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Old 12-21-2018, 11:50 PM   #1
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NWL:Season I: Week IX



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Old 12-22-2018, 06:57 AM   #2
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Old 12-28-2018, 11:32 PM   #3
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Old 12-29-2018, 12:39 AM   #4
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I'm seeking a way to get away from it all
yet in this vastness, my troubles seem a bit too small
Is it your divine breath that controls the wind
that transcends me beyond to a state where I have been?
I search for clarity but my own thoughts are clouded by its continuous spin
conflicted with a war that persists to be fought from within
as the smoke clears as well as the rain
lost in the sea dreams suddenly is gone the pain
searching for peace comfort and clear skies
But am I deceived by the whispers of devils lies?
wondering about the star's connection to our lives
while all I see is the celestial being attempting to pull my soul towards the sky
deja vu I run away premonitions searches for who am I?
let me drift away in the calmness of the day
will I find forever? mediate in the moment and I'll pray
But yet in this moment is where I'll choose to stay
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Old 12-30-2018, 07:15 AM   #5
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Smfh...& the board hates me lol, chea.

V/ Master all the way, fuck every no showin' extension ass no droppin' here faggots...

Shit needs to change fam @Innovator...not your fault, just sayin'.
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Old 01-01-2019, 02:38 PM   #6
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nice verse. That's the kind of stuff that would run through my mind just floating.
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Old 01-03-2019, 02:46 AM   #7
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okay not a bad verse, lost in the vastness and all, i liked the theme, however your flow was off in some spots due to typo and wording. for example, this couplet...
"as the smoke clears as well as the rain
lost in the sea dreams suddenly is gone the pain"
could've been smoother with some punctuation and improved wording.
V/MasterRock @asylum so sorry for your incident bro
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Old 01-05-2019, 04:41 AM   #8
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so i dried out in land and tried out the sea
never found out the truth or a reason for being
each step you takes in granite like steps from a God
we make impressions past most understanding yet so redundant in thought
it might seem obscene but every check has a balance
i'm just living in a dream i inspect from another dimension
aint a challenge so much as another extension
get cut by a knife like a slice deep in tension
most never think twice but we increase, breathe relentless
aleviate stress like a lochness that blew a valve
i'm sicker than ya crew locked up in a room bumpin tical
two grand for a true man with a new plan
know i'm conquering where few can
yall on that ham and pinapple while i chew spam
stay true fam. listen to realness that speaks
I'm truer to form than Andes with peppermint peaks
twice as obscene piercing the sky with the night in my dreams
daylight meets forces darker forcing margins of battle'n dwarfing'em goblins
this swarm you can't stop when it's thumpin out the top ten
bumping it to hopsin
stay woke like jake brakes in the hollywood hills
while we bottle the thrills
serve em up to foreign countries labeled like we gotta just chiiiillll
but it's way maximum security cuz we tax'n the majority'n supportin freedom
see 'em tryin to stop it with my optics n stay fly like hebrew coptics
cuz these people breed demonous monsters in the dreams of cerebral pondscum
we drink brews till gone, sir. i'm beyond sure
chillen in the swamp thinkin i'm drinkin too much and beyond words
the ponds purified with a slight ripple when i getta pinch a bright nipple
see that booty tight wigglen i might giggle
tryna warm up but my frozen dick spits icicles
you cry pitiful
while i dry ridicule
you quite miniscule
this after beef, versus were due at the last of week
but my fat physique has ya bastards peekin n seekin great enlightenment
i just stay snuffin you bitches out like that kites been sent
to a high extent i'm raisin higher than hot balloons huffin noxious fumes
plottin astronomic doom beefin while ya in ya room sleepin
in the broom closet beefin with wicked witches
there's no room in a sequence that leaves you stricken
believe me when spitten leave you stuck in a 3d'like image
leave you in my dreams w hile i finish...............
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