08-14-2018, 09:24 PM | #1 |
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BAL FINALS: BodySnatcher vs DynamiCz BODY WINS
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08-15-2018, 09:04 PM | #2 |
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08-17-2018, 03:06 PM | #3 |
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If I roll up in ur hometown… My new gun'll catch a body. I’m up in ATL just to spray son U’ll see the Hawk on ur chest Sooner than later...nigga this Trae Young But if we’re talking drive-bys...then I got ur head in my range So I’ma roll up & put a 'nickel in ur mug' cuz ur life is begging for change My burner will send rounds down ur lane w/a bowler handle So if sun rolls up...then I’ma let him 'absorb more heat' than a solar panel U smelled the belt for a week but that'll all be a blur soon To me a shipment...putting u in a hearse & scent in a box like perfume Shit, if ‘Dy rolls’...it’ll be an execution cuz my straps realer This stick will push ur shit back to the end of the table like a craps dealer Put up ur wifey in a bet. Cuz if u really wanna battle, fuck it By nightfall, she’ll be howling as I’m ‘doggin the walls’ like a shadow puppet I got my arm extended to ur throat...nigga, ur soul’s mine After '2 clips leave him hanging by a thread' like he ran into my clothesline I’m taking bets & ur waving the white flag. Boy, u'll die first Cuz we know where everybody’s Cashius...& it’s nowhere near Diverse Stick bigger than ur family tree. It’ll clap till ur dome is blown I’ll plant miCz & put his seeds in the air like the Bird Lady in Home Alone Flow, JB & now Dy...I left all these niggas dead from the mag I’m like a vendor collectin coins how I’m leaving w/ all these heads in a bag |
08-17-2018, 03:08 PM | #4 |
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Lets stop the jiving...Jabari Black name flips kept you surviving
When i flip somethin! The machine lift body in the air--Indoor skydiving You gotta prove me! All my friends dead when i slide this Lil Uzi When i give a couple clips inside the whip, it ain't a Drive In Movie Never forget! When i carry the stick, don't even question legit I get to aiming the shit....that mean the gun on body like a weapon permit The nina bad as a model..I fire! The bullet cooking out the knozzle This light ain't for charcoal! I'll have his top red like a Kingsford bottle AR hang like a midget down my calf! I keep the pole low like Ralph Gun butt...leave body structure in dents like i started a paragraph Im in the streets..State Trooper! See you in traffic..i will shoot ya Spot his 2 door..an lean the can over the sunroof like the Redbull Mini Cooper Glad you made it this far! I take the hostage route when i plug a star Big ass rope....that u'll pull bodies across the surface like tug of war I can spot BS a mile away...lurker! Watching Phone Booth helped this murder In the window with a sniper...looking through more scopes then a biolab worker U'll need a eulogy! Big bully...right before he die im snatching his jewelry The laser tag him...when i flash lights in the building like mall security You see what im holding..looking like a medieval knight when im strolling The blade come out in the shop! I let it chop body down like the car stolen!
