10-02-2018, 06:46 PM | #1 |
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Spotlight battle: Adonis vs Lucipher Howlz[OPEN FOR VOTES]
NWL:Season I: Week III
Verses ares due: FRIDAY at 11:59 PM EST Voting ends: SUNDAY at 11:59 PM EST Line Limit: Minimum:10 lines, Max: 30 Voting on 2 battles is required. TOPIC: @Adonis @Lucipher Howlz Last edited by Inno; 10-07-2018 at 08:49 PM. |
10-02-2018, 09:59 PM | #2 |
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Traditional battle i guess, check
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any chance for an extension until tomorrow? same time? I will def post up
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The stages of flight when cupid aims with his sight Transforms picnic to nitpick...Until you wake... More insane by each night Sometimes you gotta fly - Leave the coup Just time your exit to seem astute Cause if you venture in a world and not a view You could actually taste forbidden fruit The Apple doesn’t fall far from…Oh pardon I might roll leafs and blow trees Releasing OG in clouded smoke-screens But that don’t mean I’m dope fiend, Nope… In fact… I’m mostly just a good soul controlled by heart strings Love coursing through veins of a vanity fiend A man living dreams, stuck between reality... And nights that we scream Either fucking or fighting tonights climaxing it seems While I’m trying to do right, I just end up doing ‘white’ Blown chance at living life; he's killing insides I'm... Dripping sustenance - Exuding confidence Brooding dominance, walking, dispensing emptied promises A sloppy excuse of… ‘all out of excuses’ Just a nuisance being abusive, come, watch as he cries, So pardon I...*Kisses Sky*... The stages of flight when cupid aims with his sight Transforms picnic to nitpick...Until you wake... More insane by each night
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" What kind of man am I"
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The choice I make now will leave a lasting impression- /CENTER]
But I'm too ashamed to be asking suggestions- I'm not past the aggression but I'm tasked with the question- Can I be a father or stomach my death like my caskets digestion- I don't lack the deception to somehow craft this perfection- Of lacking a message between addiction and what's my actual essence- My causal presence between the 2 worlds makes for a tactical sentence- Life or death! As I try to step, to the next level to find my breath- It deprives my chest, the quest to be a father might define my death- Or I'll find respect, by actually being one, but honestly not much time is left- My mind's complexed, be a stand up guy until my spine gets wrecked- by bending over backwards but that doesn't recline my stress- I have no back bone or will power and this defines my mess- but Ima try my best, to warm my heart until it fry's my chest- Hopefully my son will be crying less even if he finds respect!- But can I give it to em, I mean the kid is still in the womb- My soul is filling my tomb, not knowing if my seed is willing to bloom- No more drugs or drinking and just chilling till noon- My tank is on empty but will I be filling it soon- Am I willing to do, whats expected of me or am I just singing the tune- Acting like a respectable human or am I just bringing the doom- Do I stay to be respectable or make like a witch when given a broom- Fly away and end this while sitting in my car slowly sniffing the fumes- Nah Ima man up! Be who I should be, I know that its possible- I'm actually filled with hope as I pull up to the hospital- It's so logical but at first the answer seemed harder to find- Like I was searching for something but I was partially blind- Every mountain I climbed was no longer on the sharpest decline- As nothing from now on can ever tarnish my pride- Until the kid came out and his skin was a lot darker than mine!- |
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The stages of flight when cupid aims with his sight Transforms picnic to nitpick...Until you wake... More insane by each night kind of a cool concept. leaves much for the imagination but thats what the rest of the verse is for Sometimes you gotta fly - Leave the coup Just time your exit to seem astute Cause if you venture in a world and not a view You could actually taste forbidden fruit venture in a word and not a view was nice. thoughtful The Apple doesn’t fall far from…Oh pardon I might roll leafs and blow trees Releasing OG in clouded smoke-screens But that don’t mean I’m dope fiend, Nope… In fact… strong flow here but content didn't encapsulate the topic very well I’m mostly just a good soul controlled by heart strings Love coursing through veins of a vanity fiend A man living dreams, stuck between reality... And nights that we scream back on track content wise, at least as far as the content in the beginning. trials and tribulations of lovers typa shit. I can see it in the pic too. reaching, searching, running away Either fucking or fighting tonights climaxing it seems While I’m trying to do right, I just end up doing ‘white’ Blown chance at living life; he's killing insides I'm... Dripping sustenance - Exuding confidence fuck the drips. i kinda see where the dope fiend shit comin from earlier. seems like a personal tale Brooding dominance, walking, dispensing emptied promises A sloppy excuse of… ‘all out of excuses’ Just a nuisance being abusive, come, watch as he cries, So pardon I...*Kisses Sky*... The stages of flight when cupid aims with his sight Transforms picnic to nitpick...Until you wake... More insane by each night ending on a mantra. didnt perfectly match in flawless cohesion but still fitting. interesting lil tale here howlz The choice I make now will leave a lasting impression- But I'm too ashamed to be asking suggestions- asking suggestions, eh. not a solid opener. suggestions didnt fit in this context I'm not past the aggression but I'm tasked with the question- Can I be a father or stomach my death like my caskets digestion- i fucking hate when people use the 'ION'. stomach death/casket digestion was nice tho I don't lack the deception to somehow craft this perfection- Of lacking a message between addiction and what's my actual essence- My causal presence between the 2 worlds makes for a tactical sentence- this is the first point in the verse where i can reach far enough to correlate your writing and the topic. very glad you switched to a more 'creative' take on this scheme Life or death! As I try to step, to the next level to find my breath- It deprives my chest, the quest to be a father might define my death- Or I'll find respect, by actually being one, but honestly not much time is left- My mind's complexed, be a stand up guy until my spine gets wrecked- down into the meaty content here. "minds complexed" is as nonsensical as suggetions earlier, another blemish for me but the verse is rolling. hopefully you bring it back to the picture somehow by bending over backwards but that doesn't recline my stress- I have no back bone or will power and this defines my mess- but Ima try my best, to warm my heart until it fry's my chest- Hopefully my son will be crying less even if he finds respect!- But can I give it to em, I mean the kid is still in the womb- My soul is filling my tomb, not knowing if my seed is willing to bloom- No more drugs or drinking and just chilling till noon- My tank is on empty but will I be filling it soon- consistent section, wanted to point out the tank on empty line as being standout. still no correlation to topic imo Am I willing to do, whats expected of me or am I just singing the tune- Acting like a respectable human or am I just bringing the doom- Do I stay to be respectable or make like a witch when given a broom- Fly away and end this while sitting in my car slowly sniffing the fumes- Nah Ima man up! Be who I should be, I know that its possible- I'm actually filled with hope as I pull up to the hospital- It's so logical but at first the answer seemed harder to find- Like I was searching for something but I was partially blind- last bar was crimp with the end rhyme Every mountain I climbed was no longer on the sharpest decline- As nothing from now on can ever tarnish my pride- Until the kid came out and his skin was a lot darker than mine!- even drops a twist at the end. overall felt this verse was fairly consistent with a few nice spots and a few blemishes. i felt that it didn't represent the topic well enough which did take away from the verse from a voters standpoint cool battle, interesting but difficult picture. after one read over i feel stronger about one. howlz was consistent, showed off some nice flow at points but had a few misses that put me off, one notably in the intro. adonis verse didnt have the technical flare, but it had content and diction the better represented the picture topic while maintaining consistency throughout i vote for adonis |
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