09-06-2016, 02:00 PM | #1 |
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King Karaoke vs Schadenfruede - Karaoke wins.
Summer Classic VII Due Friday September 9th Extension available if your opponent allows it. 24hr ext ONLY. Minimum - 10 lines Max - 16 lines line limit can increase if both agree NO biting NO swaying NO feeding NO recycling You must check in Don't edit after your opponent has posted 2nd person to post can't edit after the first vote comes in Don't be an idiot Don't use your opponent's pic unless it's a pic battle Agree on a line limit May God have mercy on your souls @schadenfruede @King Karaoke |
09-06-2016, 02:02 PM | #2 |
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09-06-2016, 02:04 PM | #3 |
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09-07-2016, 10:22 AM | #4 |
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In... Bye...
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09-10-2016, 12:36 PM | #5 |
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Hi...
I'd give u a shell quick but you're already living in hell prick The soundtrack to your life was probably produced by Infinity tha Rellik You got bitches burning, running around sharing your flame Can't get anywhere with a dame cuz the STI you've got could put Baron's to shame All your verses are trash, you've never had a dope bar, fag Your record's got so many L's across it, shit's starting to resemble a Goyard bag My aim's crazy, hit your dome without using a scope for the sight You'll be taking more shots to the head than Cam did on opening night All I know is guns and drugs, my homies get the blanco pure Act tough and the 380'll lift a rapper in the air faster than the Saint Pablo tour This battle's a cakewalk, I'm not afraid of Freude Philly Cheesesteak or Chicago Italian Beef? Shit, either way we think you're food Women are repulsed by you, you couldn't even make water moist So fuck adopting, cuz if u wind up forever alone, obviously it was not ur choice They won't find your body no matter how hard they search The heat'll take your wig off like a grandmother after church Bye...
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09-10-2016, 02:02 PM | #6 |
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Look dude..
I'm TeamGrudge, even over mean mugs, it's known Idgaf get trapped no exit hater, u're on a escalator, stares alone can send it up. Fool u fucked, blame ya gay ass ‘hi & bye’ posting habit, especially since a high & bi bitch's a rape that's “supposed” to happen. Must’ve inherited being pussy, never seen swinging hands avoid The Clash, even ya dad was more punk in the 80s than English bands. Suppressor on my pistol Black, barely hear a whistle crack rounds’ll exit u, hit ya cat. Shit even Karpet cleared - ghat’s a Bissell vac. Deep belief in Heaven’ll get your family there a lil sooner, cherish yo future, riding masked up in a 6, one .9 will Rey Mysterio, Junior. Ya girl does booty calls, exits the house w/ a veiled purpose came over & undressed so fast she left T-Mobile, but not cuz of cell service. Know u love the bitch, I’ll peel her just to fuck w/ ya life.. fuck for a night, then send her to a cat’ll peel her w/ a butterfly knife. Dude ya style's an easy formula, yo success mostly fraud, simply recite a known statement & these idiots follow along - Karaoke Bar. ..BODY. |
09-13-2016, 01:35 PM | #7 |
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I'd give u a shell quick but you're already living in hell prick The soundtrack to your life was probably produced by Infinity tha Rellik ok You got bitches burning, running around sharing your flame Can't get anywhere with a dame cuz the STI you've got could put Baron's to shame lol nice All your verses are trash, you've never had a dope bar, fag Your record's got so many L's across it, shit's starting to resemble a Goyard bag mmm decent My aim's crazy, hit your dome without using a scope for the sight You'll be taking more shots to the head than Cam did on opening night this was good All I know is guns and drugs, my homies get the blanco pure Act tough and the 380'll lift a rapper in the air faster than the Saint Pablo tour ha ok This battle's a cakewalk, I'm not afraid of Freude Philly Cheesesteak or Chicago Italian Beef? Shit, either way we think you're food nah this was lame Women are repulsed by you, you couldn't even make water moist So fuck adopting, cuz if u wind up forever alone, obviously it was not ur choice didnt like this either They won't find your body no matter how hard they search The heat'll take your wig off like a grandmother after church lmao bra... vs Join Date: Sep 2015 Posts: 615 Battle Record: 16-10 Rep Power: 10182299 Schadenfreude has a brilliant futureSchadenfreude has a brilliant futureSchadenfreude has a brilliant futureSchadenfreude has a brilliant futureSchadenfreude has a brilliant futureSchadenfreude has a brilliant futureSchadenfreude has a brilliant futureSchadenfreude has a brilliant futureSchadenfreude has a brilliant futureSchadenfreude has a brilliant futureSchadenfreude has a brilliant future Default Look dude.. I'm TeamGrudge, even over