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08-18-2018, 01:18 PM | #5 |
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My new gun'll catch a body. I’m up in ATL just to spray son
U’ll see the Hawk on ur chest Sooner than later...nigga this Trae Young alright But if we’re talking drive-bys...then I got ur head in my range So I’ma roll up & put a 'nickel in ur mug' cuz ur life is begging for change decent here, old concept with a decent flip My burner will send rounds down ur lane w/a bowler handle So if sun rolls up...then I’ma let him 'absorb more heat' than a solar panel damn, fire U smelled the belt for a week but that'll all be a blur soon To me a shipment...putting u in a hearse & scent in a box like perfume nahhh Shit, if ‘Dy rolls’...it’ll be an execution cuz my straps realer This stick will push ur shit back to the end of the table like a craps dealer lol cool Put up ur wifey in a bet. Cuz if u really wanna battle, fuck it By nightfall, she’ll be howling as I’m ‘doggin the walls’ like a shadow puppet ok here I got my arm extended to ur throat...nigga, ur soul’s mine After '2 clips leave him hanging by a thread' like he ran into my clothesline pretty cool I’m taking bets & ur waving the white flag. Boy, u'll die first Cuz we know where everybody’s Cashius...& it’s nowhere near Diverse mmm I tried liking it but just couldn’t Stick bigger than ur family tree. It’ll clap till ur dome is blown I’ll plant miCz & put his seeds in the air like the Bird Lady in Home Alone wow hella creative I actually loved this lol plant mix, his seeds, nice Flow, JB & now Dy...I left all these niggas dead from the mag I’m like a vendor collectin coins how I’m leaving w/ all these heads in a bag mmmm nah 4 nice 2 ok 1 Decent 3 misses Vs Lets stop the jiving...Jabari Black name flips kept you surviving When i flip somethin! The machine lift body in the air--Indoor skydiving nice You gotta prove me! All my friends dead when i slide this Lil Uzi When i give a couple clips inside the whip, it ain't a Drive In Movie i liked the first line better than the second lol pretty cool Never forget! When i carry the stick, don't even question legit I get to aiming the shit....that mean the gun on body like a weapon permit dope! The nina bad as a model..I fire! The bullet cooking out the knozzle This light ain't for charcoal! I'll have his top red like a Kingsford bottle mmm decent at best for me AR hang like a midget down my calf! I keep the pole low like Ralph Gun butt...leave body structure in dents like i started a paragraph the problem here is that in America, Ralph is pronounced “rall-fff”, miss Im in the streets..State Trooper! See you in traffic..i will shoot ya Spot his 2 door..an lean the can over the sunroof like the Redbull Mini Cooper alright cool & creative Glad you made it this far! I take the hostage route when i plug a star Big ass rope....that u'll pull bodies across the surface like tug of war decent I can spot BS a mile away...lurker! Watching Phone Booth helped this murder In the window with a sniper...looking through more scopes then a biolab worker ok here U'll need a eulogy! Big bully...right before he die im snatching his jewelry The laser tag him...when i flash lights in the building like mall security lol ok You see what im holding..looking like a medieval knight when im strolling The blade come out in the shop! I let it chop body down like the car stolen! pretty cool 5 nice 2 ok 2 Decent 1 Miss Close ass battle and a close one. Both finished the season off strong and definitely worth the read. More people should be voting on this but yeah I’m glad this shit happened. Body came nice with solar pane and home alone being my favorite lines, especially that home alone one lol fuckin fire. DynamiCz came a tad more turnt up than body did imo, having more lines that hit and less misses. Indoor skydiving and weapon permit were my favorites. Close call here and really took a lot of debate and rereads for me to pick a winner but I have DynamiCz taking it with more hitters and less misses. Could definitely go either way and will for sure be neck to neck. Dope battle fellas. Vote DynamiCz Last edited by For Battling; 08-20-2018 at 05:11 AM. |
08-18-2018, 04:44 PM | #6 |
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I got Body, wording seemed more crisp in a way, less misses for me personally, and he had my fav bar.
Body Nickel, begging Solar panel Crap dealer Home Aloen Opener slash closer was dece but not heavy hitting Dynam Opener was dece but like Body’s not heavy to me 2nd bar was good but I’ve seen drive in movie plays Weapons Permit Bio lab Worker It’s by a hair and def could go either way. Let’s get some votes guys V/Body Last edited by DMS; 08-18-2018 at 05:26 PM. |
08-19-2018, 09:25 AM | #7 |
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My new gun'll catch a body. I’m up in ATL just to spray son
