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XI WK 1: Eviction (0-0) vs. brokenhal0 (0-0) (BROKENHAL0 WINS)
Season 11 XI VERSES: Thursday, December, 1st, 11:59 P.M. Western / 2:59 A.M. Eastern / 7:59 A.M. UK. 24 Hour Ext: Mod/Opponent Discretion VOTES: Sunday, December, 4th, 11:59 P.M. Western / 2:59 A.M. Eastern / 7:59 A.M. UK. 3 Vote Requirement Enforced/Penalty MAXIMUM: 48 Lines: 64 IF AGREED UPON! Goodluck! @Eviction @brokenhal0 TOPIC:
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bloodshed, bloodshed, the throne is mine
the home is mine, bloodshed the throne is blind maybe they crowned me cuz I come with the facts or maybe they crowned me cuz no one else wanted the vax bloodshed, nothing will last, blood pumping fast bloodshed, the same color as that robe, I want one of those. or do I want this crown? fuck it give me both. yea whatever.
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''The Knight Of Passage''
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=O2h6QxIwOZQ As King arthur accepts his crown chanting Mithratic rites in the church court yard surrounded by 10,000 candlelight's just then a squire rushes through the steepled doors in a panicked fright MY KING MY KING the archons have landed 5 miles from the camping site they already killed 10 of our men the rest fled into the barren night king arthur laughed grabbing Excalibur with his lance and strapado knife the last battle with the archons didn't end till they fell at the hand of Christ for the next 200 years these cosmic beings didn't have a means to suck another planet dry arthur entered the vaults of Mithra and offered his own blood as a sacrifice before the Atlantean deluge rendered all humans sexual arthur was a sky god living in constellations that were imperceptible waiting to be reincarnated in a kings vestibule mortal vehicle conquest inevitable you can feel the christ consciousness when he stands next to you Gawain galloped across the courtyard with a bejeweled horse sapphire and emeralds the color of stewed vegetables clutching a battle ax with two swords strapped to his back proclaiming the archons end is near rendering a deadly stare Lancelot was in full armor gear holding his broadsword steady stoic strength remains sturdy in the face of honor before things get deadly Percival was in the highest tower using his second sight to search the land Tristan rode with a calvary of saxons from the lost tribes of dan scouring the dark forest looking for the soldiers who escaped the camp the clergy lit the myrtle to induce a trance of lucid dreams the queen gathered the children and wrapped up Zeus's theme she walked up the steps standing next to two eunuch jesters throwing freshly picked tulips on opposite sides of her noodled sleeves villains of mankind sequestering greed planting pestilent seeds king arthur gathers armies as far as the sea his armies stretched as far as the vision of a falcon in trees the archons are moving toward the kingdom at tornado speed you can hear there unsettling shrieks in the baltic ocean breeze a breed created from light so unconditional love gave them a voice knights of a round table star guardian speckled space rooms to guard against merciless serpent alien space ghouls a higher service with a purpose how many can claim to be faithful draconian gods appearing on earths surface offering work slips to enslave you there's only one King of the table Arthurs knights are ready willing and able it's no fable his battle skills where fatal since the cradle civilizations of the past fell to the archons advancement darkness you can smell the stench in the wind's they walk in Tristan's trumpets alert the horsemen of incoming supernatural forces the trumpeting horns where pointing toward the balkans the reverberation of the horns against the fortress scared the horses the horns were made of mastodon bones found in Canterbury claw grass wrong place to pick a warpath tristan grabbed his sword and put on his gaul sash the archers draw sigils on there bows using magical tar ash leaving the castle with cornucopias amount of torrent 100,000 vigilantes with pitchforks and torches ready to battle the apocalypse ready to rip apart the headless horsemen as arthur lays the map on the table Horatio armed the elephants with plutonium shields encased in marble shalt glass standing near a ostrich every person who heard the horns begun to cluster I asked a fair maiden with wondrous conjuncture have you ever witnessed a populous such as this scampering like ants and ticks underneath a castles limestone luster it was a blustery night in December and the sunlight suffered. Last edited by brokenhal0; 12-03-2022 at 10:23 PM. |
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here you go i made it more fair 48 bars..you stood no chance lol u never beat me in any battle with out whining to a mod or pulling a dq or complaining about how I bully you and break the rules lmao i must say eviction you are a true snarky heel /// if this verse feels incomplete it is...
its missing about 40 more bars but rules are rules i tend to black out and really just go into a zone respect to the mcs that let it rock in competition.ill take the loss if that's what we doing here if thats the case ill post the whole 82 bars its up to you eviction or mod Last edited by brokenhal0; 12-03-2022 at 10:35 PM. |
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@Eviction The situations been remedied: Are you going to submit an actual verse or should we open this battle up for votes?
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What I beat you twice no question about it I’ll keep the no show verse I don’t feel like dropping
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dude was dope the whole thing read like a cahpter out of a graphic novel of soul and valour.. the rhyme scheme was dope all bits and pieces mixed and mashed together well.. the story itself ha heart.. the characters were boss.. good luck.. eviction: this was cool for what it was very short and sweet for a little thing as such as this it was never really going to stand a chance against something like brokenhal0 but atleast your showed up.. vote = brokenhal0 better round story more rhyme and more flushed out
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Vote - Brokenhalo
Eviction had the edge mechanically, in terms of flow and scheme work. But he was completely lacking in terms of direction & overall content. Halo's verse left alot to be desired in terms of flow, but it was a more complete verse. |
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Eviction had a vibe going on in a good cadence. However it wasn't enough to match halos verse. Halo had story, visuals, and the verse was much more fleshed out.
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Tough choice both tight, Smooth, and Well Written.
I feel like broke Deeper Compare to Evic Vote-Broke |
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