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Old 12-31-2017, 05:35 PM   #1
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I don't know much about physics, nor am I scientifically inclined
I'm just a normal guy from Georgia who works a nine-to-five
For a civilian based employer known as Stonehenge Enterprise
The global giant in Robotics that owns Quantum Core Designs
Which are carbon-coated constructs of monolithic size
Computers so complex they've been rumored to be finds
Of an underwater ruin near Bermuda in July ... of 1985
When two scuba divers tried to exhume a sacred site
Of a luminescent blue ancient pyramid of light
Which presumably just might be the last looming relic
Of Atlantis due to time being brutally unkind
To historic artifacts
As they departed towards the bottom the aquatic habitat
Holographically became a tropical location full of oxygen exchange
It was awesome and insane to observe such a change
As the dirt beneath their flippers quickly turned into a stage
And lifted them away
Towards the center of the entrance which was hexagonal shaped
And connected to the cosmos out in subatomic space
A quantum gateway to where the clock is not obeyed
And they weren't hostages or slaves to its concept or its games
Beyond the 4th Dimension to the Source’s algorithm
That configured into chains made of quartz and DNA
Transformed and rearranged into a ginormous eye
That orbited the plane and told them Horus was its name
An artificial brain of a deceased deity
That morphed its database into string energies
And incased it in the safety of the pyramid machine
That lay beneath the sea as the greatest source of wisdom
In the whole galaxy
From the Olmecs to Egyptians to the Dogon and Chinese
They all knew of it’s existence in the West Indies
Protected by Atlantis and the pre-Columbus Mayans
Til they suddenly just vanished leaving nothing but thier silence
But those lucky scuba divers rediscovered what was hiding
In the ‘Devil’s Triangle’ of those Caribbean islands
But apparently their finding wasn’t something we should know
Cause they never told the public, but became the CEOs
Of Stonehenge Enterprise where I work in video
Surveillance operations and security patrol
A private corporation that the government supports
Such as military branches for their weaponary and force
And of course the CIA so they can spy and report
To Illuminati masters what the Eye has informed
Cos those monolithic structures are like giant thump-drives
Of quantum information from a cosmic god’s mind

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Old 01-30-2019, 03:07 PM   #2
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Hello, Self Activate...lol..allow me to feed this piece of work.

I enjoyed this read Self Activate - had all the essentials for a good written. You had nice mechanics, with a good flow to boot. Decent imagery, with a good narrative. I enjoyed the story-line; - was quite entertaining in a way. Nice work, man. The ending with the character or narration being from a employee was kind of..just there..like..whatever..lol...but it was still good in a way. I enjoyed this written. The ending was pretty good as-well. Nothing too bad to say. Decent work, man. Keep writing!
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