IAmRhetoric 2-3 vs Bust 2-3 {Bust wins}

Hush · 07-13-2015, 01:02 PM

Netcees Battle League Season VIII

Rules

Due Dates:

Verses are due Thursday, July 16th 2015 11:59 PM PST. and will be open until the following Sunday
Battles that lack votes may close later.
One sided battles may get closed early.
Extensions are 24 hours

Line Limit:

Minimum of 12, maximum of 18
If not agreed upon, second drop must match length of the first

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First to 5, win by at least two votes

@IAmRhetoric 2-3 vs @Bust 2-3

Bust · 07-14-2015, 07:23 PM

10-12

IAmRhetoric · 07-14-2015, 11:46 PM

im probably gonna drop soon, and more than that.

IAmRhetoric · 07-14-2015, 11:57 PM

Sally Sells Seashells? you were prolly that type of chump in school
You gettin a shell every couple steps, until that fuckin bucket's full
girls make him uncomfortable, he the type to tell a bitch
"it's not that I don't like you, unfortunately i'm just selabit"
that's kinda funny, but now i'm using ur internet search history to hurt you,
First the 9mil bang bust, then we roll up n start taking shots at his girl too,
U fuckin worm you, you don't deserve to battle me,
Don't hassle me, Bust got no bars like a phone with no battery
You really need help w/ your bars, you homo swine
Fuck with mine, and u gettin painful tips like the noshow shine
my bars are oh-so fine, i'm also obsessed over the nina
Get in the ring with me n ur gettin cooked for a minute like left over pizza
Im on my nursery shit, Ding Dong, get ya Bell rocked
U don't sell rocks, post on that wall and ur gettin ur egg cracked when the shells drop

Bust · 07-15-2015, 04:15 PM

said he had Barz fa Hush then got scarred n crushed, this punk was merciful
I mean this pussy said he had 16 Strictly for Him.. N not ONE was personal
Ur text games as pathetic as ur sex game, dooog u should leave,
Or instead of anticipating a ho show-win.... Go find a twat u could beat,
I got a vicious can that'll shatter ya frame so don't cause this shit ta blam
Cos 1 shot'll leave pieces of I Am all over a wall like nas' biggest fan
His shits weak so we'll prolly hear quick key to cover up the fact all of its lame
NFL 101, no matter how often u attempt to rush, Weak Lines WONT get u positive gain
U ride Every big name but claim ur straight, muafucka u the gayest clown EVER
No joke, so if u hear um say he only loooooves Muff.... S'Cos it Sounds better
What's all this faggotry? Poppin 9's droppin dimes this false ass act we see
Cos the only time he involved with crime.. Is being the victim of assault n battery..
just promise U'll Quit after this, cos each bar spit is a clutter, I
I mean after u receive this L, Swear to us ull take ur garbage to another site..

Mr. J · 07-16-2015, 02:22 AM

girls make him uncomfortable, he the type to tell a bitch
"it's not that I don't like you, unfortunately i'm just selabit"
that's kinda funny, but now i'm using ur internet search history to hurt you,
First the 9mil bang bust, then we roll up n start taking shots at his girl too,
^^^^
I really wanted to find more about your verse to enjoy
but the only lines I could really pull out of that were these...
I feel as though you need to work more on your execution
some lines seemed like they would go some where but it just came across rushed
you don't need to rush to get up a verse before your opponent...
you have several days, bulk up your concepts & peep a few battles & work your style in...
either way...decent drop...

said he had Barz fa Hush then got scarred n crushed, this punk was merciful
I mean this pussy said he had 16 Strictly for Him.. N not ONE was personal

I got a vicious can that'll shatter ya frame so don't cause this shit ta blam
Cos 1 shot'll leave pieces of I Am all over a wall like nas' biggest fan
His shits weak so we'll prolly hear quick key to cover up the fact all of its lame
NFL 101, no matter how often u attempt to rush, Weak Lines WONT get u positive gain
^^^
you were the stronger out of both of you in this battle
what leaned me was that 'I Am' Nas line, that was slick
the NFL line was pretty dope as well, the rest was ehhhh
your lines were more precise, but the filler could have killed you
luckily you snuck a few gems through and kept it moving

v/Bust, he was the stronger of both battlers today
as for IAm I felt that you could have came with a stronger verse
this came across rushed & didn't really help you in the end
other then that, I think you are on the right track...
cool battle guys...

