09-12-2014, 08:39 PM | #1 |
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Camp vs jilti (S&F) pt. Jilti wins
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09-12-2014, 09:09 PM | #2 |
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09-12-2014, 11:45 PM | #3 |
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my key styles?...D that's reached sheek and jada's block i'm the complete wild beast, yeti favored to evade my plots? if i chief loud trees, jilti gets a fade with what baby adrian got heat the beef now, please, bring it flavored....Frank's the pot i eat feasts out of plates of armor, save a spot, satans potluck see i'll squeeze, deflating the glock, pray you dont get shot up i think extinct when engaging my op, idi amin slaying uganda peep my sneaks, i'm blazing the spot more flagrant than dada ya cheap release came in a box, you gotta pay for this product beat me? seek a gang of cops with the most heinous of conduct elite teams of angered monks, training with bane when in gotham seriously, i gave cobain the shotgun while literally playing nirvana speeding in my favorite tonka, beeping at geeks in racing hondas stay in ya lane, i'll harm ya with bleach to the face, taste my drama hostile demon and godly even, monster scheming for filthy reasons im not leaving til jilti bleeding and blanco bringing a mop to clean it
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09-17-2014, 10:34 AM | #5 |
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Camp take a hike, i've already scaled heights ur afraid to climb rain or shine
aint nice with wordplays & rhymes, while the first day i arrived was like make way for Christ Jesus this lame can't buy love by mail order or bribe, he's a failure in life no prayer to find a fairytale wife using every type of jewelry to Copper, i just lay the pipe explains why girls have no water retention if i'm in their presence or anywhere near them cuz when my name's uttered ladies underwear get wet stain puddles from the mere mention gotta lear jet with fly female participants at the rear entrance cuz my pimp hand strong lines get that long against the wall to Ride me, might need to put bright green wrist bands on sit back and watch as a player flips dimes like loose change, Bruce Wayne soon as i take out the Batgirls ask to twirl it around for a few plays like at a high school game strength is legendary like i was created from every famous sketch bearing Stan Lee's signature the whole Marvel Universe pictured in one individual depicting worlds as miniscule next to earth thats some Galactus shit, expanding depths of angle widths to where parameters met geometry with calculus mixed in algebra sets til compounds connect where an alchemists' ends power of fists hittin like a hammer, accurate enough to split hairs on a miniature atom and as impact occurs its the last gasp of air for passengers wearin gas masks in chairs fastened Last edited by jilti; 09-26-2014 at 12:09 PM. |
09-24-2014, 01:55 PM | #6 |
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10-08-2014, 10:30 AM | #8 |
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10-08-2014, 11:08 AM | #9 |
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v/jilti - way better rhymes and packed more in less space. it was pretty much over after the first 2 lines of his verse. camp, you need more complex rhymes that match up and more of them and this will give what swag you have more ethos, as better setups mean the wordplays come off better. a lot of your stuff was off a syllable or two from the rest, when you try go more than 2 lines on the same scheme it needs to be on point.
Camp take a hike, i've already scaled heights ur afraid to climb rain or shine aint nice with wordplays & rhymes, while the first day i arrived was like make way for Christ ain't as nice would've worked better, but this won it imo.
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10-10-2014, 06:51 AM | #10 |
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over-all flow, structure, and content of Jiliti's was better.
This line made me LOL, though: "geometry with calculus mixed in algebra sets til compounds connect where an alchemists' ends " Fool, calculus is algebra + more, mixed with geometry and trigonometry. Should have read "algebra with geometry mixed in calculus sets til compounds connect where an alchemists' ends." -- and alchemy is an ancient form of chemistry... I don't think calculus was even around back then. That aside, and no pun intended but correct English isn't a factor here; its how the lines flow together and the content within them. /v jilti |
10-11-2014, 04:45 AM | #11 |
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even rhymes nicer how muzz said it^
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10-16-2014, 02:57 AM | #12 |
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I thought camp came out a little rushed. Didn't really elaborate on his ideas n concepts. Want bad but definately seem better from him.
Jil had a dope opening couplet n didn't lose much momentumexcept for maybe the last bar. Also had better imagery n dope metaphors that were clearly depicted. So V jil |
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