03-23-2019, 12:10 AM | #1 |
obsessed
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Accomplishments - can recite entirety of shrek 2
Champed - tangoed with spider man behind scenes in spider-man 2
- was candidate for gerber baby 3x
- smush parker like bb comment on instagram saying "u fucka suck idiyote"
- smush beer on head and didn't cry
- parallel parked in between 2 ferrari's in tonky truck once
- when saying pledge of allegiance i said "i don't" lmao deadass bb satan
- won tshirt from taco bell saying "taco cat" is the same backwards for filling out 500 surveys in a
- neighbor house caught on fire i call FIRE department and saved lives, was in newspaper
- set neighbor house on fire lmao
- fuck neighbor husband and wife
- first fish caught resembled david ortiz
- colin kaepernick
- related to genghis khan
- elected assistant to the vice president assistant to the president for regional chess club
- never lost game of hide and seek
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i hear footsteps awaken the creaks in the floor again. who the fucks at the door? night stand machete laid neatly in drawer revolver neath queen mattress. in case of a quarrel but there's nothing. just repentance, contempt, intentions dissolved gun powder, protein drinks, and penniless thoughts could've sworn there was something. apparently not hear a swarm of bees next to me every day before dark borderline manic. try undoing the damage safe spaces fossilize our balloons & our cages as therapeutic as raindrops on metal roof interchanges interpersonal relationships via internal damnation stray further from kinship. purge the pervasion starboard the king ship. observe the insane social connection more grandeur than normal distinction hormonal response. formality close to instinction forming a bond. cutthroat. synovial strong childhood friends like famous rockstars. so many gone kurt, latore, shakur, shuffling through on the browser normalcy's paused. quiet as space. jupiters powder going through life thinking, how do i amount? inner city soul, stained by destitute out-of-towners every nuance i learned from human encounters too many to count. too many to counsel with obstacles accruing names like they're mountains who wouldve thought. who couldve saw this my descent towards aloof disregarding diluvian shark fin. hell in a handbasket downpours start when my umbrella unravels distinct as makeshift drum sets in the big apple phasing out white noise on hierarchal basis psychosomatic. mind warp. self actualization dwell in differentiation you promptly install in we're basic creatures. basically bombs waiting to go off. waiting to want. ticking til doomsday. can't wait to disarm me but something is wrong when my maslow pyramid has 5 entries for love and belonging some things prolonged, let the panic begin to quiet storms to harsh circumstances again don't need you to resolve what i mention just put my tears in a mason while you nod in acceptance again |
05-18-2019, 02:01 AM | #2 | |
The Clown Prince
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gotta say baby, this was some nicely worded craftsmanship
I dont know if Im developing a slur due to reading this but it was dope that opening is butter on freshly heated toast, I love that. dope work, very dope work.. everything melted together towards the end and hits a poetic end twas like a swan going out only to be mistaken for a duck & pow. anyway Quote:
great work
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06-09-2019, 12:52 AM | #3 |
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The beginning reminded me of like an Edgar Allan Poe vibe. Whole thing was a good read, a trip into the mind of anxiety and little self-worth
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06-20-2019, 11:28 PM | #4 |
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Sickening.
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07-13-2019, 08:01 PM | #5 |
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So much feels on this
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07-24-2019, 12:50 PM | #6 |
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I enjoyed this shit as well. A lot of emotion as mentioned by others, great penmanship throughout.
kurt, latore, shakur, shuffling through on the browser normalcy's paused. quiet as space. jupiters powder ^Your way with words in general in this piece is just dope af. Takes you from one thing right to an abstract similie in 5 words explaining the atmosphere of it all. The build up to such an execution is seen throughout as well in subtle ways like here: every nuance i learned from human encounters too many to count. too many to counsel with obstacles accruing names like they're mountains ^Just good shit in general throughout. Ending hits you in the guts too. Good shit.
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