11-25-2014, 05:40 PM | #1 |
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Apeirogon vs E Tha Real - E WINS
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11-25-2014, 05:47 PM | #2 |
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Apeirogon is a polygon with infinite sides... your so misguided
Name is fitting since his battles are lopsided Worst alias name ever this'll be easy b If your the dawn of apes... That flick went straight to DVD Ass getting hand it, is this what you planned bitch? Voters would go ape shit, if you got banned quick Late arrival alias noob tourney, he's on some shit I'll have 'gon going' like a jack johnson hit You drop science contributions none fear it If this ape turns into a man. I question the evolution theorists Name implies you like animals and got pride bitch Only animal here could plummet a maroon 5 hit My bullets ready to go and will rip through his vest Making ape-fly, I'm no wicked witch of the west |
11-25-2014, 06:28 PM | #3 |
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been talkin shit like some ass to mouth ....... go head. act Funke. you'll be on a boat witchya brains blown out like that bitch from casting couch we could talk about drinking but youd prolly leave the topic quick when I black out I usually try to give a chick this onyx dick ...... when u black out ya put a du-rag on & try to speak ebonics bitch net loser. u fucking geek. i doubt a single girl has ever been in ur house yea you got a lot of X's ..... cuz no one ever swipes right on your tinder account you need to make your body a hobby, lift some weights, go on a fast troll only conditioning uve ever tried? was getting ur dog to lick peanut butter offa ur asshole but that furniture you got in the crib really must be somethin holmes! cuz anywhere but the couch or computer desk is outside ur comfort zone youre a pussy and its really showing, ima fix the camel toe that shit you posteds so petty. might as well get a mani with it while you're at it hoe |
11-26-2014, 01:06 PM | #4 |
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opener ..evolution apogwtfever tinder was nice rest was eh to.ok dude conditioning was wtf. more pauseworthy than my burn uo during reentry line n thatsvbad lol. didnt like urs tbh v/e by one quote
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12-01-2014, 02:53 PM | #5 |
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12-01-2014, 03:48 PM | #6 |
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Apeirogon is a polygon with infinite sides... your so misguided
Name is fitting since his battles are lopsided ok but kinda basic Worst alias name ever this'll be easy b If your the dawn of apes... That flick went straight to DVD cool idea Ass getting hand it, is this what you planned bitch? Voters would go ape shit, if you got banned quick eh Late arrival alias noob tourney, he's on some shit I'll have 'gon going' like a jack johnson hit cool You drop science contributions none fear it If this ape turns into a man. I question the evolution theorists eh Name implies you like animals and got pride bitch Only animal here could plummet a maroon 5 hit nah My bullets ready to go and will rip through his vest Making ape-fly, I'm no wicked witch of the west cool but at this point I'm tired of ape lines tbh been talkin shit like some ass to mouth ....... go head. act Funke. you'll be on a boat witchya brains blown out like that bitch from casting couch really basic flip of a cool idea we could talk about drinking but youd prolly leave the topic quick when I black out I usually try to give a chick this onyx dick ...... when u black out ya put a du-rag on & try to speak ebonics bitch more of a swag line but wasn't too good... too stretched to really hit for me net loser. u fucking geek. i doubt a single girl has ever been in ur house yea you got a lot of X's ..... cuz no one ever swipes right on your tinder account cool tbh you need to make your body a hobby, lift some weights, go on a fast troll only conditioning uve ever tried? was getting ur dog to lick peanut butter offa ur asshole lol... didn't really hit but that furniture you got in the crib really must be somethin holmes! cuz anywhere but the couch or computer desk is outside ur comfort zone nah youre a pussy and its really showing, ima fix the camel toe that shit you posteds so petty. might as well get a mani with it while you're at it hoe eh close, I thought the tinder line was lotb but E was overall better with fewer misses. both had kinda basic flips but E played it safe and just did nameflips on a dude I ain't seen before so they all kinda hit. Apeiro was cool but too many lines that didn't hit hurt him so E wins by a bit. Hope to see both dudes polish up wording casue they both had cool concepts v/E |
12-02-2014, 08:48 PM | #7 |
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yo @Sharp Nine
ain't tryna sweat you cuzz, I appreciate you at least voting ..... but did you understand the connection with alyssa Funke - casting couch - brains blown out? is that concept been used? just wanna understand why you said "really basic flip" |
12-02-2014, 08:59 PM | #8 | |
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idk what 'act funk' is supposed to mean, but my problem with the flip is that it was cool in theory but you did the really basic simile - unless there's something going on there otherwise you just kinda said 'you'll be dead like recently dead person' |
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12-02-2014, 09:13 PM | #9 |
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act "funky" is how you'd say that. go head, brains blown out. SLOOOW IT DOWN
nah i get your point though, thanks for the explanation |
12-03-2014, 01:06 AM | #10 |
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I actually googled it and I came up with it pronounced as "funk" but figured it was funky anyway lol. and the 'go head' was a nice touch tbh it was just that flip that made me a lil disappointed cause you set it up with wordplay but the punch was just that simile
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12-14-2014, 11:37 PM | #11 |
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Apeirogon is a polygon with infinite sides... your so misguided
Name is fitting since his battles are lopsided nah next 1 ok next nah 4th nah 5th ok 6th ok 7 ok vss first one was good 2nd no 3rd no 4th no 5th kinda 6th/7th ok got e more consitency |
12-15-2014, 12:47 PM | #12 |
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Yeah well I guess I gotta go for E in this battle,
I didnt like it at all, neither apealed to me. But I think he had better punches. Looking back on Sharps breakdown... Yeah I guess I agree, thought the 'ape shit' line was ok. Basically it comrs down to my opion of what battles should be, and that is that obscure refences should not be used if possible, they should be more taylor made for the reader, having to google to understand a punch takes the moment away for me and a few of Apes lines were to 'google-intensive'. So E gets it. |
12-18-2014, 04:59 PM | #13 |
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Battle was ok'ish. Nothing really stood out for me. A lot of good ideas but horribly executed or lacked any type of witty/creative twist.
E - We've discussed this previously. I like your style. I like how your just straight to the point but at the same time, a lot of your bars come off really basic. And the over usage of simile's for me isn't effective. If you were to think out the majority of your concepts and add some creative witty concepts and or executions, you'd be straight, dawgz. Ape - I like your structure format a lot better. You seem to have the fundamentals of text battling down, however your bars lacked substance here. For an example your opener was an ok concept that could have landed effectively if it was executed in a more harsher manner. That 3 line bar was stretched and threw me of completely as I lost the flow, tbh. If you are going to utilize long bar format, use rhyme schemes with inner slant rhymes or some type of ABBA or ABAB rhyme pattern, dig? But all in all, I think I've only seen one other verse from you and it was better so not really sure if you applied yourself here but as I stated, you have the fundamentals down. Just focus on executing your concepts more harsher and you'll be straight man. I think E took this battle barely. His punches were just a little more effective and wording was a lot cleaner/less choppy. Keep writing guys. v/E |
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