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Old 03-07-2020, 01:40 AM   #1
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label unusual, sequencing musicals, Bohemian grooves
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Old 03-07-2020, 07:30 AM   #2
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Old 03-08-2020, 04:41 PM   #3
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Loved it. Again.

There's definitely some meat on the bone here, finally. My only complaint about your pieces is they are usually too short lol.

I think you're in the weird position of making success redundant, hence the lack of replies. People are like, "oh, it's a dead man drop. It's probably amazing. I'll just read it and leave..."


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Old 03-08-2020, 06:02 PM   #4
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Thanks!

Yeah I mean it’s whatever. It’s a lot to wade through so I get it. Really fun for me to create these titanic ramble-ons every now and then, but it’s not for everyone I’m sure
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Old 03-09-2020, 06:42 PM   #5
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had a lot of qualms with this
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If mentioned in a discussion its who'd still use wordy lines and act all dope
Then again hes had this schtick so long he like bb da bb da bb thats all folks
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Old 04-05-2020, 08:56 AM   #6
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well, it's not that i didn't like it.
it just seemed almost uncontrolled. (thst took me awhile to say) but ... moreso the guidance seemed to be a little off. your direction. don't get me wrong i loved s couple of lines, several really. a bunch. I could handpick 10 places that i thought were just awesome. But for some reason I felt this looked like a rhyme fest more often. But either way, as usual, it sounded very cool. i just don't think i was able to tap into it and get connected like I do witn your other writing, so to say.


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I don't think we deserve this level of writing here at Netcees. This was ridiculously good and a style you've perfected.
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Your first 4 bars were awesome...midway honestly got lost then @ the end sorta caught it...Good shit man, you make niggas think...

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