U’ll see the Hawk on ur chest Sooner than later...nigga this Trae Young My burner will send rounds down ur lane w/a bowler handle So if sun rolls up...then I’ma let him 'absorb more heat' than a solar panel Shit, if ‘Dy rolls’...it’ll be an execution cuz my straps realer This stick will push ur shit back to the end of the table like a craps dealer I got my arm extended to ur throat...nigga, ur soul’s mine After '2 clips leave him hanging by a thread' like he ran into my clothesline Stick bigger than ur family tree. It’ll clap till ur dome is blown I’ll plant miCz & put his seeds in the air like the Bird Lady in Home Alone vs Never forget! When i carry the stick, don't even question legit I get to aiming the shit....that mean the gun on body like a weapon permit The nina bad as a model..I fire! The bullet cooking out the knozzle This light ain't for charcoal! I'll have his top red like a Kingsford bottle Im in the streets..State Trooper! See you in traffic..i will shoot ya Spot his 2 door..an lean the can over the sunroof like the Redbull Mini Cooper Glad you made it this far! I take the hostage route when i plug a star Big ass rope....that u'll pull bodies across the surface like tug of war U'll need a eulogy! Big bully...right before he die im snatching his jewelry The laser tag him...when i flash lights in the building like mall security You see what im holding..looking like a medieval knight when im strolling The blade come out in the shop! I let it chop body down like the car stolen! I can't even stunt, y'all niggas spazzed in this one. Niggas dead ass had some bangers all thru out this joint. That bowlers handle/solar panel shit was flames, clotheline was fuego and bird lady, sheesh. Dyna's weapon permit was nasty, that red bull mini cooper was crazy and I think chop body down was worded nicely enough to slightly seal the deal here. Props to both y'all Vote - DynamiCz |
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Body, you had a couple could have been flames. Shipment and clothesline but dame the wording was just off. I know you have a formulaic style of writing but those needed a twist, they ended lacksadasically. Consistent stuff, nothing crazy, good verse. Dy, that red bull shit was fire, I haven't seen that before. Your consistency was on point, only true miss was the non rhyming line but that's only because it didn't rhyme lol. I really liked this verse, this was quality stuff. DynamiCz |
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Body had 4 questionable bars that I did not like. Dyna had 3 questionable bars that I did not like. Tough call... Body's Sun panel bar was my favorite out of the entire battle and his verse was the least redundant so I'll have to edge this one too him. I thought the punches I did like from him landed more effectively as were Dyna landed punches - they weren't effective tho. v/Body |
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08-19-2018, 04:33 PM | #10 |
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props on getting to the Finals guys, ill prob be a little more crictal then normal as its a final, and try and be more thorough....
My new gun'll catch a body. I’m up in ATL just to spray son U’ll see the Hawk on ur chest Sooner than later...nigga this Trae Young okay, so the okhlahoma & trey/trae tie-ins helps here, because otherwise this is not much diff then "put the heat to ur chest like a wade jersey" circa 2005. Overall, the flips were enjoyable in this, but its bare bones are pretty dated. 7/10 But if we’re talking drive-bys...then I got ur head in my range So I’ma roll up & put a 'nickel in ur mug' cuz ur life is begging for change hmmm, nah.. outside of the Nickle being more current nowadays wth all the gun lines, this whole idea is very payed and pretty basic imo... mug & change ideas here been done, this is a miss for me 4/10 My burner will send rounds down ur lane w/a bowler handle So if sun rolls up...then I’ma let him 'absorb more heat' than a solar panel okay, old wordplay flipped enjoyable into a gun bar that's decent, another heat idea so not crazy fresh here, its similar to my tesla bar grid i did earlier in the year so maybe that's why this isn't a real banger of a flip to me personally.. it lands tho, bowler handle / lane was a bit of a corny multi add in imo 7/10 U smelled the belt for a week but that'll all be a blur soon To me a shipment...putting u in a hearse & scent in a box like perfume pretty cool misdirection bar, I like the idea but personally this is brought down as to me this is like the 4th bar in a row there's a very played wp & flip involved with sent/scent.. I like the attack angle here but again this is the 4th bar that's a flip in nature with rehashed wordplay, 6/10 Shit, if ‘Dy rolls’...it’ll be an execution cuz my straps realer This stick will push ur shit back to the end of the table like a craps dealer niiice, I like this one... dope idea, at first I wasn't feelin the 'push ur shit' part of the punch, but tbh its fine with the nameplay tie in in the set-up... cool nameplay and bar 8/10 Put up ur wifey in a bet. Cuz if u really wanna battle, fuck it By nightfall, she’ll be howling as I’m ‘doggin the walls’ like a shadow puppet hahaha, tbh this is dope imo... haven't seen this idea b4, was fresh, funny and creative imo ... 