Japanese Whiskey

ACTIVATE SELF · 05-10-2018, 08:28 AM

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Geno · 05-10-2018, 09:00 AM

This was lmfao. Awesome

ACTIVATE SELF · 05-10-2018, 09:13 AM

I kid I kid lol

Enbombz · 05-10-2018, 11:39 AM

Dope. I always catch your flow cos I've heard you spit before.
I would of maybe switched the "future a text" to future self a text"
The gas line had s type though I'm assuming it's " I could use it on the gas" or "I could use one for the gas"
But like I said I enjoyed it, butter flow, cool references.

ACTIVATE SELF · 05-10-2018, 11:48 AM

Yooooooooo, I dig that suggestion. I would legit add it but it wouldn't feel right given I didn't think of it myself. Good lookin out on that typo too. Glad you dug it, fam.

Sammy · 05-10-2018, 01:46 PM

"I'm not suitable in suits unless I'm suiting up for death"

jjeeaaahh!

Exis · 05-11-2018, 08:48 AM

Your a funny nigga...

sral · 05-11-2018, 12:20 PM

shit fiyah

people sleeping

Eŋg · 05-11-2018, 12:25 PM

i'm all about hibiki when i can afford it. shit is extortion though.

this was dope.

rhythmic, self-effacing, self-important humour. nice blend.

ACTIVATE SELF · 05-11-2018, 02:32 PM

Thank you kindly, gents. Appreciate the read/feed.

PancakeBrah · 05-11-2018, 07:29 PM

Best of the pieces I've read from you. Funny, witty. Enjoyable read. Smooth.

Wutzit Tewya · 05-12-2018, 12:48 PM

Cause a corner office view is less beautiful when stressed..
I'm not suitable for suits unless I'm suiting up for death...REAL dope.

In the backseat of an uber with a floozie and a flask...LOL

The flow of this is nasty. Love me a sick flow..and the content was good to match it. Lots of LOL in there. Good stuff

ACTIVATE SELF · 05-19-2018, 12:06 AM

Thank you

dull boy · 05-19-2018, 08:58 AM

Dope

Current faggot · 05-19-2018, 12:24 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by ACTIVATE SELF

I sit back and wait for what comes next
So ahead of my time I sent my future a text
Like "Congratulation on our mutual success"

Fire.....

Y like Pookie in New Jack while I'm Nino quick as Neo
Dodgin bullets zoomin past ...
Bitch you Nemo with an ego gettin chewed up like a snack
"Spit that pinot in a glass" cos she rather drink some whisky
And get frisky in my lap ...I'm a billion dollar mac
With a sick apartment pad, til I get up from my nap
In the middle of the trap with a mattress that's on flat
Gettin action from an actress that so happens to be fat]

Man that shits hard

Bro you the best I have seen here hands down.

Consistent fire

Lyriscologist · 05-19-2018, 03:14 PM

haaaa, i think this is the first piece I read of yours that wasn’t a topical or imagery piece and just flowing... sick flow, i think the transitional structure was off on the gas line but flawless overall.. had me lol’in

2tripple0 · 05-19-2018, 09:48 PM

It was alright it wasnt dope it was a piece it was a fucking piece and it coulda been better it was alright it was decent good for you for dropping or some shit...but dont lie to yourself and say that was dope....

ACTIVATE SELF · 05-19-2018, 10:06 PM

Word.

Note to self: don't lie to self.

- SELF

sral · 05-20-2018, 10:54 AM

2 Crip da turn up GAWD has spoken

2tripple0 · 05-20-2018, 11:54 AM

Lol rap is weird man i mean its like life whats the point nobody really knows.... i mean i write shit and i guess follow the format er whatever rhyme a bar come up with a story or a theme er whatever but i dont really get what im actually trying to achieve.... i guess its just a piece of writing er sumn sumn to read at some point when you get a chance dont know.... what do i know.... it just feels like its some sort of challenge is all thats all it is your just challenging yourself to write something good i guess...

05-10-2018, 09:00 AM	#2
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05-19-2018, 09:48 PM	#17
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05-20-2018, 10:54 AM	#19
sral Shrewd as evearthed Join Date: Aug 2014 Location: Wolverhampton, England Posts: 8,253 Battle Record: 28-3 Champed - Gimmick Battle League - The Winter Topical - Topical Martyrs - Lime Green Poetry Association - Lyric Olympics - Art of Writing League - Guerrilla Writing League (2x) - Black August II Rep Power: 85899391	2 Crip da turn up GAWD has spoken __________________ - Netcees Rebuttal Tourney - Art of Writing League (x 4) - AOWL Season 11 Champion (Undefeated Season) Last edited by Geno; 05-20-2018 at 01:02 PM.

05-10-2018, 11:39 AM	#4
Enbombz Not Joog Join Date: Nov 2016 Posts: 769 Battle Record: 9-5 Rep Power: 5907769	Dope. I always catch your flow cos I've heard you spit before. I would of maybe switched the "future a text" to future self a text" The gas line had s type though I'm assuming it's " I could use it on the gas" or "I could use one for the gas" But like I said I enjoyed it, butter flow, cool references.

05-10-2018, 01:46 PM	#6
Sammy Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2015 Posts: 103 Champed - Write Week 7 Rep Power: 3415772	"I'm not suitable in suits unless I'm suiting up for death" jjeeaaahh!

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Exis ............ Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 3,938 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 0	Your a funny nigga...

05-11-2018, 12:25 PM	#9
Eŋg rhyme capsule. Join Date: Sep 2018 Posts: 2,146 Rep Power: 0	i'm all about hibiki when i can afford it. shit is extortion though. this was dope. rhythmic, self-effacing, self-important humour. nice blend.

05-12-2018, 12:48 PM	#12
Wutzit Tewya Junior Member Join Date: May 2018 Posts: 12 Rep Power: 0	Cause a corner office view is less beautiful when stressed.. I'm not suitable for suits unless I'm suiting up for death...REAL dope. In the backseat of an uber with a floozie and a flask...LOL The flow of this is nasty. Love me a sick flow..and the content was good to match it. Lots of LOL in there. Good stuff

05-19-2018, 08:58 AM	#14
dull boy consults Lloyd Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 4,075 Battle Record: 0-8 Champed -1-2 Punch League Roast Rep Power: 39345600	Dope

05-19-2018, 03:14 PM	#16
Lyriscologist Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2018 Posts: 101 Rep Power: 95178	haaaa, i think this is the first piece I read of yours that wasn’t a topical or imagery piece and just flowing... sick flow, i think the transitional structure was off on the gas line but flawless overall.. had me lol’in

05-20-2018, 11:54 AM	#20
2tripple0 death warmed over Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Downstairs illstreet dam Posts: 2,564 Battle Record: 6-21 Rep Power: 0	Lol rap is weird man i mean its like life whats the point nobody really knows.... i mean i write shit and i guess follow the format er whatever rhyme a bar come up with a story or a theme er whatever but i dont really get what im actually trying to achieve.... i guess its just a piece of writing er sumn sumn to read at some point when you get a chance dont know.... what do i know.... it just feels like its some sort of challenge is all thats all it is your just challenging yourself to write something good i guess... __________________ https://soundcloud.com/user-876573949/ https://soundcloud.com/user-634430314/