Spoken Vs. E tha real - E WINS

H.R.P. · 03-09-2015, 09:36 PM

E Tha Real
Pummel your catfish text affair, i'm no joke man
Bullets runnin through a crew of curators, i killed spokesman
The set up was weak… nothing spectacular here.. gun/shooting lines are super played.. 2/5
Homos package all over the streets similar to FedExs strife
I make rash decisions, but none like your sex life
Setup was better… no multies.. the punch wasn’t strong.. humorous at best… 2/5
A downward spiral of lows & now i'll bury this joker
Loser could never see hiesman as marcus mariota
Again nothing hard hitting man… simple rhyme scheme.. the assonance here was ok.. setup weak.. punch didn’t connect for me… 2/5
Cats look at his face, grab sand and try to bury it
Face is black & bloated enough to star in a Tyler Perry flick
concept here would have been good if worded better.. setup was absolute garbage.. nothing special again.. 2/5
Ears the city of light & to you no one holds a candle
Ya not a powerhouse, cuz ya ears resemble a solar panel
This was funny … but as far as a punch goes it didn’t land hard.. although it made me chuckle.. this was your best bar…. 2.5/5

Spoken
Washed up w/ nothing but pride tucked, fuck this lame cake,
I'm fucking facing a fag but it's nothin' since he does that every time he wakes.
concept was funnyish.. needed worded better for full effect… setup was ok… 2/5
Push circles larger than life that'll make ya weekend deepin',
U push circles to buy king kar while I give the high end buy treatment.
this a little better here… this landed a little harder but still weak IMO… 2/5
Fuck his investments, my pump'll have his stock deflate from my quill,
If E*TRADE with the stock he'll need financial help to pay for da hospital bill.
this is better yet.. you tied your setup into your punch.. props.. but needed worded better for full effect.. still nothing hardhitting.. have yet to see a haymaker.. all light jabs… 2.5/5
A gimmick and a joke u never let the tool spray or the hands sting,
Even just to shadow box we'd catch this cut doing hand gestures and figurines.
now this is BOTB here… I like this.. concept was grimey… set up was decent… punch landed.. props.. 3/5
Fuck this cunt he the softest type, broads bullied him furious
Cus if E-Harmony he just look'n for who can relate to that expierence
Fell off here in the closer…. Nothing good here at all… 2/5
E Tha Real: 10.5 out of 25
Spoken: 11.5 out of 25
Vote: Spoken
I voted for spoken only due to the fact he had the only real punch in his 4th bar…. Everything else was a light jab… nothing spectacular in this battle. I was looking for some haymakers and got disappointed here… maybe it’s the short bar style yall got going on.. but setups were weak.. and punches lack creativity except for Spokens 4th bar… Props to both for trying.. keep writing… think outside the box when coming up with punches… throw in some word play.. and some multies… both got potential though.

03-09-2015, 09:36 PM	#1
H.R.P. Member Join Date: Mar 2015 Posts: 43 Rep Power: 0	E Tha Real Pummel your catfish text affair, i'm no joke man Bullets runnin through a crew of curators, i killed spokesman The set up was weak… nothing spectacular here.. gun/shooting lines are super played.. 2/5 Homos package all over the streets similar to FedExs strife I make rash decisions, but none like your sex life Setup was better… no multies.. the punch wasn’t strong.. humorous at best… 2/5 A downward spiral of lows & now i'll bury this joker Loser could never see hiesman as marcus mariota Again nothing hard hitting man… simple rhyme scheme.. the assonance here was ok.. setup weak.. punch didn’t connect for me… 2/5 Cats look at his face, grab sand and try to bury it Face is black & bloated enough to star in a Tyler Perry flick concept here would have been good if worded better.. setup was absolute garbage.. nothing special again.. 2/5 Ears the city of light & to you no one holds a candle Ya not a powerhouse, cuz ya ears resemble a solar panel This was funny … but as far as a punch goes it didn’t land hard.. although it made me chuckle.. this was your best bar…. 2.5/5 Spoken Washed up w/ nothing but pride tucked, fuck this lame cake, I'm fucking facing a fag but it's nothin' since he does that every time he wakes. concept was funnyish.. needed worded better for full effect… setup was ok… 2/5 Push circles larger than life that'll make ya weekend deepin', U push circles to buy king kar while I give the high end buy treatment. this a little better here… this landed a little harder but still weak IMO… 2/5 Fuck his investments, my pump'll have his stock deflate from my quill, If ETRADE with the stock he'll need financial help to pay for da hospital bill. this is better yet.. you tied your setup into your punch.. props.. but needed worded better for full effect.. still nothing hardhitting.. have yet to see a haymaker.. all light jabs… 2.5/5* A gimmick and a joke u never let the tool spray or the hands sting, Even just to shadow box we'd catch this cut doing hand gestures and figurines. now this is BOTB here… I like this.. concept was grimey… set up was decent… punch landed.. props.. 3/5 Fuck this cunt he the softest type, broads bullied him furious Cus if E-Harmony he just look'n for who can relate to that expierence Fell off here in the closer…. Nothing good here at all… 2/5 E Tha Real: 10.5 out of 25 Spoken: 11.5 out of 25 Vote: Spoken I voted for spoken only due to the fact he had the only real punch in his 4th bar…. Everything else was a light jab… nothing spectacular in this battle. I was looking for some haymakers and got disappointed here… maybe it’s the short bar style yall got going on.. but setups were weak.. and punches lack creativity except for Spokens 4th bar… Props to both for trying.. keep writing… think outside the box when coming up with punches… throw in some word play.. and some multies… both got potential though. __________________ Baggin One Rapper At A Time... Don't Worry Your Time Is Coming! Last edited by H.R.P.; 03-09-2015 at 09:38 PM.