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Old 03-05-2018, 08:23 PM   #1
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Season 8

Verses are due FRIDAY at 11:59 PM EST

Voting ends SUNDAY at 11:59 PM EST

Verses may not exceed 48 lines or 650 words

Voting on 3 battles is required.

Topic: http://www.netcees.org/showthread.php?t=126253

@Woke vs @Candy

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Old 03-05-2018, 10:51 PM   #2
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Old 03-06-2018, 08:35 AM   #3
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*VICTIM*

Asleep out victim ran,
run as if it was a system of sand strummed from hair
to air of their, their i once was hung..
in option of from out of sleep, asleep or not i ran

suspend by straps, slumped down and inflicted in a decision it just could not out hunch if i did run to ran
even in instinct of the extinct for no reason youuuuuu
could expunge....................

the shiloute sinking beneathe baracades of decade
i prey on only for on as a slave
if we where to shake, shake the history
gaven grave in the first place too lunge

a step
too step
to step asleep at once victim
of step at all i clutch depending on the hole that attached junked twitching as nerve it can bunch..

yet oh so yet, i let it bleed as foward even of march time none..

a fist dripped of drape it splashe's in place of out of my way
dust, moisture and the sure of things to come.....

UNDER
and
Between

All she hold's holy of merry she cum's unseen of beneath and in blunder of i could squeeze more through the mind of this young..

But
to say that, in only saying that a message of mass,
oh dear little knuckle's of brass i have embraced, embarassed by the exact dialated trash foresaken amongst attempt to pass..

The word of spoken, you speak has already been

it has already seen

it has already dreamt it's last dream too dream, if it was too dream at all being the hollow from repeat before what could be compare in me..

of me alone, lonely under only dream of what could have been,
if you where to regoginze proceed..
to believe thought is thought you have breached...

A story of guidance, where only immitate survives,
a boy and a girl crosspaths of their own against I, i whom is why they would survive..

with their whited out black eye's red..
with pores pored from deformed report as possibility before a step to claim as paw at all even if before my breath breathed in said..

ONLY a question
is the story of if they pull the trigger or not

in thought cojoined in disfigured by fate unfigured of what
non-disguised for i am the lie, that lies between the unseen might that might be

open in turn tear to question in thought their venture
without pressure
where in point out point this girl only skin's lesser for more
beyhond the smoke, steam and whistle of push past this pasture to claim beyhond I stroke I stroke I stroke

simply to stroke my own seperate
the same as the girl boy before i only may place myself at this bridge briagde fallacy of felloship paradox paralized penats and pendants

siezed to shone..

how we could of came about not apart once..

through out the thrown out built castle these mungrals mangle this girl,
she hurls her hair in air for the trigger reaction craddles the same fear

The story was never was is in its intentions,
for the weapon is unseen in the depth of these chidlren beneath direction

the lost of the lost..
the disregaurded never assumed of forgotten
*PLOW
just unwanted
apparently from apprant i am correct
for missing the shute

As i watch the gun before their feet OF want always was wanted WANT NONE?
only blood

well you can stay before your house of dolls doll loved in what was once you i strummed..

tink tink tink *dang

i
i
i.....
....
..
you fall
for fall only because fallen Iam compare at all Dolls short of idol/idle
but blindside supplied in viral

i...
i..
i
fowwwwwwwwwwwoosh *clunk

As picks up the gun, a golden print of no more
she ponders,
for i am the sure in sure things to come..

*kadunk kadunk crunch
bang*
under to up i stand amongst

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Two lips pucker, succulent hymns
A couple stuck within limbs
They’re struggles intense
Muffled breaths draw short, rugged imprints
Love at first sight, bursting twilight
Fireworks ablaze, breaking day while in night
They drift away within life, afraid but alive
Taking fire by arrow, cupid grazed either side
Damage is done, Love struck by a gun
A pair has begun being spun into one

Tied by the tongue


They first met with seagulls cawing demands
He’d been gnawing off hands,
Killing time via walks in the sand
Skipping stones upstream, lost in a trance
Summer rays kissing boredom away
He found love by the beachside that day
Mary-Jane was his boo, but now Crystal came through
Changing circadian rhythm, leaving chakra aloof
The price of love soars, he’s high as a cloud
Blowing plumes right out from inside of his mouth
In the sixties, love was dirt cheap
Herpes were currency paid per the sheet
But no HE
He fell in love with her being
But times change, and the price of love surged from the floor
Paying hefty for less left him cursing for more
So he complained the only way he saw fit
Hit 9-1-1 to bitch about the prices that hit the sky in a rocket
When they, came Jewelry was his profit
A shiny new pair of wrist watch lockets




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Old 03-10-2018, 06:08 AM   #6
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wow that was good I liked Wokes verse a lot... he did a really good job tying in the topic that was really interesting his story... don't know not much else to say about it... I really liked what he did with that verse though as for candy I couldn't really understand what she was going for... I thought her topic was a bit too long there weren't many rhymes some of the wording felt off... don't know it was alright I guess but for me I just enjoyed this dudes Wokes verse more... so yeah...

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Old 03-11-2018, 10:00 PM   #7
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candy - wtf? You lost.

Woke - very nice. The piece moved at a nice pace. Lots of imagery that complimented the overarching theme. Ultimately it was the subtlety of the verse that got me. Although that one rocket line was wack.

Vote - woke. @Candy quit playing around. Ur too nice to not share ur work, hoe.
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Candy probably went over the lien limit

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