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Old 06-30-2015, 04:59 AM   #1
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This that rye fungus live culture hear kittens cry my chairs legs broke
im to busy gettin high sitten on the floor kiss the sky

whats the problem if i try judgement brings more judgement upon me
learn to separate the zombies and living giving you a headache
and they not kidding....

forbidden doors open the schism got a rhythm of crunchy jaw broken
soft spoken i got seduced started sleeping on the bottom floor

forgot the roof had to watch it all with its ventscapes peeling cuts
that i gave with a switchblade misbehavior
was the reason karma showed me i can clean it later better then never...

cut your dope with your razor my hiphop aint somthin to save ya
or savor like saviors came singing bringing you gifts got your ears ringing

picking treasure out of garbage cans eatin pussy then shootin it with
rubberbandz clams casino extra caviar for the great bambino

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Old 07-01-2015, 03:41 PM   #2
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The rhymes were awesome in this, technically it was very sound but I have to be honest, I have absolutely no idea what you are talking about in this piece...maybe you could enlighten me so as to receive better/relevant feed?
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Old 07-02-2015, 04:53 AM   #3
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The rhymes were awesome in this, technically it was very sound but I have to be honest, I have absolutely no idea what you are talking about in this piece...maybe you could enlighten me so as to receive better/relevant feed?

sure its abstract so don't take it as a strict interpretation as you yourself will come up with your own way of seeing it.....


This that rye fungus live culture hear kittens cry my chairs legs broke
im to busy gettin high sitten on the floor kiss the sky ----

^^this is LSD hiphop i hear babies cry but im sitten on my ass getting high
kiss the sky my minds on bigger things

whats the problem if i try judgement brings more judgement upon me
learn to separate the zombies and living giving you a headache
and they not kidding....

^^i like what i do so i wont judge u but if your a fake or dead person
i dont involve my self to be around people who give me to many headaches lol


forbidden doors open the schism got a rhythm of crunchy jaw broken
soft spoken i got seduced started sleeping on the bottom floor

^^seeing things for what they are from a secret its a rhythm
thats crunchy lol but soft spoken ...i was living to much in my lower mind




forgot the roof had to watch it all with its ventscapes peeling cuts
that i gave with a switchblade misbehavior
was the reason karma showed me i can clean it later better then never...

^^the roof is your head and watching my thoughts they sneak in
threw the vent causeing a switchblade misbehavior
its better to do better now then never lol however u to take better
to be...

cut your dope with your razor my hiphop aint somthin to save ya
or savor like saviors came singing bringing you gifts got your ears ringing


^^this is hood hip hop still so its not some fake shit its philosophy a ear ringing
gift....

picking treasure out of garbage cans eatin pussy then shootin it with
rubberbandz clams casino extra caviar for the great bambino ...


^^even in waste you can find treasures pussy and rubberbandz sex and money...
pussy is like gambling i get it like babe ruth lmao....

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Old 07-02-2015, 03:07 PM   #4
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This was pretty slick, and it's what I enjoy about your style
you say a lot without putting it on display for people to see
it's something that you have to decipher, and it keeps things interesting
the flow of your verbiage comes together so eloquently it's neat...
do people still say 'neat' nah...but that's what this was ya know...
it made me want to grab a baseball bat and knock a ball into the neighbors yard
this like Sandlot and you the big dog, do your thing breh
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Old 07-11-2015, 10:24 AM   #5
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Loll this was crazy man

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