11-26-2022, 12:37 AM | #1 |
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XI WK 1: CopyPat (0-0) vs. MMLP (0-0) (MMLP WINS)
Season 11 XI VERSES: Thursday, December, 1st, 11:59 P.M. Western / 2:59 A.M. Eastern / 7:59 A.M. UK. 24 Hour Ext: Mod/Opponent Discretion VOTES: Sunday, December, 4th, 11:59 P.M. Western / 2:59 A.M. Eastern / 7:59 A.M. UK. 3 Vote Requirement Enforced/Penalty MAXIMUM: 48 Lines: 64 IF AGREED UPON! TOPIC:
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12-01-2022, 10:43 AM | #4 |
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COME ON ENGLAND!
Now the old lady has left
This Castle has emptied and so forth we move the goalposts No showboats ranging here as we sail ahead as one takes the knee, we’ll hear God save the queen and for the last time we shall pay our respects! Tyrant, a lioness who campaigned to the end. just west of Aberdeen, re-locating eventually with no dates released as she lay in her bed delaying the inevitable this international treasure takes her last breath sending shock waves as one lays a wreath with bated breath, were all waiting for that state of address some crack to the pressures as her patriots anxiously fret a close shave with woke culture disrupts a whole wave of sleep but come what may, we grieve as her memory takes in effect we’ll need a way to remember a day to forget with uncertainties dragging, so with purpose we carry her remains on the pavements but it has nothing on the burden of carrying the weight of a nation in death yet still showcasing grief, the mobs make a scene death switches your outlook as the figurative crowds push you away from the rest it changes perspective and links the surrounding chain of events and you start making amendments, paving the way for the present creating a celebration with the change of a Head abandoning yesteryear for today’s annual fest and boom, the nail hits you straight on the head it’s a man’s world and nothings holding us back so now were taking them steps down a long one-way street and there’s no going back henceforth with long range and speed we assail with the ranks of leadership now we move the goalposts with a new man between the sticks a leader of men, to a new anthem we will sing Women can live like a queen but every castle needs a King! |
12-04-2022, 07:56 PM | #6 |
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@MMLP This wasn't bad. I think you did a good job fleshing this out. Checked all the boxes thematically. Mechanically, there were a few places (most early on) that I felt could have been smoother. But all it all, it was a solid verse.
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12-04-2022, 10:55 PM | #7 |
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MMLP:
You're such a unique talent man. An MMLP verse always stands out and I'm a fan of your writing. Your (sometimes) subtle wordplay and varying rhyme schemes always keeps things fresh. You are surprising in the best ways and always bring new spins on the usual formulaic approach to topicals. Cool connection to the topic too, fairly obvious for a Brit but still worked well. I think Frank forcing people into battles is a smart move, (I technically didn't sign up either but he enticed me in with the topic) as it allows the usual cautious and selective topical writer to just say screw it and go in, and that's when writers like MMLP here are at their best. Nothing to lose, just straight WRITING, letting your talent and passion shine. You did it again here. I'm happy you decided to post something, even if it's just for a week or two.
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