03-07-2020, 01:40 AM | #1 |
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for the fallen
we're
animalistic. emotional. dramatic and gifted capitalist machinery in static positions master magician, casting his sentence, like bass fisherman laughter relentless, acid cemetery. Zack Wicks for president posthumous destiny, posturing heavy, sadness within crow's nest captaining ship, rifle crack, and panic ascends who's team are you on? bastard or bitch? think on that for a minute. there's no gray. either you had it or didn't, don't ask for specifics pass me a swisher for the people we lost 2006 had all the fallen on our sweaters and walls the night will soon be over. won't you sing me a song make me forget i'm headed home again to sleep and withdraw as strange as it seems, it's real to me. this fading belief that it matters what i have to say to anyone reading maple moonshine mason jars we made into sleep making love same way we make believe. it's playful deceit naked and free. cherub and tree, soil and sulfur every 8-ball needs a pyrex pot to boil it over color me motor oil, city-slicker motioning order gavel bang. another decade of emotional torture dissociative mores prototypic mode of misnomer totally immobile lord of slow reabsorption regressive tendencies. i've grown into a finicky child time passed. i stayed the same and never figured it out trigonal planar, electron-dense, let negativity pile obsessing over chiral chemic symmetry now mimic me how? it's code encrypted in a series of vowels miles beneath a gravestone in the Switzerland alps all i need is loyalty. and sympathy. help ledger desperately to reconnect our system to self keep missing a beat. pulse synchrony like periods bleed pistol to your teeth. tasting nickel once the trigger release simple, clean. its hard to let go. left a kingdom, a queen for peace, a piece of quiet. good things never come easy sacrifices model clay to sculpture. sand into stone black the martyr. white-robe pacifist out gathering souls calling the abyss with schizophrenia's phone half-dead. hearing voices while i'm standing alone anakin's ghost. phantom menacing like wolves at the door dripping fur and sweat and blood all over the floor four-leaf clover certified, just lucky to be alive only thing for certain: we've got nothing to deify plastic island bandits on a chunk of formaldehyde i'm crossed between addiction & compulsion to rhapsodize a plane ticket nowhere. baggage coaches and Samsonite the last wooly mammoth on this island of parasites from the era of hammer-pants dances and camel lights practicing Parappa the Rapper to get my cadence right passion in his practices Godzilla his appetite its simple math. T-89 transmission to master rhyme ridiculous past his prime, no secret its true still seek/destroy like graphic sensors on a B-22 its weakness. secret. reclusive. beastly and beautiful dressing all in powder-blue to speak at a funeral label unusual, sequencing musicals, Bohemian grooves seeking silver / breathing toxin / speaking in blues its a frequency used to broadcast all these signals to you hoping you may stumble on it one afternoon may it find you well, Jazzy Belle. we're but walls in a room a screen to filter all our empty promises through hard to accept and great to embrace, i saved you a place you never showed your face again on Erie and State poking bears and wonder if they're really awake Myrmidon, the myriad of pure inspiration kill or be saved. hit it or pass. I'm Gilligan's raft setting free a butterfly effect-and-a-half method acting romantic. lighting candles for comfort burn sandalwood and disassemble all my sneakers for rubber a bridge runs under. snowy battlefield awash incandescent sunbeam sterilize the bodies we left. all for revenge. goodnight
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03-07-2020, 07:30 AM | #2 |
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inimitable And deep and sexy sounds
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03-08-2020, 04:41 PM | #3 |
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Loved it. Again.
There's definitely some meat on the bone here, finally. My only complaint about your pieces is they are usually too short lol. I think you're in the weird position of making success redundant, hence the lack of replies. People are like, "oh, it's a dead man drop. It's probably amazing. I'll just read it and leave..." Unfortunate.
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03-08-2020, 06:02 PM | #4 |
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Thanks!
Yeah I mean it’s whatever. It’s a lot to wade through so I get it. Really fun for me to create these titanic ramble-ons every now and then, but it’s not for everyone I’m sure
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03-09-2020, 06:42 PM | #5 |
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had a lot of qualms with this
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04-05-2020, 08:56 AM | #6 |
obsessed
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Accomplishments - can recite entirety of shrek 2
Champed - tangoed with spider man behind scenes in spider-man 2
- was candidate for gerber baby 3x
- smush parker like bb comment on instagram saying "u fucka suck idiyote"
- smush beer on head and didn't cry
- parallel parked in between 2 ferrari's in tonky truck once
- when saying pledge of allegiance i said "i don't" lmao deadass bb satan
- won tshirt from taco bell saying "taco cat" is the same backwards for filling out 500 surveys in a
- neighbor house caught on fire i call FIRE department and saved lives, was in newspaper
- set neighbor house on fire lmao
- fuck neighbor husband and wife
- first fish caught resembled david ortiz
- colin kaepernick
- related to genghis khan
- elected assistant to the vice president assistant to the president for regional chess club
- never lost game of hide and seek
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well, it's not that i didn't like it.
it just seemed almost uncontrolled. (thst took me awhile to say) but ... moreso the guidance seemed to be a little off. your direction. don't get me wrong i loved s couple of lines, several really. a bunch. I could handpick 10 places that i thought were just awesome. But for some reason I felt this looked like a rhyme fest more often. But either way, as usual, it sounded very cool. i just don't think i was able to tap into it and get connected like I do witn your other writing, so to say. hope all is well |
04-05-2020, 09:31 AM | #7 |
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I don't think we deserve this level of writing here at Netcees. This was ridiculously good and a style you've perfected.
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04-18-2020, 07:16 PM | #8 |
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thanks @Aero whens our next collaboration big guy
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04-21-2020, 08:51 PM | #9 |
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Your first 4 bars were awesome...midway honestly got lost then @ the end sorta caught it...Good shit man, you make niggas think...
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