03-06-2019, 06:22 AM | #1 |
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ADONIS vs MASTER ROCK
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03-07-2019, 06:51 PM | #2 |
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Check kiddo.
And check mate
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03-07-2019, 06:58 PM | #3 |
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How many lines you want to do?....since you know I'll push it to the limit every time.
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03-07-2019, 11:05 PM | #4 |
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Memory banks are priceless, like watching film of our lives From connections to fights, both are simple and right Correcting anger with wanderlust, breaking frames resting under us We could argue and fuck, or fucking argue and pummel fuck Lovingly hate, steady pounding away What happened to days where we’d rattle the cage Kick up dust bending corners on Diamond Backs of our ways Creating tracks where each path gained the traction to mate Junior high built foundation, high school was the roof The in-between was a dream we constructed and mused Kids were abrupt but its cool, cause our love was a fuse The ignition was livin’, each reel; what a view They watched us wither away, each wrinkle a story We’d fold our love in a capsule and mingle if boring We’d travel through time, reminisce and adore being Just two peas in a pod, wrapped in a gift of two courting True love is of grief, cause I wore my heart on my sleeve Then one day I awoke, and you let my dial tone beep I was sad for a second, then I remembered each crease We built this fire together, and each seed produced seeds I’d drop a tear filled with joy, but if I’m honest I’d weep Until the next time we meet, know each day is a week I love you Esther, new flowers nightly, Just please, keep…Resting in Peace ~ .
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03-12-2019, 07:42 PM | #5 |
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Master req. Ext until Saturday, I'm fine with it if king Lars is
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03-16-2019, 11:55 PM | #6 |
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the weight of the world is on my shoulders
in tears, I just can't believe that its actually over lost in the deepness of shadows as the cold grows over skys grey...and so is this day time flies as well as your spirit has passed away I'm in disbelief of the present this day yet I feel that I had so much left to say I swore I could of seen your shadow in the door way I got up and I really didn't know what to say but tell me really what is left to say?... yet it trying make sense if this is how it needs to play out I'm searching for anwsers to figure this out pointing fingers on who's to blame pass the numbness and the pain someone has got to pay was there any foul play? In their last breath what did they say? I'm at the end of my rope how do I climb? when all is gone as well as my hope for you brought me through difficult times its too much to bear every time I think of you my heart just tears apart your still in my dreams I attempt to make sense of what it all means the chapter ends leaving me hanging on that scene This is how it should be your breaths gone away rest in piece
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03-18-2019, 07:37 PM | #7 |
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adonis:
very poetically driven with high emotion.. def digging the rhyme structure as well, it unfolded with a heart beat type pulse.. the vocab was strong and well used.. the topic play on it was on point and all in all a dope verse.. master: was cool, i slightly smaller made to seem stretched verse when compared against adonis but cool none the less.. story wise it had alot more action in direction but was failing on the description, though dont get me wrong it was choc full of it.. vocab was nice and delivery was on point..good drop vote= adonis just a more compact verse imo, good battle guys and g/l |
04-05-2019, 08:00 PM | #8 |
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adonis wins
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