Adverse vs Mac - ADVERSE WINS

Sharp · 07-11-2022, 08:14 PM

Netcees SOL Season II
Week 3

Due Thursday, July 14th at Midnight PST

Minimum: 8 Lines
Maximum: 12 Lines
24hr ext given on request

NO biting
NO swaying
NO feeding
You MUST check in
Don't edit after your opponent has posted
2nd person to post can't edit after the first vote comes in
Don't be an idiot
Don't use your opponent's pic unless it's a pic battle
Agree on a line limit
May God have mercy on your souls

@Adverse @Mac

Adverse · 07-11-2022, 08:52 PM

Check 8s good with me

Adverse · 07-11-2022, 10:41 PM

Mac AKA the Brazillian

About to show this mangy terrier how we bang in America
My threats come true when I run into you, only thing Mac runnin into’s the language barrier
Ya girl wasn’t used to a dick this big, best believe I had to break her in
You came home to me using the long bar, n thought you was battling MaCe again
Even fucked her at your birthday last year, you ain’t know that I hammered her?
Helped decorate the staircase, pulled out and hung rope on the banisters
Come swinging pistols akimbo, armed with two specials
Your ass get lifted when I grip the sticks and pull up, so call me Geppetto

@Mac

Mac · 07-14-2022, 05:47 PM

ext

Mac · 07-15-2022, 10:29 PM

@Adverse .. kill yourself already

stop chasin a lead . it'll get in over ur head like an afterthought
push the right buttons and you'll feel the snap.. thats a screenshot
empathy with this suicide watch brat. let the prozac follow thru
hell, if my wife looked like a trans fat i'd clog my artery too
works on an assembly line & can't put his life together if he wished
ever seen a verse on his Prime day. bitch wrapped 300 orders in a shift
user beat ya on a slim. losing by a couple votes is never a good look
u know tony's robbins hurt ya when u now find comfort in self help books

Dominate · 07-16-2022, 11:22 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Adverse

Mac AKA the Brazillian

About to show this mangy terrier how we bang in America
My threats come true when I run into you, only thing Mac runnin into’s the language barrier
Decent. Good set up. Worded well content wise, 2nd line a little long mechanically but it's not a big deal in most battles including this one
Ya girl wasn’t used to a dick this big, best believe I had to break her in
You came home to me using the long bar, n thought you was battling MaCe again
Wp is meh but it's overall OKish with the recent personal
Even fucked her at your birthday last year, you ain’t know that I hammered her?
Helped decorate the staircase, pulled out and hung rope on the banisters
Cool idea. Not bad. Good set up
Come swinging pistols akimbo, armed with two specials
Your ass get lifted when I grip the sticks and pull up, so call me Geppetto
dope wp and you definitely did it justice. Think it could have hit harder with tweaked wording or maybe one more tie in. I probably would've gone with something like

blah blah blah... I pull out the steel toys
Geppetto: grip the sticks and pull up on you - this shit's about to get reallll boy

@Mac

Quote:

Originally Posted by Mac

@Adverse .. kill yourself already

stop chasin a lead . it'll get in over ur head like an afterthought
push the right buttons and you'll feel the snap.. thats a screenshot
Good concept. Needed a better set up, tweaked wording and more than a one syllable rhyme to realise its full potential. It's decent as is
empathy with this suicide watch brat. let the prozac follow thru
hell, if my wife looked like a trans fat i'd clog my artery too
worded beautifully for the punch, and it did hit, but the wording for the wordplay was not quite right for me - calling his wife "a trans fat". Would be better as "If my wife looked trans/fat" IMO. Still, decent hit
works on an assembly line & can't put his life together if he wished
ever seen a verse on his Prime day. bitch wrapped 300 orders in a shift
It's a good personal concept but not worded quite right.
user beat ya on a slim. losing by a couple votes is never a good look
u know tony's robbins hurt ya when u now find comfort in self help books
Again, good concept but the wp wording isn't right. You needed to play around with this to make "Tony Robbins" work, not "Tony's Robbins"

Mac had good concepts but wording held him back. Adverse got it.

Wanderer · 07-17-2022, 12:29 PM

Adverse

Long bar was made cooler with the personal touch
Birthday was cool
I didn’t like the way you handled geppetto but It def had potential

Mac

Trans fat was the only one I could compare to ads best
You also had more potential in that verse with your concepts but I feel the execution was off

Vote Adverse

White LGI · 07-17-2022, 02:00 PM

Vote adverse,
He was just a Lil more clever. Had better wording...his verse just was better put together

Mac seems like I wrote his verse, concepts were good but the wording sucked

Aero · 07-17-2022, 02:49 PM

Adverse:

Ya girl wasn’t used to a dick this big, best believe I had to break her in
You came home to me using the long bar, n thought you was battling MaCe again
Dunno what Dom is talking about this bar is jokes.. Dom talmbout WP, aint no WP here this is straight up jokes lol.

shooting ropes of semen was gross bc you're poor... Gepetto line was almost

Mac:

works on an assembly line & can't put his life together if he wished
ever seen a verse on his Prime day. bitch wrapped 300 orders in a shift
lol'ed

Rest of the verse is almost.. kinda like the concepts.. tony robbins lol that was kinda dumb tho

