Dave vs Ahriman - DAVE WINS BY NS, OPEN FOR FEED

Sharp · 07-25-2022, 09:21 PM

Netcees SOL Season II
Week 5

Due Thursday, July 28th at Midnight PST

Minimum: 8 Lines
Maximum: 12 Lines
24hr ext given on request

NO biting
NO swaying
NO feeding
You MUST check in
Don't edit after your opponent has posted
2nd person to post can't edit after the first vote comes in
Don't be an idiot
Don't use your opponent's pic unless it's a pic battle
Agree on a line limit
May God have mercy on your souls

@evaD @Ahriman

evaD · 07-26-2022, 02:19 PM

In

Ahriman · 07-26-2022, 04:34 PM

8

evaD · 07-28-2022, 05:27 PM

Stealing identities online is really pathetic you bum
Only time Dave ever deep-fake is when Ahri’s ugly bitch is tryna get me to cum
Everything you write is buttcheek, don’t even know why this cunt tries it
If assymetric of deciding battles? this is bound to be totally one sided
The ladies love me til I ditch em.. I stay messin with these hoes
If Ahriman ever turns heel… it’s a pirouette into a vogue
The fruitiest of aliases, if you’re shook then you should scarper
You pick that name from the list of personality traits your look for in partner?

Wanderer · 07-29-2022, 08:15 AM

Cool verse

Wasn’t overly feeling the opener
Asymmetry was a good idea but it was just off for me
Turns a heel was funny, just slightly worried you know about pirouettes to vogues lol
Closer was cool and funny

Liked the humour overall and particularly liked you last 2 bars

Diablo · 07-29-2022, 08:46 AM

deep fake was a cool idea
Assymetric threw me at first, still kind of jarring. i see it works but I’m not it’s biggest fan
turns heel was okay
closer is cool but maybe lacks a little in delivery with it being in the form of a question

nice verse

Adverse · 07-29-2022, 09:42 AM

Ahriman robbed me last week and then got out while he still could...tsk tsk tsk

This was an alright verse, obviously not one of your best but you really haven’t had much competition the last couple weeks so you’re just throwing together throw away verses and that’s all fine, some bars the concept was there but didn’t really hit (asymmetric was one of them) last four were solid, keep doing your thing David

Resin M-I-C · 07-30-2022, 08:54 PM

pirrhouette leaned me haha

Sharp · 07-31-2022, 10:40 AM

Deepfake is solid. Asymmetric isn't pronounced that way on US English but I'll give it a pass. Heel turn was lol. Closer took me a second read to get... Are a man works though. That's on me

07-26-2022, 02:19 PM	#2
evaD Senior Member Join Date: May 2020 Posts: 697 Battle Record: 19-10 Champed - BA Show And Prove - Summer Classic XI Rep Power: 4156644	In __________________

07-28-2022, 05:27 PM	#4
evaD Senior Member Join Date: May 2020 Posts: 697 Battle Record: 19-10 Champed - BA Show And Prove - Summer Classic XI Rep Power: 4156644	Stealing identities online is really pathetic you bum Only time Dave ever deep-fake is when Ahri’s ugly bitch is tryna get me to cum Everything you write is buttcheek, don’t even know why this cunt tries it If assymetric of deciding battles? this is bound to be totally one sided The ladies love me til I ditch em.. I stay messin with these hoes If Ahriman ever turns heel… it’s a pirouette into a vogue The fruitiest of aliases, if you’re shook then you should scarper You pick that name from the list of personality traits your look for in partner? __________________ Last edited by evaD; 07-28-2022 at 05:33 PM.

07-30-2022, 08:54 PM	#8
Resin M-I-C Senior Member Join Date: Jun 2015 Posts: 734 Battle Record: 33-9 Champed - 1-2 Punch Onslaught II - Tag Team Tournament V - 1-2 Punch Season III - Netcees SOL - Battle Arena - SOL Season I - NBL Season XIV - Netcees Battle League Rep Power: 8150227	pirrhouette leaned me haha __________________ C. O. B.

07-26-2022, 04:34 PM	#3
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07-29-2022, 08:15 AM	#5
Wanderer Senior Member Join Date: Apr 2015 Location: England Posts: 587 Battle Record: 24-33 Champed - NPL Roast Rep Power: 7457538	Cool verse Wasn’t overly feeling the opener Asymmetry was a good idea but it was just off for me Turns a heel was funny, just slightly worried you know about pirouettes to vogues lol Closer was cool and funny Liked the humour overall and particularly liked you last 2 bars

07-29-2022, 08:46 AM	#6
Diablo Badgerdick Join Date: Jul 2015 Location: Showdown City Posts: 2,604 Battle Record: 11-2 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 22685548	deep fake was a cool idea Assymetric threw me at first, still kind of jarring. i see it works but I’m not it’s biggest fan turns heel was okay closer is cool but maybe lacks a little in delivery with it being in the form of a question nice verse

07-29-2022, 09:42 AM	#7
Adverse low tide in serotonin bay Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 2,739 Battle Record: 37-28 Champed - GWL Picture Challenge - Guerrilla Writing League - Black August II Rep Power: 15446142	Ahriman robbed me last week and then got out while he still could...tsk tsk tsk This was an alright verse, obviously not one of your best but you really haven’t had much competition the last couple weeks so you’re just throwing together throw away verses and that’s all fine, some bars the concept was there but didn’t really hit (asymmetric was one of them) last four were solid, keep doing your thing David