mean mugs, it's known Idgaf get trapped no exit hater, u're on a escalator, stares alone can send it up. great wording and flow but didn't like the punch Fool u fucked, blame ya gay ass ‘hi & bye’ posting habit, especially since a high & bi bitch's a rape that's “supposed” to happen. cringed here tbh man Must’ve inherited being pussy, never seen swinging hands avoid The Clash, even ya dad was more punk in the 80s than English bands. hmm ok Suppressor on my pistol Black, barely hear a whistle crack rounds’ll exit u, hit ya cat. Shit even Karpet cleared - ghat’s a Bissell vac. alright complex af I have no idea what this is but I'll take your word for it being good Deep belief in Heaven’ll get your family there a lil sooner, cherish yo future, riding masked up in a 6, one .9 will Rey Mysterio, Junior. wording was weird here Ya girl does booty calls, exits the house w/ a veiled purpose came over & undressed so fast she left T-Mobile, but not cuz of cell service. after about 5 reads of this I still can't seem to like it Know u love the bitch, I’ll peel her just to fuck w/ ya life.. fuck for a night, then send her to a cat’ll peel her w/ a butterfly knife. ehh forced but I guess Dude ya style's an easy formula, yo success mostly fraud, simply recite a known statement & these idiots follow along - Karaoke Bar. this was dopeeeeee Damn, after reading kar's verse last week I definitely came in here expecting a lackluster repeat cause he def robbed Cred. But this week he dropped nice. Scad I thought was gonna win easily because of his verse last week but this week I feel he dropped bad, all I really liked was his closer tbh.... Vote: Kar |
09-13-2016, 04:34 PM | #8 |
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I'd give u a shell quick but you're already living in hell prick
The soundtrack to your life was probably produced by Infinity tha Rellik nice You got bitches burning, running around sharing your flame Can't get anywhere with a dame cuz the STI you've got could put Baron's to shame nice All your verses are trash, you've never had a dope bar, fag Your record's got so many L's across it, shit's starting to resemble a Goyard bag alright My aim's crazy, hit your dome without using a scope for the sight You'll be taking more shots to the head than Cam did on opening night this was good All I know is guns and drugs, my homies get the blanco pure Act tough and the 380'll lift a rapper in the air faster than the Saint Pablo tour alright This battle's a cakewalk, I'm not afraid of Freude Philly Cheesesteak or Chicago Italian Beef? Shit, either way we think you're food not feeling it. Women are repulsed by you, you couldn't even make water moist So fuck adopting, cuz if u wind up forever alone, obviously it was not ur choice alright They won't find your body no matter how hard they search The heat'll take your wig off like a grandmother after church nice vs I'm TeamGrudge, even over mean mugs, it's known Idgaf get trapped no exit hater, u're on a escalator, stares alone can send it up. alright Fool u fucked, blame ya gay ass ‘hi & bye’ posting habit, especially since a high & bi bitch's a rape that's “supposed” to happen. nah Must’ve inherited being pussy, never seen swinging hands avoid The Clash, even ya dad was more punk in the 80s than English bands. ehhh Suppressor on my pistol Black, barely hear a whistle crack rounds’ll exit u, hit ya cat. Shit even Karpet cleared - ghat’s a Bissell vac. ehhh Deep belief in Heaven’ll get your family there a lil sooner, cherish yo future, riding masked up in a 6, one .9 will Rey Mysterio, Junior. kinda Ya girl does booty calls, exits the house w/ a veiled purpose came over & undressed so fast she left T-Mobile, but not cuz of cell service. what? Know u love the bitch, I’ll peel her just to fuck w/ ya life.. fuck for a night, then send her to a cat’ll peel her w/ a butterfly knife. no Dude ya style's an easy formula, yo success mostly fraud, simply recite a known statement & these idiots follow along - Karaoke Bar. good closer overall i must say i think Karaoke came with better punches that were filled with more kicks as to where i only really liked freudes closer. i felt freude could have came more stronger here if he pushed his limit. Karaoke had a strong creative use of his fillers and enders. gotta give it to him. v/ Karaoke
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09-14-2016, 08:23 PM | #10 |
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Karaoke: This verse felt overtly by-the-book. You started with two timely Netcees.co references, transitioned into three pop-culture punches, threw in two outright bad lines and closed with a gun bar. The segmentation of these phases made the verse feel fractured. Your opener and closer were the funniest lines. The STI one felt a little too easy (that’s the reason he chose the name), as did the Cam Newton one. The Saint Pablo tour line might have been the strongest line from the middle. You keep a consistent voice through your verses, which I like, but this time, it felt a little matter-of-fact and almost bored. This was OK, but it was nowhere near your top caliber.