9/10 I got my arm extended to ur throat...nigga, ur soul’s mine After '2 clips leave him hanging by a thread' like he ran into my clothesline cool attack line but again the bare bones of this bar and wordplay has been done a lot of times... I like the flip here, but again its another clips flip that has been done for years... I like the flip, but im now wowed as it's not the fresehest.. 6/10 I’m taking bets & ur waving the white flag. Boy, u'll die first Cuz we know where everybody’s Cashius...& it’s nowhere near Diverse this was cool, I dig the site play here and this was a good tie into the diverse punch, cool swag, solid bar 7/10 Stick bigger than ur family tree. It’ll clap till ur dome is blown I’ll plant miCz & put his seeds in the air like the Bird Lady in Home Alone lotaaa home alone bars on this site recently geeze lol... for a family/seeds idea this is pretty cool... imagery is good and the wordplay involved is cool 8/10 Flow, JB & now Dy...I left all these niggas dead from the mag I’m like a vendor collectin coins how I’m leaving w/ all these heads in a bag ehh closer, heads/coins is really played, and the 'in a bag' flip touching on old victories wasn't enough of an impactful flip imo... 5/10 Overall - Pretty cool verse. I really liked the shadow puppets line, the way u incorporated a lot of tie ins was cool & u had good wording throughout, however the verse as a whole was too flip heavy imo... u executed a lot of them well so props, but this wasn't a verse that wowed me with freshness if you know what I mean... Overall a great showing, and props on your season vs. Lets stop the jiving...Jabari Black name flips kept you surviving When i flip somethin! The machine lift body in the air--Indoor skydiving okay pretty cool attack line open, tie ins were good and I haven't seen the machine lift body / indoor sky diving idea.. 7/10 You gotta prove me! All my friends dead when i slide this Lil Uzi When i give a couple clips inside the whip, it ain't a Drive In Movie ehhhh, not really liking this one. clipse/clipse been done to death in relation to how you tried to us eit here, in the whip not a storng enough flip to make this any beter then dece at best imo, 5/10 Never forget! When i carry the stick, don't even question legit I get to aiming the shit....that mean the gun on body like a weapon permit okay okay pretty cool Bdy np again here, orked well as an attack line an the wording was good... pretty nice, not wowing but good 7/10 The nina bad as a model..I fire! The bullet cooking out the knozzle This light ain't for charcoal! I'll have his top red like a Kingsford bottle hmmm , decent meta... its fresh and the light for charcoal tie in was solid, coolish 6/10 AR hang like a midget down my calf! I keep the pole low like Ralph Gun butt...leave body structure in dents like i started a paragraph lol at the set-up, midget down my calf was funy, pole low like ralph was a horrible and very nnewbish way to go about it tho imo lol, and unless ur british it in no way rhymes so I cant give u the benefit of the doubt... anyways, this was a solid enough indent flip, punch overall is light tho imo, if u gun butt his forhead for example, the tie to body structure is kinda weak... this was ight as I like the meta 6/10 Im in the streets..State Trooper! See you in traffic..i will shoot ya Spot his 2 door..an lean the can over the sunroof like the Redbull Mini Cooper lol, this was cool... good creativity and for another "vehicle tied-in gun bar" this was pretty well done.. 8/10 Glad you made it this far! I take the hostage route when i plug a star Big ass rope....that u'll pull bodies across the surface like tug of war ehh ur multi's are bugging me man haha, aren't u American? anyways star and war doesn't work, that small issue aside the punch is light imo, not too impactful for another 'Body" play and ive seen better tug of war lines... 5/10 I can spot BS a mile away...lurker! Watching Phone Booth helped this murder In the window with a sniper...looking through more scopes then a biolab worker okay another what I would call "light" im going to shoot you ideas that come off soft as the essence of the punch is ur looking through multiple lenses... that aside, I actually don't recall too many scope/lab ideas in my day, the actual meta is decent... 