Good battle but Adverse pulled through with better wording

Resin M-I-C · 07-17-2022, 03:44 PM

language barrier was solid
longbar was jokes, a lil light
banisters decent
geppeto needed better wording but ok

vs

screenshot was aight
feelin trans fat
prime day was solid
did not like the closer

this is clossseee.. mac with some execution issues but prime and trans fat were both good hits.. tough as ad was a bit more consistant in this short battle.. i think macs closer was the deciding factor here.. if that was a good or above avg line he woulda take it buttt

v adverse

Defiant · 07-17-2022, 04:16 PM

Ya girl wasn’t used to a dick this big, best believe I had to break her in
You came home to me using the long bar, n thought you was battling MaCe again
Even fucked her at your birthday last year, you ain’t know that I hammered her?
Helped decorate the staircase, pulled out and hung rope on the banisters

Vs

works on an assembly line & can't put his life together if he wished
ever seen a verse on his Prime day. bitch wrapped 300 orders in a shift

Decent battle, closer than the votes show, if macs wording was a better he could took this

Vote adverse

07-11-2022, 10:41 PM	#3
Adverse low tide in serotonin bay Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 2,738 Battle Record: 37-28 Champed - GWL Picture Challenge - Guerrilla Writing League - Black August II Rep Power: 15446142	Mac AKA the Brazillian About to show this mangy terrier how we bang in America My threats come true when I run into you, only thing Mac runnin into’s the language barrier Ya girl wasn’t used to a dick this big, best believe I had to break her in You came home to me using the long bar, n thought you was battling MaCe again Even fucked her at your birthday last year, you ain’t know that I hammered her? Helped decorate the staircase, pulled out and hung rope on the banisters Come swinging pistols akimbo, armed with two specials Your ass get lifted when I grip the sticks and pull up, so call me Geppetto @Mac Last edited by Adverse; 07-15-2022 at 04:17 PM. Reason: @ing mac

07-17-2022, 02:49 PM	#9
Aero GOAT Join Date: Jul 2015 Posts: 4,825 Battle Record: 14-17 Champed - Site Diss Competition - Tag Tournament III - Lyric Olympics - Tag Tournament: "Omicron Variant" Rep Power: 0	Adverse: Ya girl wasn’t used to a dick this big, best believe I had to break her in You came home to me using the long bar, n thought you was battling MaCe again Dunno what Dom is talking about this bar is jokes.. Dom talmbout WP, aint no WP here this is straight up jokes lol. shooting ropes of semen was gross bc you're poor... Gepetto line was almost Mac: works on an assembly line & can't put his life together if he wished ever seen a verse on his Prime day. bitch wrapped 300 orders in a shift lol'ed Rest of the verse is almost.. kinda like the concepts.. tony robbins lol that was kinda dumb tho Good battle but Adverse pulled through with better wording __________________ Too Rich IRL to Be Here. I'm Out.

07-17-2022, 03:44 PM	#10
Resin M-I-C Senior Member Join Date: Jun 2015 Posts: 734 Battle Record: 33-9 Champed - 1-2 Punch Onslaught II - Tag Team Tournament V - 1-2 Punch Season III - Netcees SOL - Battle Arena - SOL Season I - NBL Season XIV - Netcees Battle League Rep Power: 8150227	language barrier was solid longbar was jokes, a lil light banisters decent geppeto needed better wording but ok vs screenshot was aight feelin trans fat prime day was solid did not like the closer this is clossseee.. mac with some execution issues but prime and trans fat were both good hits.. tough as ad was a bit more consistant in this short battle.. i think macs closer was the deciding factor here.. if that was a good or above avg line he woulda take it buttt v adverse __________________ C. O. B.

07-11-2022, 08:52 PM	#2
Adverse low tide in serotonin bay Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 2,738 Battle Record: 37-28 Champed - GWL Picture Challenge - Guerrilla Writing League - Black August II Rep Power: 15446142	Check 8s good with me

07-14-2022, 05:47 PM	#4
Mac Senior Member Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 480 Battle Record: 7-12 Rep Power: 1856618	ext

07-15-2022, 10:29 PM	#5
Mac Senior Member Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 480 Battle Record: 7-12 Rep Power: 1856618	@Adverse .. kill yourself already stop chasin a lead . it'll get in over ur head like an afterthought push the right buttons and you'll feel the snap.. thats a screenshot empathy with this suicide watch brat. let the prozac follow thru hell, if my wife looked like a trans fat i'd clog my artery too works on an assembly line & can't put his life together if he wished ever seen a verse on his Prime day. bitch wrapped 300 orders in a shift user beat ya on a slim. losing by a couple votes is never a good look u know tony's robbins hurt ya when u now find comfort in self help books

07-17-2022, 12:29 PM	#7
Wanderer Senior Member Join Date: Apr 2015 Location: England Posts: 587 Battle Record: 24-33 Champed - NPL Roast Rep Power: 7457538	Adverse Long bar was made cooler with the personal touch Birthday was cool I didn’t like the way you handled geppetto but It def had potential Mac Trans fat was the only one I could compare to ads best You also had more potential in that verse with your concepts but I feel the execution was off Vote Adverse

07-17-2022, 02:00 PM	#8
White LGI Senior Member Join Date: Feb 2019 Posts: 2,034 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 0	Vote adverse, He was just a Lil more clever. Had better wording...his verse just was better put together Mac seems like I wrote his verse, concepts were good but the wording sucked

07-17-2022, 04:16 PM	#11
Defiant Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 1,121 Battle Record: 31-50 Champed - Time to Kill I Rep Power: 6442244	Ya girl wasn’t used to a dick this big, best believe I had to break her in You came home to me using the long bar, n thought you was battling MaCe again Even fucked her at your birthday last year, you ain’t know that I hammered her? Helped decorate the staircase, pulled out and hung rope on the banisters Vs works on an assembly line & can't put his life together if he wished ever seen a verse on his Prime day. bitch wrapped 300 orders in a shift Decent battle, closer than the votes show, if macs wording was a better he could took this Vote adverse