Schadenfreude: There were elements of this verse that were good. Your flow was mostly fine, though there were times where you forced an extra rhyme in that clunked things up instead of smoothing it out. The opener was a good tone-setter. Still, I don’t even know what to make of including both a mediocre karaoke bar and a mediocre “hi and bye” line in a tournament semifinals verse against Karaoke. He’s been battling under that name and using that gimmick for more than a decade. The Karpet line almost worked, but the wording really made it awkward. There’s a good example of an instance where you jammed an internal rhyme in for no reason and it fucked up the whole line. The butterfly knife line was incredibly lazy. Nothing really landed. Vote: Karaoke
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09-14-2016, 09:54 PM | #11 |
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I've got Kar here, I've seen shaden come better, but karaoke's can be hard to write for as a lot has been done vs him. I thought your opener and The Clash lines were your best. Karaoke was more solid w/ the STI, goyard, st Pablo tour.. that food line was ehh tho lol.
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09-14-2016, 10:41 PM | #12 |
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I'd give u a shell quick but you're already living in hell prick
The soundtrack to your life was probably produced by Infinity tha Rellik Lol aight bet You got bitches burning, running around sharing your flame Can't get anywhere with a dame cuz the STI you've got could put Baron's to shame This was nice All your verses are trash, you've never had a dope bar, fag Your record's got so many L's across it, shit's starting to resemble a Goyard bag Fire vs I'm TeamGrudge, even over mean mugs, it's known Idgaf get trapped no exit hater, u're on a escalator, stares alone can send it up. im fuckin wit it Must’ve inherited being pussy, never seen swinging hands avoid The Clash, even ya dad was more punk in the 80s than English bands. Dope Deep belief in Heaven’ll get your family there a lil sooner, cherish yo future, riding masked up in a 6, one .9 will Rey Mysterio, Junior. This one almost aint make the quote but i fucked wit da concept heavy This was a nice battle here tbh. Im fuckin wit both verses n actually had it pretty even in quotes, but judging by my preference of bars im going kar here. Both did yall thing Vote / Karaoke |
09-15-2016, 10:35 AM | #13 |
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09-15-2016, 09:54 PM | #14 |
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Opener is a little light and the rhyming on "hell prick" "rellik" is clearly off. Someone else had a STI line in the 1-2 that overshadowed this one. Purse bags are a hard sell. Cam bar is CRAZY - nice execution.. timely af too. Nice shit. Kanye bar is fuckin insane too. Nice simple angle with solid execution. Off rhyming again in the food bar. Looks like you're scraping from Discussion for concepts. Grandmother bar was crazy. Kar - 3 lines here were fucking flames, the other parts were pretty light. Schad. Opener feels overworked. Not feelin the high and bi concept. Feels stretched. Clash line is ok. but still feels like a miss. Karpet is a stretch. Mysterio line, set up and rhyming is crazy, but not feeling the end result. I'm not getting the T-Mobile. caterpillar/butterfly is ehh. Closer is nice. Schad, I think you overthought yourself on this one. I've seen you execute great concepts time after time - but this felt like every line was reaching for the stars and never quite landing. I kept wishing you could bring it back down to earth, but most of the concepts were too overcooked to land hard in my mind. Vote -- Karaoke for two exceptional bars and one really good one.
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