6/10 U'll need a eulogy! Big bully...right before he die im snatching his jewelry The laser tag him...when i flash lights in the building like mall security lol, coolish meta... while I can appreciate this is ur "style", bar after bar of off-handed attack lines & gun refs it is getting a bit redundant if im being honest... this is a funny and cool meta tho so props for that 7/10 You see what im holding..looking like a medieval knight when im strolling The blade come out in the shop! I let it chop body down like the car stolen! pretty cool 'body' nameplay here... cant recall this idea being used on him... good imagery here, like it 7/10 Overall - Pretty solid verse throughout with some cool new attack ideas, but def a few misses imo & I feel you were a little more in direct then you usually are with your gun bars / attack ideas if you know what I mean... Overall you've had a great season with some dope gun punches, this will prob be close Body - 67 Dyna - 64 Really close... if my math is wrong someone let me know haha, props to you both and pretty solid showings here, and on reaching the finals ... I really think u could both benefit from maybeeee trying some personals, girl dissses, I dunno something where the verse is only 60-70% gun lines haha, but hey that's prob just me.. good shit guys Vote - BodySnatcher
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08-19-2018, 10:56 PM | #11 |
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My new gun'll catch a body. I’m up in ATL just to spray son
U’ll see the Hawk on ur chest Sooner than later...nigga this Trae Young I fk w/ this, dope But if we’re talking drive-bys...then I got ur head in my range So I’ma roll up & put a 'nickel in ur mug' cuz ur life is begging for change coo My burner will send rounds down ur lane w/a bowler handle So if sun rolls up...then I’ma let him 'absorb more heat' than a solar panel I felt the sun/son wp added to the punch if anything, fire U smelled the belt for a week but that'll all be a blur soon To me a shipment...putting u in a hearse & scent in a box like perfume thought u were going to go a diff way on this one, decent imo Shit, if ‘Dy rolls’...it’ll be an execution cuz my straps realer This stick will push ur shit back to the end of the table like a craps dealer hmmm.. push ur shit back threw me off for a second but this was coo Put up ur wifey in a bet. Cuz if u really wanna battle, fuck it By nightfall, she’ll be howling as I’m ‘doggin the walls’ like a shadow puppet thought this was creative, nice I got my arm extended to ur throat...nigga, ur soul’s mine After '2 clips leave him hanging by a thread' like he ran into my clothesline ok I’m taking bets & ur waving the white flag. Boy, u'll die first Cuz we know where everybody’s Cashius...& it’s nowhere near Diverse I feel like people aren't catching the np here, this hit for me Stick bigger than ur family tree. It’ll clap till ur dome is blown I’ll plant miCz & put his seeds in the air like the Bird Lady in Home Alone fire, the seeds in the air/family tree tie in made it work for me, haven't seen plant mix either. Flow, JB & now Dy...I left all these niggas dead from the mag I’m like a vendor collectin coins how I’m leaving w/ all these heads in a bag eh, this is a miss for me Lets stop the jiving...Jabari Black name flips kept you surviving When i flip somethin! The machine lift body in the air--Indoor skydiving coo You gotta prove me! All my friends dead when i slide this Lil Uzi When i give a couple clips inside the whip, it ain't a Drive In Movie dope Never forget! When i carry the stick, don't even question legit I get to aiming the shit....that mean the gun on body like a weapon permit fk w/ it The nina bad as a model..I fire! The bullet cooking out the knozzle This light ain't for charcoal! I'll have his top red like a Kingsford bottle this came off a little light to me AR hang like a midget down my calf! I keep the pole low like Ralph Gun butt...leave body structure in dents like i started a paragraph bruh this coulda been doooope, the midget down my calf shit was tight but yea this doesn't rhyme for me so I can't give it a pass Im in the streets..State Trooper! See you in traffic..i will shoot ya Spot his 2 door..an lean the can over the sunroof like the Redbull Mini Cooper damn...heat right here Glad you made it this far! I take the hostage route when i plug a star Big ass rope....that u'll pull bodies across the surface like tug of war wording was a little off to me, decent here I can spot BS a mile away...lurker! Watching Phone Booth helped this murder In the window with a sniper...looking through more scopes then a biolab worker not feeling this one U'll need a eulogy! Big bully...right before he die im snatching his jewelry The laser tag him...when i flash lights in the building like mall security coo You see what im holding..looking like a medieval knight when im strolling The blade come out in the shop! I let it chop body down like the car stolen! fk w/ it Dope finals match fellas, I want to roll w/ Dy but after I few reads I'm not diggin' the biolab bar, and the paragraph/ralph shit didn't rhyme to me. The bar had mad potential, but I have body w/ 1 less miss. I thought Dy had lotb w/ that red bull ish, but body wasn't far behind w/ the solar panel bar. The only one I wasn't really feeling from Body was his closer. I get I'm not the text encyclopedia a lot of these heads are, so some of the concepts/wp that are played come off as fresh to me... but I wen't back and forth on this a couple times. Great read fellas, both deserving. v/ Body |
