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Old 11-26-2022, 12:47 AM   #1
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Lightbulb XI WK 1: Eviction (0-0) vs. brokenhal0 (0-0) (BROKENHAL0 WINS)



Season 11 XI


VERSES: Thursday, December, 1st, 11:59 P.M. Western / 2:59 A.M. Eastern / 7:59 A.M. UK. 24 Hour Ext: Mod/Opponent Discretion

VOTES: Sunday, December, 4th, 11:59 P.M. Western / 2:59 A.M. Eastern / 7:59 A.M. UK. 3 Vote Requirement Enforced/Penalty

MAXIMUM: 48 Lines: 64 IF AGREED UPON!

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Old 11-30-2022, 03:44 PM   #2
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Old 12-02-2022, 10:42 AM   #3
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Old 12-02-2022, 06:27 PM   #4
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bloodshed, bloodshed, the throne is mine
the home is mine, bloodshed the throne is blind
maybe they crowned me cuz I come with the facts
or maybe they crowned me cuz no one else wanted the vax
bloodshed, nothing will last, blood pumping fast
bloodshed, the same color as that robe, I want one of those.
or do I want this crown? fuck it give me both.

yea whatever.
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Old 12-03-2022, 12:47 AM   #5
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''The Knight Of Passage''



https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=O2h6QxIwOZQ

As King arthur accepts his crown chanting Mithratic rites
in the church court yard surrounded by 10,000 candlelight's
just then a squire rushes through the steepled doors in a panicked fright
MY KING MY KING
the archons have landed 5 miles from the camping site
they already killed 10 of our men the rest fled into the barren night
king arthur laughed grabbing Excalibur with his lance and strapado knife
the last battle with the archons didn't end till they fell at the hand of Christ
for the next 200 years these cosmic beings
didn't have a means to suck another planet dry
arthur entered the vaults of Mithra and offered his own blood as a sacrifice
before the Atlantean deluge rendered all humans sexual
arthur was a sky god living in constellations that were imperceptible
waiting to be reincarnated in a kings vestibule mortal vehicle conquest inevitable
you can feel the christ consciousness when he stands next to you
Gawain galloped across the courtyard with a bejeweled horse
sapphire and emeralds the color of stewed vegetables
clutching a battle ax with two swords strapped to his back
proclaiming the archons end is near rendering a deadly stare
Lancelot was in full armor gear holding his broadsword steady
stoic strength remains sturdy in the face of honor before things get deadly
Percival was in the highest tower using his second sight to search the land
Tristan rode with a calvary of saxons from the lost tribes of dan
scouring the dark forest looking for the soldiers who escaped the camp
the clergy lit the myrtle to induce a trance of lucid dreams
the queen gathered the children and wrapped up Zeus's theme
she walked up the steps standing next to two eunuch jesters
throwing freshly picked tulips on opposite sides of her noodled sleeves
villains of mankind sequestering greed planting pestilent seeds
king arthur gathers armies as far as the sea
his armies stretched as far as the vision of a falcon in trees
the archons are moving toward the kingdom at tornado speed
you can hear there unsettling shrieks in the baltic ocean breeze
a breed created from light so unconditional love gave them a voice
knights of a round table star guardian speckled space rooms
to guard against merciless serpent alien space ghouls
a higher service with a purpose how many can claim to be faithful
draconian gods appearing on earths surface
offering work slips to enslave you
there's only one King of the table
Arthurs knights are ready willing and able
it's no fable his battle skills where fatal since the cradle
civilizations of the past fell to the archons advancement darkness
you can smell the stench in the wind's they walk in
Tristan's trumpets alert the horsemen of incoming supernatural forces
the trumpeting horns where pointing toward the balkans
the reverberation of the horns against the fortress scared the horses
the horns were made of mastodon bones found in Canterbury claw grass
wrong place to pick a warpath tristan grabbed his sword and put on his gaul sash
the archers draw sigils on there bows using magical tar ash
leaving the castle with cornucopias amount of torrent
100,000 vigilantes with pitchforks and torches
ready to battle the apocalypse ready to rip apart the headless horsemen
as arthur lays the map on the table Horatio armed the elephants
with plutonium shields encased in marble shalt glass
standing near a ostrich
every person who heard the horns begun to cluster
I asked a fair maiden with wondrous conjuncture
have you ever witnessed a populous such as this
scampering like ants and ticks
underneath a castles limestone luster
it was a blustery night in December and the sunlight suffered.

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Old 12-03-2022, 06:05 PM   #6
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Sort it out. Halo's over 64 lines: Eviction. How should we call this?
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Old 12-03-2022, 10:20 PM   #7
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Old 12-03-2022, 10:27 PM   #8
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here you go i made it more fair 48 bars..you stood no chance lol u never beat me in any battle with out whining to a mod or pulling a dq or complaining about how I bully you and break the rules lmao i must say eviction you are a true snarky heel /// if this verse feels incomplete it is...
its missing about 40 more bars but rules are rules i tend to black out and really just go into a zone respect to the mcs that let it rock in competition.ill take the loss if that's what we doing here if thats the case ill post the whole 82 bars its up to you eviction or mod

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The situations been remedied: Are you going to submit an actual verse or should we open this battle up for votes?
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dude was dope the whole thing read like a cahpter out of a graphic novel of soul and valour.. the rhyme scheme was dope all bits and pieces mixed and mashed together well.. the story itself ha heart.. the characters were boss.. good luck..

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this was cool for what it was very short and sweet for a little thing as such as this it was never really going to stand a chance against something like brokenhal0 but atleast your showed up..

vote = brokenhal0

better round story more rhyme and more flushed out
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Vote - Brokenhalo

Eviction had the edge mechanically, in terms of flow and scheme work. But he was completely lacking in terms of direction & overall content. Halo's verse left alot to be desired in terms of flow, but it was a more complete verse.
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Old 12-05-2022, 11:09 AM   #14
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Eviction had a vibe going on in a good cadence. However it wasn't enough to match halos verse. Halo had story, visuals, and the verse was much more fleshed out.
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Tough choice both tight, Smooth, and Well Written.
I feel like broke Deeper Compare to Evic

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