03-06-2016, 07:23 PM | #1 |
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OG Smokinstein 0-2 Vs Wanderer 1-3 - (Wanderer wins)
NBL Season 9 Due THURSDAY Minimum - 10 lines Max - 20 lines Line limit can increase if both agree NO biting NO swaying NO feeding NO recycling You must check in Don't edit after your opponent has posted 2nd person to post can't edit after the first vote comes in Don't be an idiot You MUST vote on all battles & post your links in the Voting Thread Don't use your opponent's pic unless it's a pic battle Agree on a line limit May God have mercy on your souls @Og smokinstein @Wanderer
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03-07-2016, 02:34 AM | #2 |
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03-08-2016, 06:50 AM | #4 |
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03-08-2016, 04:07 PM | #5 |
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I'll shiv this cunt in the abdomen for cheating to fuse a win
So you can recycle internals all you like.. that kindey'll never be used again probs molested as a kid but I can help. the blade will bury depression Opening you up til horrible shit starts to spill out, that's a therapy session You're boring & I know why You'll never claim a girls hand Cos If there's ever a chick who Smoke Meats you know she doesn't like anything bland I'm status and money to bitches so this joke's shook you ain't ever flicked through paper, that's why your girl remains a closed book 1 right hook & you're quittin hard. Trusstt me this fist Smart, I make professional contact with the hands like an exchange of business cards & ya girl's like a fuck train. Dudes been nailing her for weeks in your joint I mean menopausing for breaks then going back for more til she reaches that point People wanna see you savagely beaten & ill oblige cos I gotta man Waste him wit the bat or shooter? Everyone chants for the club like soccer fans |
03-10-2016, 11:10 AM | #6 |
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03-11-2016, 08:41 PM | #7 |
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Let wanderer trip and ill book him room, for a vacation in a graveyard of some sort.
Could've been the Palms or The Ramada inn, but you chose dying as the last Resort. Cause what I write is sick, terminal,-get- destroyed like a plane crashing into a airport. I'm Omar with a Newport, I grew up in the trenches- with-the-shotty-smoking. That Mossberg I'm toting like a bad Defensive Back,it'll leave the receiver wide open. It kickback like a badass kid behind you on a flight, so if Usain/you sane blot then. I'm the wrong nigga to be provoking, give your last Girlfriend a choppa for combat. That jus means, youll get the sig by the Ex like the bottom of a contract. I gotta ill mind, and a cell phone full of killers, that's crazy contacts like Hopsin eyes. Each one kill you in the field, cause beef get-lead-out in the pasture ,like a cattle drive. your bitch on a mission think Watergate; operation-deep-throat like a tonsillectomy She handle that gag-order better than, a witnesses in a trial of a celebrity. I got 45th bullet with wanderer's name on, with intentions of doing him especially bad. Soon as I cock it back, wanderer in the middle of the dessert like a nomad. |
03-12-2016, 03:35 PM | #8 | ||
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Both had dope angles here I got wanderer By a slim margin cuz og smoke wasn't on his usual form IMO and let a few rounds fumble V wand |
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03-12-2016, 05:40 PM | #9 | |
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Your wording really hurt u, the quotes were due to the concepts, but u need to polish up the wording/execution.
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03-12-2016, 07:42 PM | #10 |
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therapy session, Smoke Meats, business cards
from wanderer where really nice & bottom of contract, gag order from og were dope close battle, i can see this going either way but i got wanderer winning this by one more bar. og had some dope setups that coulda been used as bars like the hopsin one. gag order line was nice from og also, Wanderer thearpy session bar was dope. good battle. |
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03-13-2016, 12:40 PM | #12 |
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Therapy session, smoke meats, closed book, business cards, reaches that point, soccer fans
Vs. Last resort, sig by the ex, beef get lead out, gag order, wanderer in the middle of the desert Got it 6-5 in favor of Wanderer Probably my favorite battle to read this week. Good job and creativity by both |
03-13-2016, 04:58 PM | #13 |
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Wanderer, opener is a cool concept, but I don't know how many peopel recycle their internal rhymes.. like it's a bit of a faulty premise, but still a good idea in execution.
The second bar is dope. Great writing. Smoke Meats was a dope concept, but I feel coulda been made much harsher. Flicked thru paper is a cool idea too. Business cards is dope. Menopause is dope. Closer was dope. I gotta say I was pretty impressed with the variety of concepts. Even though a few were a bit of, or missed, it was still cool to see you try alotta different angles. OG - opener coulda been harsher. The next two bars are so off format, I don't know what to make of them.. I guess the rhyming is just really bad. The defensive back concept is pretty dope. The Usain Bolt shit, that double-spelling stuff doesn't really fly with this crowd. I'm not a fan personally. Contract line is cool, but it's hard to imagine dude's ex-girlf shooting him with an assault rifle just cuz you gave her the gun, lmao. Namean? Beef lines are played. Rest kinda fell off. I gotta vote for Wanderer. OG is cool, but I just think needs to get more acclimated to the NC tastes.
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