07-18-2013, 07:17 PM | #2 |
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Fathom...a blood line of the first kind.
Famous father god tailored with loves twine. A mother broken off from inside. Molded to birth both of us in dim light. Two brothers, young, creating seeds of all man. One truely loved, the other jealously stands. Enoughs enough, gripping hatred in rock. Blood shed from jaw, god angered in awe and shock. Adam sentenced to death, Cain soiled gods people. Life is beautiful, but only when satan's not my brothers keeper.
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07-18-2013, 07:25 PM | #3 |
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That knife in his back was tipped in a virus
Felt it spiral up into his iris, ripping his life with A cold chill, as he slumps into the hollow of a fox hole As million screams trill onward, following the drum roll In between no-mans-land and the safety of a trench The bullets rip and hit, blades swirling and drenched He lies there as boots and bayonets march past fast Soiled in his own blood, at the hands of the last man, Who would ever seem to do him in...in a derange manner It was his partner, his 6 man, ....his brothers keeper
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07-18-2013, 07:27 PM | #4 |
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V/Adonis felt way more emotion in his. loved the cain and able allusion
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07-18-2013, 07:28 PM | #5 |
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shit i have to choose one V/Adonis
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07-18-2013, 07:28 PM | #6 |
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good battle here, thought yall both seemed equally there topic wise -just a hgair bit of stray from each end. though coup had the dominant flow but honestlky feel adonis took the concept and stayed true to it a little nbetter. so even with a less enjoyed flow i feel adonis takes it.
v-adonis
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07-18-2013, 07:31 PM | #7 |
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07-18-2013, 07:35 PM | #8 |
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Wow! this is exciting! I loved both! Very short lines from each, which was wonderful, adonis had the nice thought, but I loved coup as well!!!
it's taste wise, and I loved coups! I am voting for coup, best of luck gentlemen. |
07-18-2013, 07:47 PM | #9 |
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uppin over for a clear winner
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07-18-2013, 07:47 PM | #10 |
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v/ coup
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07-18-2013, 08:03 PM | #11 |
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V adon
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07-18-2013, 08:09 PM | #12 |
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