03-28-2020, 02:49 PM | #1 |
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Paradise Lost
Since heaven sent peddlers of metaphysics meddling,
I been a ghost rider road ragin on a pale bike pedaling, Heated like Lucy placed a lightbulb above my head and lit, So here I sit spittin hellfire from my magma lips, Good heavens or goddamn hell might settle in, While you fucking fussin over facebook messagin, Petty playin victim with a pussy grabbing president, And handin extra billions to the foot soldier fetishists, Bar none; Let em in, 30 coins to cross the river Styx, Swerve and curve fast furious around the Sanzu drift, Quiet looms in darkest pits, Flames speaks; I spark the spliff, Burning bush fires lit the roads pathed with bad intent, Last edited by Joko; 03-29-2020 at 01:16 AM. |
03-28-2020, 03:28 PM | #2 |
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very miltonian in referencing charon and then fast and furious.
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03-28-2020, 03:31 PM | #3 |
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03-30-2020, 07:21 PM | #4 |
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Flowed well, liked the biblical references thought they were cool. Short, sweet and straight to the point really appealed to me as a reader so props
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