think it couldn’t been worded more harshly.


I’ve got Rino/Spree
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Spree will…
Fuck another miscarriage out Des wife & nut in her juice poon
I pull 7 inches of flesh out her pussy,..that’s just somethin she use to
Decent personal dig
Didn’t wanna battle u chumps, but I had to, they say my text is too legit
Last time Frac ‘forced someone’s hand’...he wound up on the sex offenders list
This was just okay.
Toss her a rack or two cos Des don’t amount to dirt
Isn’t enough in Embank to stop me from burying the faggot under a mound of earth
This was pretty solid.
Who taught Des to rap? Look at this guy, swear he’s phased every time
Whatever his ‘training wills’…it’s getting met w/ two extensions placed to his side
This was cool.
Frac claims love when Jaden don’t attempt to be sweet
Drive fast where ever J walk & leave her dead in the street
Simple jab.
Coward ur words mean nothin, its levels to this, don’t get comfortable homie
Only ‘Em Pact’ we wanna see come true…is Des hurling himself from multiple stories
I liked this.
Can’t rap cold blooded, we laugh cuz the shit u’ve drawn worse
Dude ur such a snake...u deserve a special shoutout from a Sinacog verse
This was a light jab.
& you ain’t no pimp Frac, hotels & bitches? Lame you a bitch
Yeah you roll through lobby’s w/women, but end up having to wait for a tip
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Des

i actually like spree. i mean, he never even bites
but he drinks bud light, which is also what i’ve thought about every bar i’ve seen him write
Seen bud light angles similar before. Executed nicely, so still a decent jab.
tread gingerly around me, otherwise i’ll make u die slow
watch des pull up and shoot to put him underground if ry’s home
Didnt do much for me.

Frac


How u do 16 lines in an 8 line battle? Unreal… bums chill
Im finnah make you regret being out of turn like the bitch ruggs killed
Cool jab
Rino & Spree.. 2 brainless losers who have no name or future
Im a world beater, while u goofs couldn’t have a target audience as the vegas shooter
Decent jab.
I'm mean, rude.. me n des v. these dudes?
ill have the whole crowds jaws dropped while slayin u, this jada in Scream 2
Solid.
Sprees jaden lines will fall flat, itll read like every diss is hurried
Hes a landscaper,.. he butchers trees while rino butchers wording
Decent personal jab.
U cashin checks at Walmart, while I have ur girl soaked in nut
Now u come home to no food done & shes all about space like Don’t Look Up
Second don't look up line I've seen recently. Its okay.
Don’t trip spree, ill have you out this tourney in a second
And why they call u rino? Ur more of a Jackass… always hurting for attention
[B]Simple but effective jab.
This is close. I got Ryno & Spree edging this by a bar.
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Kinda disappointing from both. Spree and ryno started strong but tapered off a bit with the empathe name play getting repetitive. Fracs whole section seems rushed and des had one hit and one miss. Target audience was nice but I think ryno/spree edged it

Vote - ryno / spree
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Fuck another miscarriage out Des wife & nut in her juice poon
I pull 7 inches of flesh out her pussy,..that’s just somethin she use to
way to start off lmao this was brutal imagery but u could have done more with the personal angle with some better wording
Didn’t wanna battle u chumps, but I had to, they say my text is too legit
Last time Frac ‘forced someone’s hand’...he wound up on the sex offenders list
cool jab, pretty funny
Toss her a rack or two cos Des don’t amount to dirt
Isn’t enough in Embank to stop me from burying the faggot under a mound of earth
idk the wording felt a bit clunky to me..the wording is cool but could have used some more polish
Who taught Des to rap? Look at this guy, swear he’s phased every time
Whatever his ‘training wills’…it’s getting met w/ two extensions placed to his side
this was cool i actually liked this
Frac claims love when Jaden don’t attempt to be sweet
Drive fast where ever J walk & leave her dead in the street
cool wording but angle's a bit predictable
Coward ur words mean nothin, its levels to this, don’t get comfortable homie
Only ‘Em Pact’ we wanna see come true…is Des hurling himself from multiple stories
solid bar, gets it done but not the strongest
Can’t rap cold blooded, we laugh cuz the shit u’ve drawn worse
Dude ur such a snake...u deserve a special shoutout from a Sinacog verse
havent read many sinacog verses but even if i did this would still be a light jab for me
& you ain’t no pimp Frac, hotels & bitches? Lame you a bitch
Yeah you roll through lobby’s w/women, but end up having to wait for a tip
this was pretty light too

blue chews for jaden

Des

i actually like spree. i mean, he never even bites
but he drinks bud light, which is also what i’ve thought about every bar i’ve seen him write
okay punch, wording could be smoother
tread gingerly around me, otherwise i’ll make u die slow
watch des pull up and shoot to put him underground if ry’s home
this one missed for me. saw lars' vote and got it but even then it still wasn't hitting