08-20-2018, 08:46 AM | #12 |
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My new gun'll catch a body. I’m up in ATL just to spray son
U’ll see the Hawk on ur chest Sooner than later...nigga this Trae Young (So this would have been a good punch but if seen a few Trae Young/Hawks flips. That took away from the impact a lot. Worded well but feels old even though it’s a relatively current event) But if we’re talking drive-bys...then I got ur head in my range So I’ma roll up & put a 'nickel in ur mug' cuz ur life is begging for change (Kinda same as before. Worded well. Roll up ties in well but nickel in your mug panhandling/beggings been done a few times. Took away from the impact for me) My burner will send rounds down ur lane w/a bowler handle So if sun rolls up...then I’ma let him 'absorb more heat' than a solar panel (Bet, now we cooking. This line was dope! Punching in the set up is always going to be impressive to me. That wouldn’t be good enough to be it’s on line but as a set up I liked it. The punch itself was dope. Son roll up is nice tie in. Absorb more heat than solar panel is nice) U smelled the belt for a week but that'll all be a blur soon To me a shipment...putting u in a hearse & scent in a box like perfume (Nice - this was witty. Smelled the belt is nice tie in. You got the personal touch which is a plus. ‘Shipment’ wp is nice to me. Scent in a box is technically a triple meaning (shipment/box/hearse) which is really dope and really good writing. Really good line) Shit, if ‘Dy rolls’...it’ll be an execution cuz my straps realer This stick will push ur shit back to the end of the table like a craps dealer (This was pretty good. Die roll is fine. ‘Stick will push your shit back’ is dope. My critique is ‘to the end of the table’ doesn’t really have any connection or tie in. Kinda of just hanging. Overall pretty good) Put up ur wifey in a bet. Cuz if u really wanna battle, fuck it By nightfall, she’ll be howling as I’m ‘doggin the walls’ like a shadow puppet (I like how this tied into the last line. The punch itself was just a jab though imo. Dog in the walls/shadow puppet isn’t the cleanest flip. It’s creative though which is why I have this landing) I got my arm extended to ur throat...nigga, ur soul’s mine After '2 clips leave him hanging by a thread' like he ran into my clothesline (This is pretty good. Hanging by a thread is a nice, creative attack angle - that phrase doesn’t get flipped much. You flipped a pretty long phrase too which is impressive. Thought you shoulda ended it different gab “like you ran into my clothesline”. Feel like that doesn’t really give he visual that you were going for. I’m guessing your options were limited because you couldn’t use “hang” again. This was pretty good though) I’m taking bets & ur waving the white flag. Boy, u'll die first Cuz we know where everybody’s Cashius...& it’s nowhere near Diverse (Creative idea. Took a sec for me too catch this one. Partly because the white flag and you’ll die first is unrelated to the punch. Diverse/racists/Cashius flip was a bit loose imo but it still landed) Stick bigger than ur family tree. It’ll clap till ur dome is blown I’ll plant miCz & put his seeds in the air like the Bird Lady in Home Alone (Lol this is nice. Stick bigger than family tree is funny and it ties in nice. Home alone references was cool. Plant miCz is really solid for a tie in. Good line) Flow, JB & now Dy...I left all these niggas dead from the mag I’m like a vendor collectin coins how I’m leaving w/ all these heads in a bag (This was one of you lightest if not the lighted bar. Heads on a coin wasn’t a strong enough association for this bar. It like technically worked but it kinda didn’t. Thought this was really light at best) Lets stop the jiving...Jabari Black name flips kept you surviving When i flip somethin! The machine lift body in the air--Indoor skydiving (This was dope. Like how you had a personal touch in the set up. He punch itself was nice. Overall good line. Good opener) You gotta prove me! All my friends dead when i slide this Lil Uzi When i give a couple clips inside the whip, it ain't a Drive In Movie (This was a jab. I coulda done without the lil uzi part - just seen it way too much. Clips/movie flips been done A LOT. The ‘couple’ and ‘inside the whip’ was good though and really elevated the punch. Had enough going on for this to land) Never forget! When i carry the stick, don't even question legit I get to aiming the shit....that mean the gun on body like a weapon permit (Could have cleaned up the wording but this punch landed. Gun on body is cool but wasn’t the