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Old 11-26-2022, 12:30 AM   #1
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Season 11 XI


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Old 11-26-2022, 03:47 AM   #2
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I never signed in to take part.

It’s not a good time for me at the moment, I won’t take part. Sorry.
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I didn’t sign up.

I said remove me.
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Good evening, aspiring fight fans! Tonight you’re in for a thriller
We’ll see if Iron Mike can survive a fight with a GORILLA!
Since this is a fictional matchup, Prime Tyson seemed best suited
a formidable victor boathting a record of 50–6–2 (against humans).
While his head movement is superior to the mighty Kong’s
next to him, in the tree trunks, stands a foe four times as strong.
All eyes are on Tyson’s knock-out power who’ll be looking for the punch
that defies the odds against as opponent as hungry as they come!
Mike could be in some trouble here, no upset has been forecast
but the term Rumble In The Jungle has never been more apt.
It’s one heck of a tall task staring at Mike
who’s a relative short ass in comparative size.
The air is alive as our holographic Iron Mike climbs in the ring
preparing for Primate vs Prime Tyson to finally begin!
The lights have now dimmed. Thanks to the 8 million who copped the PPV
along with 12 million at home watching this on illegal streams.
Round one is nearly here, folks! A cage is lowered to the ring
as Mike watches searing fearlessly at the opponent thats within.
The nose of the gorilla…
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I had toyed a little more with my rough draft before it became clear he wasn’t showing.


Hey there aspiring fight fans! Tonight you’re in for a thriller
We’ll see if Iron Mike can survive a fight with a GORILLA!
Since this is a fictional matchup, Prime Tyson seemed best suited
a formidable victor boathting a record of 50–6–2 (against humans).
While his head movement is superior to the mighty Kong’s
next to him, in the tree trunks, stands a foe four times as strong.
All eyes are on Tyson’s knock-out power who’ll be looking for the punch
that defies the odds against as opponent as hungry as they come!
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but the term Rumble In The Jungle has never been more apt.
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preparing for Primate vs Prime Tyson to finally begin!
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along with 12 million at home watching this on illegal streams.
Round one is nearly here, folks! A cage is lowered to the ring
as Mike watches searing fearlessly at the opponent thats within.
The nose of the gorilla pushes through the bars
as unsure on where to start as the judges on our cards.
Bruce Buffer looks alarmed at having to witness the brawl
We can’t bring him to talk, even though his ring announcements being done by video call.
The gorilla looks cautious, standing upright and planting his feet at the edge
to release some aggression by beating his chest.
The arenas electric atmosphere crackles with excitement
with a few practice jabs provided as the camera pans to Tyson.
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@Diablo Pretty solid, my dude. Mechanically, it was as polished. Your take on the topic was pretty imaginative. Not much I can knock here. Would have liked it to have a more developed ending, but it was a good read.
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Diablo:

This was solid as usual. Technically spot on but it's just kind of a dumb narrative... I don't really get how you tied this picture to Tyson and a gorilla...? Boxing is literally the only connection here. But I guess that looseness was sort of expected because Soule disappeared and once you realized it was a free win you sort of went on autopilot. I would've understood that but you posted an update to your verse so I expected things to wrap up a little better in the 2nd draft, or have some kind of revelation but it just kind of fell flat and ended.

Regardless, entertaining show.
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This was solid as usual. Technically spot on but it's just kind of a dumb narrative... I don't really get how you tied this picture to Tyson and a gorilla...? Boxing is literally the only connection here. But I guess that looseness was sort of expected because Soule disappeared and once you realized it was a free win you sort of went on autopilot. I would've understood that but you posted an update to your verse so I expected things to wrap up a little better in the 2nd draft, or have some kind of revelation but it just kind of fell flat and ended.

Regardless, entertaining show.
It was unfinished, to be honest. As time drew on after the extension was granted, it became clearer he wasn’t showing and I just kinda stopped jotting down anything. The build up had to be pretty long because, at least in my opinion, Tyson vs a Gorilla would end pretty fucking aptly within round one when the gorilla tears him limb from limb and eats his arms.

That said, the gorilla would be DQ’d for doing so in process and, thus, Tyson would have won the bout. Even though he was dead.


I found that fun. :-)
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