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Old 10-30-2018, 01:58 PM   #1
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Where is my soul?
Really, where does it reside?
Is it encased inside a slimy brain
or my tired heart that tries
to buy me time to find the answers to these lies?
Nah, scratch that. Back track. (Flashback). Rewind.
Maybe I'm. Navy. Baby. Language why
do you always like to fail me?
For peace of mind pls unwind what it is I'm trying to say
- can't express light in a mind of gray
ectoplasma. Wait! I'm late.
Apples and Eve. Double helix. Double meaning
--->The Snake is DNA. The 1st Atom. Lucifer. Day.
Satan fell. Raised hell. The 2nd Adam dwelled.
X and Y. Every male. Then he fell too.
(3) Jesus Christ. Peep the trail?
Patterns. Paths. Even nails.
Matter fact. Matter's black.
Specs of light. Chatter back.
All facts. Hard to track
a run away train of thought.
Deer God! It's a PANdemic.
Diana. Bacchus. Baphomet.
Witches Superstition.
Stupendous. Reality. Fiction.
The Matrix is ancient. Our language is sacred.
Moor Free Us.
Morphus?
Neo?
Morgan Freeman?
Zero.
Polymathmatical. Social con-stucts.
Magical. Impractical.
Fractals. Fractions.
Sabbaticals
for un and under payed wages.
Slavery. Greatness? Never. Revisionist history.
But it's his story. Mine is a mystery.
Illuminati: devils and angels. Horns and halos.
UFOs and loads of fables. Mangled. Lion's den.
Lying men. Angles.
"Djangos built the world. Including the Sphinx in ancient Kemet".
Riveting. Rivers. Amazon, the Mississippi, the Yucatan Peninsula.
Olmecs, Mayans and Inuits. I'm into it.
My skin pigment filaments in the burning Sun that lights the night.
Fire burns. Ignite the sky with sulfur.
I'm golden to the Silver Surfer.
Son of Galactus. Imperial faction. Rebel scum.
Obi Wan. Metal guns and sabers.
If Venus is a slut, then Aries is her favorite.
I once tried to date her (Ommm).
We danced Capoeira to beating drums
then made love under the Sun.
Amazing woman she was. Now it's done.
The tower is crushed. 9...1...1.
Piles and pounds and miles of dust.
Thoth loan me a memory of Gothem city thugs.
Jokers and clowns and crocodile tears that flood the gutters.
Slums.
Bloods, Crips and Lords: the forgotten Tribes of Judah?
What if Judas and Jesus were Brutus and Caesar?
I'm just saying.
Idk.
Smoke and mirrors?
I suppose.
Where is my soul?
Drum roll please ....


Oh...


*Exposed*
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Old 11-02-2018, 01:53 AM   #2
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Where is my soul?
Really, where does it reside?
Is it encased inside a slimy brain
or my tired heart that tries
to buy me time to find the answers to these lies?
Nah, scratch that. Back track. (Flashback). Rewind. Maybe I'm. Navy. Baby. Language why
do you always like to fail me?
For peace of mind pls unwind what it is I'm trying to say
- can't express light in a mind of gray

The fuck lol...ill.

Apples and Eve. Double helix. Double meaning
--->The Snake is DNA. The 1st Atom. Lucifer. Day.
Satan fell. Raised hell. The 2nd Adam dwelled.
X and Y. Every male. Then he fell too.
(3) Jesus Christ. Peep the trail?
Patterns. Paths. Even nails.
Matter fact. Matter's black. Specs of light. Chatter back. All facts. Hard to track
a run away train of thought.
Deer God! It's a PANdemic. Diana. Bacchus. Baphomet. Witches. Superstition. Stupendous. Reality. Fiction.

Yo, that's Idk...you need to hit up @Vulgar bro.

I thought, actually fuck what I think lol...the first half is just stupid sick...I got lost bro, like just all this shit you filled my head with...may never recover from that lol.

Def the best joint I've read in the last 6 months, hands down...no disrespect to others as I don't read everythin'...

Flames my nigga...you don't need comments to tell you that yeah?

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Old 11-02-2018, 05:46 PM   #3
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this was dope.

i'll revisit.
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Old 02-04-2019, 11:27 PM   #5
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Thia is pretty amazing. Loved a lot of things.
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Reads like a train-of-thought type of work. You touch on many subjects ranging from Jesus to movies to 9/11.

Began and ended with "where is my soul". Still don't really know what it's about but you packed a lot of rhymes in here. So many rhymes that I noticed when there wasn't a rhyme

"Djangos built the world. Including the Sphinx in ancient Kemet".
Riveting. Rivers. Amazon, Mississippi, the Yucatan Peninsula.


But then shortly thereafter you have Inuits and into it

It's a cool read I suppose. Though I guess if I had to choose I would pick a rhymey topical of yours over this type of thing
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