Check out this article I wrote for sherdog for UFC 177

oats · 08-28-2014, 12:19 PM

http://www.sherdog.com/news/articles...-Barao-2-72683

Lmk what you think, my first article for them.

Seymour BUTTS · 08-28-2014, 12:23 PM

writing about strong midgets fighting each other...pretty dece

how much did they pay u for that quickie

PotatoSackLegend · 08-28-2014, 12:31 PM

listen , stinton....a little bland and rough around the edges comes off like you had a bunch of web pages open next to eachother at the same time looking up stats and what not, and u usin too much words like "certainly, mirror images, boasts,notoriously." basically ur sayin way too much in all ur sentences

"When Renan Barao squares off against T.J. Dillashaw in the UFC 177 main event on Saturday at the Sleep Train Arena in Sacramento, Calif., it will be in the unfamiliar blue corner"

just say wen renan barao squares off and dillashaw at the UFC 177 main event on Saturday, he wil be in the unfamilar blue corner. stop puttin all those big ass words in there, i was noticing end rhymes n shit too. one of them paragraphs came off like an open mic keystyle

the tale of the tape pictures were cool and I like the final word you can probably give jerry springer a run for his money

Meth · 08-28-2014, 01:21 PM

Cool

El Muffin · 08-28-2014, 02:14 PM

I thought tht was SportsScience for a lil while there...

Vulgar · 08-28-2014, 03:07 PM

Pretty cool.

Quote:

Barao is a year younger, but he has been in the fight game for an additional five years and in the Octagon an extra 40 minutes, translating into more physical mileage than Dillashaw has undergone in professional MMA.

This line was sounded a little too mechanical. Good job though, I read a lot of Sherdog articles.

ill nik-A · 08-28-2014, 03:09 PM

This is mad cool man, props

oats · 08-28-2014, 09:57 PM

:)

thanks for reading, everyone
@Diode @Beyond @Certain @big baby @anyone else who is interested

Beyond · 08-29-2014, 11:56 AM

Thought it was good.

Going to be hard for Barao to win the rematch, my money's on Ted Jones.

Eŋg · 08-29-2014, 12:46 PM

you want feedback on this?

PancakeBrah · 08-29-2014, 06:22 PM

:-(

Sorry 4 ur loss oats

oats · 08-29-2014, 06:25 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Eŋg

you want feedback on this?

Sure, though I posted it more to say hey check out something I wrote.

@El Pancake I don't get it :-/

PancakeBrah · 08-29-2014, 06:29 PM

Barao is out.

oats · 08-29-2014, 07:06 PM

holy shit, I had no idea lol. good thing my article got published before he was out. In a way this fight just got way more interesting though, wasn't too pumped on seeing this rematch.

Certain · 08-29-2014, 07:08 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by oats

holy shit, I had no idea lol.

It happened an hour ago.

Beyond · 08-30-2014, 12:48 AM

I had money riding on Dillashaw, not happy about this.

Fart · 08-30-2014, 01:38 AM

Who is TJ fighting

Certain · 08-30-2014, 01:43 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Art

Who is TJ fighting

Joe Soto.

oats · 08-30-2014, 02:08 AM

Joe Soto is +700 underdog. If I was a betting man, I'd put money on that. former bellator champ, in shape, plus dillashaw has prepared for a very different fighter.

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PotatoSackLegend Potato Sack racin' pro. Join Date: Jun 2014 Posts: 119 Battle Record: 0-8 Rep Power: 0	listen , stinton....a little bland and rough around the edges comes off like you had a bunch of web pages open next to eachother at the same time looking up stats and what not, and u usin too much words like "certainly, mirror images, boasts,notoriously." basically ur sayin way too much in all ur sentences "When Renan Barao squares off against T.J. Dillashaw in the UFC 177 main event on Saturday at the Sleep Train Arena in Sacramento, Calif., it will be in the unfamiliar blue corner" just say wen renan barao squares off and dillashaw at the UFC 177 main event on Saturday, he wil be in the unfamilar blue corner. stop puttin all those big ass words in there, i was noticing end rhymes n shit too. one of them paragraphs came off like an open mic keystyle the tale of the tape pictures were cool and I like the final word you can probably give jerry springer a run for his money

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