craziest flip - a bit simple. You coulda chose a phrased that helped the double meaning more than ‘like a weapon permit’. This was a jab) The nina bad as a model..I fire! The bullet cooking out the knozzle This light ain't for charcoal! I'll have his top red like a Kingsford bottle (Yep this was nice. Set this one up well. Fire, cooking was pretty good tie ins. Kings ford bottle part was fire. This is nice) AR hang like a midget down my calf! I keep the pole low like Ralph Gun butt...leave body structure in dents like i started a paragraph (This is creative. Lol super simple but I liked the polo in the set up. ‘Body structure indents’ isn’t the cleanest wording for that phrase but I thought it was good. Creativity elevated this one) Im in the streets..State Trooper! See you in traffic..i will shoot ya Spot his 2 door..an lean the can over the sunroof like the Redbull Mini Cooper (Yeah this is fire. Not much to critique, liked everything down to the set up) Glad you made it this far! I take the hostage route when i plug a star Big ass rope....that u'll pull bodies across the surface like tug of war (This was light at best to me. Wording/execution wasn’t good on this one. Wording aside, this one would still be a fairly basic flip. You coulda did much better with the concept) I can spot BS a mile away...lurker! Watching Phone Booth helped this murder In the window with a sniper...looking through more scopes then a biolab worker (This is cool. Look through scoops like biolab worker is a pretty basic flip as well. I haven’t seen Phone Booth so I coulda missed some tie ins but I think this was just a tie in to the sniper part which is cool. Still landed, but light) U'll need a eulogy! Big bully...right before he die im snatching his jewelry The laser tag him...when i flash lights in the building like mall security (Lol I like this one. The flip is funny and it’s pretty slick. The set up was nice. Good bar) You see what im holding..looking like a medieval knight when im strolling The blade come out in the shop! I let it chop body down like the car stolen! (So if this was the our only body flip this would have hit harder. The flip is good but it’s diluted a bit, especially since Body is a pretty easy name to flip. Overall, solid closer. Chop down body is pretty good) This was a dope battle. Definitely lived up to my expectations and both guys proved that the deserve to be here. Body your verse was dope. Started it slightly slow imo. Not because the bars were bad but they were concepts I’ve seen/played. You started heating up with the sick solar panel bar though. I feel like you e drifted from the complexity and the intricate tie ins these past few weeks, but it was back in full force for this battle. The scent bar was sick. That’s really good, multidimensional writing. Felt like your bars had the complete package. Even if the punches weren’t crazy, still had tie ins to elevate the bar. You also took some risk and decided to add a few bars that weren’t attack lines. I will say I think your gun bars outshined your bars like the diverse bar and the coin machine bar but I don’t think this is a bad strategy since you know Dy coming with all gun bars. Dy started wiggin out the gate. The skydiving bar was creative. Just complexity speaking, Body def had the edge, by the creativity and the imagery was so good your punches were landing and hard. You sometimes struggle with wording, but I think this was one of the high points of your round. Your wording saved a few of your lines, like the chopped body line and he couple get a clip in the whip line. Then you had bars like the Red Bull can where the wording down to the set up was really crisp and it made those punches land hard. Downside is the Body flips got REALLY repetitive for me. It was a bit odd too because you attacked body for going no heavy in your first bar. This one is neck and neck to me. I think consistency wise each had a miss a piece. Body’s was the closer and Dy’s was the tug of war line. LOTB is pretty close. I thought the Red Bull line was crazy but I have the solar panel and perfume liner extremely close behind it. After multiple reads and multiple scoring system, I think the slow for body’s the only difference. Those first two lines weren’t bad but I just couldn’t score them that high. This one was really close by I got Dy edging this one. Mvgt DynamiCz Great work fellas |
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Whoa! this was awesome, probably one of the best battles I've read in a while tbh...like Zelph said this was really close...I loved both of y'all's material, you both have my respect here in general so this was difficult.
I've gotta go with Dy tho, just thought he punched a little better...but yo not by much fa real, my bad Body ;/ V - DynamiCz...by a nut bag whisker. |
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5-4 Dy
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Very nice battle.
