07-23-2013, 09:02 PM | #1 |
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Nev vs. Dope - NEV WINS BY KO
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07-23-2013, 09:03 PM | #2 |
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07-23-2013, 09:25 PM | #3 |
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07-23-2013, 09:34 PM | #4 |
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Lets get acquainted you bring the drama ill introduce you to pain...
Got em itchin to take a shot, like a dog with flees proceed to scratch off this lame.. So this L cuts deep...im out to hurt feeling pinching nerves aint enough... Cut down the beef godda diet to die for .. you lunch So sad its tragic...picture me losing to this faggot... Born a man kick him in the closet lock him in.. No second chance at life this is where ya hell begin.. Wipe the smile off ya face when i knock it off ya chin.. Like who next this a breeze bruh ..all i do win... Dope at it again bring your existence to a end
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07-23-2013, 09:41 PM | #5 |
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You agreed to 30 mins right? Guess i cant complain im 2mins late...
Bruh im using a cellphone to type its well over 30...cmon 10bars???
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07-24-2013, 08:40 AM | #6 |
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Yea my bad some shit came up.
This Little faggot flames until there's nothing left Your'e tryna get in the game but it's sudden death You dropped first, I'm suprised you had the balls to rap Under pressure you snap like the man infront of the quaterback No need to respond or talk, it's over I'll roll up on your block like a G, you roll up on a block like chauffer In my life never have I heard a worse sound You rapping is like a fat kid it won't work out I got steel to hit up you tired bums THe only steel you have is when I leave you in the iron lung |
07-24-2013, 08:59 AM | #7 |
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Painful stuff
Neither of you have a grip on your shit Just for the better attempts I will vote the nev kid
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07-24-2013, 11:48 AM | #8 |
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Whatever you agreed 30 and was logged in all day gtfoh im not fuckin with you
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07-24-2013, 01:02 PM | #9 |
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07-24-2013, 03:42 PM | #10 |
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@Nev - basically the entire verse was the same. in general, it seems like youre wording like you would a verse, which isnt bad but it basically means theres a lot of unused space - to really do some damage you need to do expand on concepts a lot, whereas your whole style was kind of basic. you have a grasp on it, but theres plenty of fine tuning and that comes with reading good battles and time/practice. also watch out for little thingslike how in the first bar, first line you're addressing him in 3rd person. second line youre in second. things like that can take away from a punch. but yeah, nev had a much clearer grasp on how to do text, so he was able to do more damage. v/nev |
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07-26-2013, 11:30 PM | #13 |
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Dope you going at him in a harsh manner but your not throwing any punches...I like the aggressiveness but you have to be witty
Nev you were about in the same boat except you threw punches, they were just really weak Im have to go Nev just for at least throwin something V/Nev |
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