Frac

How u do 16 lines in an 8 line battle? Unreal… bums chill
Im finnah make you regret being out of turn like the bitch ruggs killed
dont know the reference but the other votes say its a personal. good wording though
Rino & Spree.. 2 brainless losers who have no name or future
Im a world beater, while u goofs couldn’t have a target audience as the vegas shooter
this was the best bar of the battle so far imo
I'm mean, rude.. me n des v. these dudes?
ill have the whole crowds jaws dropped while slayin u, this jada in Scream 2
punch was set up nice but the set up before that seemed winded. decent jab still though
Sprees jaden lines will fall flat, itll read like every diss is hurried
Hes a landscaper,.. he butchers trees while rino butchers wording
decent jab. i like how you extended the personal angle
U cashin checks at Walmart, while I have ur girl soaked in nut
Now u come home to no food done & shes all about space like Don’t Look Up
wording was cool but i wasnt feeling the line all that much
Don’t trip spree, ill have you out this tourney in a second
And why they call u rino? Ur more of a Jackass… always hurting for attention
cool jab not bad

im giving this to blue chews for jaden. ryno/spree did their thing, and the battle was decently close. i just though frac's portion was consistent enough push past des' shortcomings. cool battle
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Fuck another miscarriage out Des wife & nut in her juice poon
I pull 7 inches of flesh out her pussy,..that’s just somethin she use to

eh, i feel like the miscarriage bars have been done a lot and this didnt resonate with me as a fresh angle

Didn’t wanna battle u chumps, but I had to, they say my text is too legit
Last time Frac ‘forced someone’s hand’...he wound up on the sex offenders list

cool

Toss her a rack or two cos Des don’t amount to dirt
Isn’t enough in Embank to stop me from burying the faggot under a mound of earth

not really feeling the wp style here but it's alright

Who taught Des to rap? Look at this guy, swear he’s phased every time
Whatever his ‘training wills’…it’s getting met w/ two extensions placed to his side

wheels/wills is a little bit of a stretch, wording on this is a bit awkward but i like the idea

Frac claims love when Jaden don’t attempt to be sweet
Drive fast where ever J walk & leave her dead in the street

I think the second half of this couldve been flipped a little better. you're kinda talking about the same street in both sides of this metaphor

Coward ur words mean nothin, its levels to this, don’t get comfortable homie
Only ‘Em Pact’ we wanna see come true…is Des hurling himself from multiple stories

cool

Can’t rap cold blooded, we laugh cuz the shit u’ve drawn worse
Dude ur such a snake...u deserve a special shoutout from a Sinacog verse

kind corny tbh

& you ain’t no pimp Frac, hotels & bitches? Lame you a bitch
Yeah you roll through lobby’s w/women, but end up having to wait for a tip

nah not really feeling this



i actually like spree. i mean, he never even bites
but he drinks bud light, which is also what i’ve thought about every bar i’ve seen him write

eh, kinda played

tread gingerly around me, otherwise i’ll make u die slow
watch des pull up and shoot to put him underground if ry’s home

ok

How u do 16 lines in an 8 line battle? Unreal… bums chill
Im finnah make you regret being out of turn like the bitch ruggs killed

cool

Rino & Spree.. 2 brainless losers who have no name or future
Im a world beater, while u goofs couldn’t have a target audience as the vegas shooter

this ones dope to me. wording mayybe couldve been harsher, but i like it

I'm mean, rude.. me n des v. these dudes?
ill have the whole crowds jaws dropped while slayin u, this jada in Scream 2

eh it's okay, kind of an old reference and wording couldve been smoother

Sprees jaden lines will fall flat, itll read like every diss is hurried
Hes a landscaper,.. he butchers trees while rino butchers wording

ok personal, but not off the charts on creativity

U cashin checks at Walmart, while I have ur girl soaked in nut
Now u come home to no food done & shes all about space like Don’t Look Up

