02-26-2019, 11:39 AM | #1 |
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Then what?
Use consciousness to generate real things
Recesatate feeling. When the letters placed brilliant? It may levitate buildings Of course the memories'll last Like stored energies of past Sober awakening- yeah? better bring a flask Yet most live Eyes Wide Shut and never see the masks Gotta Wonka with it- penetrate the glass Seperate the ACT, from truth. Meditate and fast. Have to get to the roots of why generation after generations trapped Alchemy - adapt Drop the demented mindstates Ink stimulation, pens that vibrate A think simulation - accension highway I stare at shadows til they surround me like pterodactyls Gallows, gavels, latch & chain The Scarecrow grovels If I Only Had A Brain..!? Then what? It's confusing, the ego.. The beauty is peaceful, The illusory eisle Here. Paint it how you want My dear angel bellutaunt Encased in a spherical vase Petal fonts Where meadows yawn That special On One light for all candles If it's done right. Love's highs strung aside Hung to dry, to drain this drowning The drops drip dangles down I'm coming, throne-trippin Humming own rythym Bones clickin, holding hidden Occult beats, their moulding ribbons The Soul dreams, it fantasizes Then Soul weeps on ashy horizion Catching my thriving, upon this haunted Accident-Island
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03-14-2019, 11:49 PM | #2 |
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Not sure why this got slept on, fun read Wise...Thought the second stanza had a more poetic feel with some really nice imagery.First part was slick, like your word usage...
Good to see you sorta back around man, Stay upwards brethren. |
03-23-2019, 02:03 AM | #3 |
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I like the thought of an accident island. Can wonder what that'd be like, probably a hive for crooked insurance companies and even more crooked people filing claims lol.
This for me was the best part: "Of course the memories'll last Like stored energies of past Sober awakening- yeah? better bring a flask Yet most live Eyes Wide Shut and never see the masks" Interesting idea. |
03-27-2019, 03:38 AM | #4 |
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Wise, I always enjoy the ride. It's psychedelic and holistic. I like the fast-paced rhythm and it almost activates dopamine surges when consuming it. You bring multiple thought streams into one being, but also it appears a bit frantic upon bird's eyeview. That being stylistically it is done well, and it is not nonsensical. There was another frequent open mic writer who wrote in a similar fashion, but it was more scattered brain and while cool in the concepts he would bring together, it had little meaning so it was just a flurry of words. This while has some scattered elements to it, is cohesive in some form or another. Thanks.
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