03-12-2020, 06:42 PM | #1 |
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Unfaithful
She cheated on you,
You need a lady who's faithful. She doesn't treat you good, You deserve better. She Broke your heart, Please let her go. She had a chance with you, Move on. She took your love for granted, She regret things she did to you. It's too late, You go on with your life. |
03-12-2020, 10:30 PM | #2 |
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Reached for your chest but didn't grab no shit
Couldn't even titty fuck you cuz you had no tits!!
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03-12-2020, 11:07 PM | #3 |
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It's a love poem about a break up with some straight forward advice to go with it. Don't really got much more to say about it, you put your heart into it and that's cool but it needs something more to catch my attention, specially on a topic that has been done A LOT by people in the past. Cool to see poetry up in here tho.
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03-13-2020, 12:57 AM | #4 |
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I just don't get how you've been here so long but refuse to elevate or heed anyone's advice even when they give it. Begone!
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03-13-2020, 10:57 AM | #5 |
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Thanks for the feedback
every time I think of something to write turn into a poem |
03-19-2020, 10:03 PM | #6 |
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Lol @ Blue...I really wish (like Adverse said) you would take onboard advice, It'll be very beneficial to you Robranda.
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