Write Night I: Pyro Vs. Nycspitz [NYCSPITZ WINS]

Spoken · 07-14-2013, 06:21 PM

TOPICAL KEYS TO GREATNESS

Welcome to the 2nd round.

Here are the 5 topics you well get to choose from..

Branded Confinement
Sterling Silver
The last of Youth
Summoning of blue skies
Incarnation

Your choice of either topics

15 minutes to write 10 lines

G'Luck and make it dope

@Pyro @NYCSPITZ

Pyro · 07-14-2013, 06:31 PM

drowning my sorrow in some liquor if your venting then it's me to take
ascending emotions demented notions would abbreviate
count on the stars to mediate I'm bringing down these walls like a cheap estate
but passion passes active as i tag but no one appreciates.
For a demons sake, we young but a funeral issue carry's
me beautifully without a eulogy and a brutal king reads my obituary.
"It fits you Pyro we miss you" chanting and demanding
I'm so enchanted now the missions canceled!
That viscous Hansel was pitching quotes to get dismantled
As a youth the truth will always sit between my dreams and things that's vandaled

NYCSPITZ · 07-14-2013, 06:37 PM

His whole life he had visions of dim light, dying at sea.
Thrown overboard posiedon's pool welcomed his quiet relief.
But mutinous murder visions lead to disquieted piques...
When cherubs float on thunderclouds to zap your mind and its leaks.
He went to psychotherapy, and was decided a freak.
But asylum wards only strengthened his dream talk and heightened its speech.
but to others it seemed like tryna fit a titan in creeks.
Push ups, and anger sublimates to mighty physiques.
Doctors prodded further. Condescended...until cynicism tightened his cheeks.
Until his tongue drowned him as blood dripped down the white of his teeth.

Pent uP · 07-14-2013, 06:45 PM

Vote - nyc

Pyro had a cool verse but it didn't come together for me. It felt like he had a grand idea that he dodnt have time to execute in the line or time limit

Nyc had a concept that better in the confinement of the tournaments parameters. Also his verse was mechanically better

Spoken · 07-14-2013, 06:50 PM

Pyro- you got a nice approach but when you hit a stride of nice wit u seem to break it by throwing in a finisher that's lackluster to the set up of imagery you had put before. Inconsistent in other words but I like how you vibe in the flow ... Also your word choice at teams could have been more creative in my eyes as sometimes I read your bars and I could finish it in a way or grasp what u were gonna say.. Deeming it predictable and no real flair to the verse

NyC- your contet was viscous ... It started off stron and then just continued to roll from there and stayed on point. It being key style of course we don't expect nice keys but this here was a nice fucking key with nice diction and imagery set. I liked the story an the grim look you approached the topic with.

Both highly creative and both well presented for a key... But I got NYC taking it with one category he outshined in with was wording/content props to both for dropping

CymbiCort · 07-14-2013, 06:51 PM

V: NYC

Felt his verse a little more, had better schemes and generally just a more entertaining verse,

^^if it isn't explained enough...i'd elaborate further if needed...

07-14-2013, 06:21 PM	#1
Spoken ...DA GAWD... Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 2,355 Battle Record: 13-34 Rep Power: 5860410	Write Night I: Pyro Vs. Nycspitz [NYCSPITZ WINS] TOPICAL KEYS TO GREATNESS Welcome to the 2nd round. Here are the 5 topics you well get to choose from.. Branded Confinement Sterling Silver The last of Youth Summoning of blue skies Incarnation Your choice of either topics 15 minutes to write 10 lines G'Luck and make it dope @Pyro @NYCSPITZ __________________ WP Po'ethics

07-14-2013, 06:31 PM	#2
Pyro Shunnin Da Chillins Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 151 Battle Record: 0-4 Rep Power: 33	drowning my sorrow in some liquor if your venting then it's me to take ascending emotions demented notions would abbreviate count on the stars to mediate I'm bringing down these walls like a cheap estate but passion passes active as i tag but no one appreciates. For a demons sake, we young but a funeral issue carry's me beautifully without a eulogy and a brutal king reads my obituary. "It fits you Pyro we miss you" chanting and demanding I'm so enchanted now the missions canceled! That viscous Hansel was pitching quotes to get dismantled As a youth the truth will always sit between my dreams and things that's vandaled __________________ Soundcloud Strawberry Pineapples Cuhh

07-14-2013, 06:50 PM	#5
Spoken ...DA GAWD... Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 2,355 Battle Record: 13-34 Rep Power: 5860410	Pyro- you got a nice approach but when you hit a stride of nice wit u seem to break it by throwing in a finisher that's lackluster to the set up of imagery you had put before. Inconsistent in other words but I like how you vibe in the flow ... Also your word choice at teams could have been more creative in my eyes as sometimes I read your bars and I could finish it in a way or grasp what u were gonna say.. Deeming it predictable and no real flair to the verse NyC- your contet was viscous ... It started off stron and then just continued to roll from there and stayed on point. It being key style of course we don't expect nice keys but this here was a nice fucking key with nice diction and imagery set. I liked the story an the grim look you approached the topic with. Both highly creative and both well presented for a key... But I got NYC taking it with one category he outshined in with was wording/content props to both for dropping __________________ WP Po'ethics

07-14-2013, 06:37 PM	#3
NYCSPITZ SYRACUSE Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,033 Battle Record: 31-37 Champed - Write Night II - Alias Topical Tournament Rep Power: 4743544	His whole life he had visions of dim light, dying at sea. Thrown overboard posiedon's pool welcomed his quiet relief. But mutinous murder visions lead to disquieted piques... When cherubs float on thunderclouds to zap your mind and its leaks. He went to psychotherapy, and was decided a freak. But asylum wards only strengthened his dream talk and heightened its speech. but to others it seemed like tryna fit a titan in creeks. Push ups, and anger sublimates to mighty physiques. Doctors prodded further. Condescended...until cynicism tightened his cheeks. Until his tongue drowned him as blood dripped down the white of his teeth.

07-14-2013, 06:45 PM	#4
Pent uP Robin Williams of Fallen Victims Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 1,502 Battle Record: 25-11 Accomplishments - NC Hall of Fame Champed - Netcees Writers League (2x) - NWL Season 1 - Write Night I - Art of Writing League (2x) - Write Week IV Rep Power: 6862273	Vote - nyc Pyro had a cool verse but it didn't come together for me. It felt like he had a grand idea that he dodnt have time to execute in the line or time limit Nyc had a concept that better in the confinement of the tournaments parameters. Also his verse was mechanically better

07-14-2013, 06:51 PM	#6
CymbiCort Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 184 Battle Record: 4-13 Rep Power: 33	V: NYC Felt his verse a little more, had better schemes and generally just a more entertaining verse, ^^if it isn't explained enough...i'd elaborate further if needed...