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Old 03-24-2020, 04:57 AM   #1
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GTL WK2: @orrie (0-0) vs @fraze (0-0)

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Old 03-24-2020, 08:01 PM   #2
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Old 03-27-2020, 07:48 PM   #3
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"Cutflower expedites process.."

The paraphonic growls of timber
and chutes shrilling
aren’t enough to awaken me
amidst heart’s unwinding.
The timing is unusual;
as are the meetings that gather

folk and light
thistle and warning
acclimation and possession

They say a light guides you
if it’s beside you,
And we carry through villages
a surplus of temptation/comfort
Fairy spuds move laterally
between horse tracks
and calves, cracks create three
where there was one.

one case study: originality has ceded
from cedar shores adorned by creature lore.

We burn at night
so that the morning incense
mix the dust of cutflower
and history’s gone,

I walk like a bear-trap hidden
beneath the snow
with an innkeeper,
who keeps tally of bird feathers

and the reflection of light
allows me to see the hatchet he holds,
assuring me with each strike
generations will grow thin and old.

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Old 03-27-2020, 07:54 PM   #4
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LOL @orrie are you @Candy’s mom?
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Old 03-27-2020, 08:03 PM   #5
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LOL @orrie are you @Candy’s mom?
I wish.

Then I could finally confirm where this rash came from.
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Old 03-30-2020, 03:57 PM   #6
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I think you’re good. This isn’t the “style” I’m used to seeing here, it’s very different than what we’re familiar with, I think in terms of pure writing - your word choice, your descriptive imagery, your writers voice - you’re strong. I’m not so sure how well this more poetic tale would fare against some of our more technically proficient and rhyme scheme heavy writers, that would be a style clash for sure and could be interesting to see unfold, but you definitely have more in the tank than some of the current sign-ins and I’ll enjoy seeing you face them as you progress.

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I hate to echo what Clut has already said but he has a strong point. Really like your tale stylistically but don't know if it would measure up well in a "battle" scenario against somebody whose story was a little more concrete and with a better bridged storyline. I enjoyed this piece as a standalone nonetheless so good work
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