03-18-2019, 10:40 AM | #1 |
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Week 1: Dominate vs Jabari Black JAB WINS
Week One You all know the rules, but if you need reminding go look at the thread.
DUE THURSDAY @Dominate @Jabari Black *The 1-2 league and it's mini LR league are one bar Vs one bar.*
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03-20-2019, 04:16 PM | #3 |
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Cool man. I’ll probably be a bit closer to the deadline. Feel like I can do better than the bar I’ve currently got in mind for you.
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03-21-2019, 08:22 PM | #4 |
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The Ruger clap… Getcha brains blown when I drive by in the Range Rover
Snooker champ… you’ll see Black w/ a 8 on em gettin put in a hole – that’s game over
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03-21-2019, 08:24 PM | #5 |
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The tommy gun with me! I’m shooting Dom til the drum empty/
This legend dying after you see Black Dominate-n a machine like John Henry/ |
03-21-2019, 08:38 PM | #6 |
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doms concept was cool, punch was solid but the wording was just ok to me, either way it was cool. jabari i think ur wording was kinda choppy but ok, the concept was alright but it was just kinda meh to me, i've seen you come 10x doper imo.
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03-22-2019, 05:44 AM | #7 |
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dope shit
i liked Dom's concept more, but Jab's wording more im split on this one gonna edge to Jab slightly because it was cleaner, less wordy, more directly to the point
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03-22-2019, 05:50 AM | #8 |
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I avoided this for ages. It's really tight. Jabs wording as usual is tight. But I just couldn't not give Dom this in the end. I don't know how this hasn't already been immediately played on you tbh jab. But hey it's done now. Well done Dom.
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03-22-2019, 10:37 AM | #9 |
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The Ruger clap… Getcha brains blown when I drive by in the Range Rover
Snooker champ… you’ll see Black w/ a 8 on em gettin put in a hole – that’s game over This is coo, but let's be honest "8 on me getting put in a hole" is a reach. Dom does his thing, but this was a clear reach. ------ The tommy gun with me! I’m shooting Dom til the drum empty/ This legend dying after you see Black Dominate-n a machine like John Henry/ Wasn't JB best work, but it hit and overall made more sense. Wording here was also nice imo Props to both, but I got JB here
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03-22-2019, 02:39 PM | #10 |
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Dom is my guy but idk what an '8 on em' means. Are you talking about a gun, putting holes in him? I'm not sure. The bar was constructed well for sure but I'm not sure the about the authenticity nor meaning...my bad
I thought JB had a solid punch...I think I liked it more because I recently read about John Henry (an African American Folk hero) so it hit home more so but this wasn't it his best but enough for the win here. |
03-22-2019, 02:55 PM | #11 |
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Dom your wording and execution was nice but to my very extensive knowledge of gun lingo, both formal and informal, an 8 is not an actual term. Not trying to nitpick but when that’s literally the main part of the bar there’s really no way of not mentioning that. JB this was decent imo but definitely not a haymaker of any sort. I liked the concept and all but I feel it was a bit wordy. Aside from that it at least hit your opponent althewhile actually making sense.
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03-24-2019, 08:41 AM | #12 |
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03-24-2019, 09:55 AM | #13 |
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dom’s coulda been smoother but it was still pretty damn dope
JB urs was cool but you did a way better John Henry line in the past.. this was a lil bit simpler v Dom
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Liked both bars... but jb’s bar was worded smoother. Tough call I gotta edge this to black
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jb's was too simple a np for me, but cleanish wording
dom had the creativity & less attractive wording but not bad v/dom
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03-24-2019, 03:43 PM | #17 |
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This battle was fire, it can go either way tbh but i thought dom hit a lil harder imo props to both here.
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it's close as fuck, but I like Black, Dominate, n a machine more than Doms flip. I think the legend dying part does it for me.
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both were dope no doubt, i just thought dom's 'conceptual binding' was more compact and hit a little bit harder. props to both
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