I’ll break it down in the NBL mag
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My new gun'll catch a body. I’m up in ATL just to spray son U’ll see the Hawk on ur chest Sooner than later...nigga this Trae Young googled but yeh But if we’re talking drive-bys...then I got ur head in my range So I’ma roll up & put a 'nickel in ur mug' cuz ur life is begging for change ok My burner will send rounds down ur lane w/a bowler handle So if sun rolls up...then I’ma let him 'absorb more heat' than a solar panel niiiice U smelled the belt for a week but that'll all be a blur soon To me a shipment...putting u in a hearse & scent in a box like perfume Yeh, I like it Shit, if ‘Dy rolls’...it’ll be an execution cuz my straps realer This stick will push ur shit back to the end of the table like a craps dealer hmmm, ok Put up ur wifey in a bet. Cuz if u really wanna battle, fuck it By nightfall, she’ll be howling as I’m ‘doggin the walls’ like a shadow puppet LOL concept flys I got my arm extended to ur throat...nigga, ur soul’s mine After '2 clips leave him hanging by a thread' like he ran into my clothesline lol I’m taking bets & ur waving the white flag. Boy, u'll die first Cuz we know where everybody’s Cashius...& it’s nowhere near Diverse yep! Stick bigger than ur family tree. It’ll clap till ur dome is blown I’ll plant miCz & put his seeds in the air like the Bird Lady in Home Alone This was cool, nothing more Flow, JB & now Dy...I left all these niggas dead from the mag I’m like a vendor collectin coins how I’m leaving w/ all these heads in a bag meh ok, kinda felt like it needs a stronger closer DYNA Lets stop the jiving...Jabari Black name flips kept you surviving When i flip somethin! The machine lift body in the air--Indoor skydiving Gooood opening You gotta prove me! All my friends dead when i slide this Lil Uzi When i give a couple clips inside the whip, it ain't a Drive In Movie Soz lad, I don’t get this, cba to do the indepth research needed, ill presume its ok lol Never forget! When i carry the stick, don't even question legit I get to aiming the shit....that mean the gun on body like a weapon permit another name flip, feel like this could have been stronger The nina bad as a model..I fire! The bullet cooking out the knozzle This light ain't for charcoal! I'll have his top red like a Kingsford bottle ok AR hang like a midget down my calf! I keep the pole low like Ralph Gun butt...leave body structure in dents like i started a paragraph nice concept, don’t mind the name flips aswell long its there fresh Im in the streets..State Trooper! See you in traffic..i will shoot ya Spot his 2 door..an lean the can over the sunroof like the Redbull Mini Cooper googled but yehhh Glad you made it this far! I take the hostage route when i plug a star Big ass rope....that u'll pull bodies across the surface like tug of war nahhh, doesn’t even rhyme for me I can spot BS a mile away...lurker! Watching Phone Booth helped this murder In the window with a sniper...looking through more scopes then a biolab worker cool U'll need a eulogy! Big bully...right before he die im snatching his jewelry The laser tag him...when i flash lights in the building like mall security meh You see what im holding..looking like a medieval knight when im strolling The blade come out in the shop! I let it chop body down like the car stolen! best nameflip came at the start imo I’d go with body here, liked more of his stuff, smoother wording and execution throughout, both closers lacked fire Solar panel line was LOTB |
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I think dynamics simple style hurt him here.... last round it worked nicely against blue bayous overly complex style....but this week with body having a mix of complexity AND straight forward gun work I thought it made dynas efforts look glaringly weaker. as if to say...yea I can flip gun plays in a gritty format but also do it with complex ideas and fresh spins.......body was including flips in his set ups which speaks towards the depth of his ideas....dyna ideas were really simple....which again I think worked well last round but hurt him here....dynas wording and storytelling is awesome....love how he walks the reader thru his bars but I need more depth in the concepts at this stage of the game....especially when text is this far along and especially especially when smack is this far along......u have to really go above and beyond to flip a clever gun bar for me because ive seen and heard a lot of them over the years/ I dug this battle tho and these are the battles I want to be reading when im here. this was a dope tourney...you guys are the new blood of nc.....stick around....we need you. v body |
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Body up 7-5 lets close her up! I think my mans Body deserve the belt in a well fought BAL war! Congratulations my dawg! Lol Bleak can we atleast all get our accomps tho? Shoutouts to all the voters too! Nothing, but respect to everybody!
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