06-30-2020, 09:59 PM | #1 |
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06-30-2020, 11:10 PM | #2 |
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07-05-2020, 10:52 PM | #5 |
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07-06-2020, 11:43 PM | #6 |
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Caught in this prison, my mind
trying to escape these bars reading inbetween lines I having illusions of shackles, that got me in a bind dreaming of a time, can I travel so I can rewind? reverse time, clash with a titan, cause Cronos to misaligned? I look into the sky, searching for a sign I'm trying to climb, but the weight keeps dragging me down, my nails grasp for ground, blood trails surround I feel like I suffocating, I don't want to drown I am reaching for another round hostage situation, Jeckle and hyde, mirror skitzo altercation distorted hope, within myself, I cannot cope, slipknot, I feel the rope flashes hit, echoes pit, ripples drip while the past, present, and the future sit stuck in my head, is life an internal conflict? No, I love her, is she better off if I don't exist? No, I contradict, slap myself until I go numb, the dumb dumb, in a conundrum, I pacify with my thumb, back to the womb I come, I didn't ask for this, I can't figure which way to go I don't want your suggestions, I need a solution so, I'm stronger than this, I can overcome when the darkness shifts, I'm in control of my own thoughts, devil in the detail, I fought stranglehold on the negative fraught, cutting ties intertwine, sunshine, brighter days, the moment is where the pain stays, I'm beyond that drifting away. The darkness will decay, follow the light is what they say, at the crossroads on to another day, I pray.
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07-10-2020, 12:32 AM | #7 |
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Thought the beginning and ending were much too simple in terms of both rhyme and concept but think you shined towards the middle I know this probably isn't your best work since you knew you had a free W pretty early on but this mid-section was memorable to me good imagery, felt Eyedea-ish
while the past, present, and the future sit stuck in my head, is life an internal conflict? No, I love her, is she better off if I don't exist? No, I contradict, slap myself until I go numb, the dumb dumb, in a conundrum, I pacify with my thumb, back to the womb I come, Decent stuff keep writing hope to see you in playoffs! |
07-10-2020, 08:32 AM | #8 |
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A dive into the darkness is something I appreciate as a writer, and you certainly managed to convey that here. I liked the imprisoned imagery you used in the first half of the piece. The opening lines set the tone nicely. Use of vocab was nothing fancy but it did the job well enough as was the rhyme scheme. You related to the picture strongly with an emotion evoking piece. I'm glad you signed up man. You're in the right place.
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