I feel like there's a missing tie-in with the space reference here

Don’t trip spree, ill have you out this tourney in a second
And why they call u rino? Ur more of a Jackass… always hurting for attention

cool idea, again the wording couldve been stronger but I like the idea



ryno/spree

Didn’t wanna battle u chumps, but I had to, they say my text is too legit
Last time Frac ‘forced someone’s hand’...he wound up on the sex offenders list
Who taught Des to rap? Look at this guy, swear he’s phased every time
Whatever his ‘training wills’…it’s getting met w/ two extensions placed to his side


frac/des
Rino & Spree.. 2 brainless losers who have no name or future
Im a world beater, while u goofs couldn’t have a target audience as the vegas shooter
Don’t trip spree, ill have you out this tourney in a second
And why they call u rino? Ur more of a Jackass… always hurting for attention


of the 4 lines i quoted, I prefer the 2 from frac/des. I'd say that ryno/spree had the more effective wording, so their concepts landed with more of a sting for me, but conceptually nothing really stood out to me and I feel like the momentum tapered off for the last 4 lines of it. Frac/des had fresher concepts and decent wording, but could've gotten a little more out of them if they took a harsher approach.

V/ frac and des
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Fuck another miscarriage out Des wife & nut in her juice poon
I pull 7 inches of flesh out her pussy,..that’s just somethin she use to
this angle has been done too much like this...nice try though

Didn’t wanna battle u chumps, but I had to, they say my text is too legit
Last time Frac ‘forced someone’s hand’...he wound up on the sex offenders list
better, we dont need the quotes

Toss her a rack or two cos Des don’t amount to dirt
Isn’t enough in Embank to stop me from burying the faggot under a mound of earth
what i dont like about these name flips is it hinged on an old alias thats irrelevant. line was ok

Who taught Des to rap? Look at this guy, swear he’s phased every time
Whatever his ‘training wills’…it’s getting met w/ two extensions placed to his side
liked the two extensions part. wheels was eh aight

Frac claims love when Jaden don’t attempt to be sweet
Drive fast where ever J walk & leave her dead in the street
not enough here doing it for me

Coward ur words mean nothin, its levels to this, don’t get comfortable homie
Only ‘Em Pact’ we wanna see come true…is Des hurling himself from multiple stories
i liked this nameplay better. youre kind of reaching though w/ a partial name of a old ass alias tho lol

Can’t rap cold blooded, we laugh cuz the shit u’ve drawn worse
Dude ur such a snake...u deserve a special shoutout from a Sinacog verse
i didnt like this... sin mostly talks about dragons & shit. even if he mentioned snakes most his stuff is just non sensical anyway. i like these ref lines when done well but missed for me.

& you ain’t no pimp Frac, hotels & bitches? Lame you a bitch
Yeah you roll through lobby’s w/women, but end up having to wait for a tip
needed a different spin. i think the personal of a hotel clerk is good but needed a better meta imo..


i actually like spree. i mean, he never even bites
but he drinks bud light, which is also what i’ve thought about every bar i’ve seen him write
feels done/predictable & this was long winded

tread gingerly around me, otherwise i’ll make u die slow
watch des pull up and shoot to put him underground if ry’s home
alright, though the wording couldve been better

How u do 16 lines in an 8 line battle? Unreal… bums chill
Im finnah make you regret being out of turn like the bitch ruggs killed
cool current event

Rino & Spree.. 2 brainless losers who have no name or future
Im a world beater, while u goofs couldn’t have a target audience as the vegas shooter
solid hit, another ref

I'm mean, rude.. me n des v. these dudes?
ill have the whole crowds jaws dropped while slayin u, this jada in Scream 2
Sprees jaden lines will fall flat, itll read like every diss is hurried
Hes a landscaper,.. he butchers trees while rino butchers wording
these were eh oks to me. i didnt like that scream reference as much, 2nd wasnt doing for me w the butcher trees

U cashin checks at Walmart, while I have ur girl soaked in nut
Now u come home to no food done & shes all about space like Don’t Look Up
Fresh concept.. couldve used a better tie in

Don’t trip spree, ill have you out this tourney in a second
And why they call u rino? Ur more of a Jackass… always hurting for attention
hurting for attention helped this

ive got blue chew for jaden w/ a couple more effective hits w/ the first 2.
other team had some shit too like forced hand but i felt the best stuff were Em flips which felt borderline grasping for nps.

vote- Des/Frac
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