Useless · 07-16-2015, 10:00 AM

A few of rhetorics bars looked like they were going somewhere but then the execution was just not there. They were either really statementish or played and underwhelming. I wanna help u out n tell what u what to do but i really don't know. Concepts n wording I guess.

Bust had more lines I liked than didn't like. U went punch, filler, punch, filler, etc. And I ain't mad at u, u did plenty to win. The opener was a nice personal and lulz, that 'I am' line was pretty dope, that involved in a crime line was dope IMO, could be played but I haven't seen it, which is crazy cause its a pretty obvious concept, I got one similar to it myself this week. I wasnt really feeling the NFL line i thought could've been flipped better but it was OK. Anyway other than the obvi filler I enjoyed ur verse.

V. Busted

Amen. · 07-16-2015, 11:15 AM

opener mild
selabit had potential but you kept is basic an simple
bang bust was good
no bars concept played
painful tips was ok but mild
cooked for a minute mild
closer wordy as fuck but had potential mild as is

you improving bro. need to focus on trying to be a little more creative with your concepts man. try and jot down a concept and write 3 bars from it in different ways. go with the one that seems the harshest. that helped me backkkkkkkkk in the dino-text era when I started. you have potential but you still writing text battles like you face to face or something. be a little more creative bro and you'll be straight.

vs

opener was mild but cool personal approach
hoe show win was dece
I am/nas fan was good
weak lines was nice
loves muff was ok lol
involved in crime was dece
receive this L was basic

bust got this

Bash · 07-16-2015, 11:30 AM

Bang bust

Vs

I am, weak line

V/Bust. IAmR still has few things to workout. Needs better concepts. I use to tell newer guys to read around n see what everyone likes. Then come back and incorporate what you saw in your writing. Bust takes this in all CATs IMO.

Hush · 07-17-2015, 09:27 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by IAmRhetoric

Sally Sells Seashells? you were prolly that type of chump in school
You gettin a shell every couple steps, until that fuckin bucket's full
lol. ok.. "u the type of faggot skipping on the beach like a fucking fool" I would of liked asetup like that more. but this was still slick
girls make him uncomfortable, he the type to tell a bitch
"it's not that I don't like you, unfortunately i'm just selabit"
why aint u do a selebit sell pussy he has to pay for pussy line? u are on the cusp of getting dope bro
that's kinda funny, but now i'm using ur internet search history to hurt you,
First the 9mil bang bust, then we roll up n start taking shots at his girl too,
ok cool
U fuckin worm you, you don't deserve to battle me,
Don't hassle me, Bust got no bars like a phone with no battery
feather light
You really need help w/ your bars, you homo swine
Fuck with mine, and u gettin painful tips like the noshow shine
naaaah, u could of said u getting painful tips like tough love or harsh advice
my bars are oh-so fine, i'm also obsessed over the nina
Get in the ring with me n ur gettin cooked for a minute like left over pizza
light
Im on my nursery shit, Ding Dong, get ya Bell rocked
U don't sell rocks, post on that wall and ur gettin ur egg cracked when the shells drop
ok but again u should of referenced humpty dump or something in ur setup.. alot of almost bars in this verse, lots of good ideas.. ur coming together bro

Quote:

Originally Posted by Bust

said he had Barz fa Hush then got scarred n crushed, this punk was merciful
I mean this pussy said he had 16 Strictly for Him.. N not ONE was personal
ok
Ur text games as pathetic as ur sex game, dooog u should leave,
Or instead of anticipating a ho show-win.... Go find a twat u could beat,
kinda weak
I got a vicious can that'll shatter ya frame so don't cause this shit ta blam
Cos 1 shot'll leave pieces of I Am all over a wall like nas' biggest fan
fire
His shits weak so we'll prolly hear quick key to cover up the fact all of its lame
NFL 101, no matter how often u attempt to rush, Weak Lines WONT get u positive gain
damn, this some heat
U ride Every big name but claim ur straight, muafucka u the gayest clown EVER
No joke, so if u hear um say he only loooooves Muff.... S'Cos it Sounds better
dont get it
What's all this faggotry? Poppin 9's droppin dimes this false ass act we see
Cos the only time he involved with crime.. Is being the victim of assault n battery..
nah
just promise U'll Quit after this, cos each bar spit is a clutter, I
I mean after u receive this L, Swear to us ull take ur garbage to another site..
dont get it

crazy close battle

rhetoric had mad lil jabs an shit but bust had those two HEAVY ass blows

close as fuck

bcuz when bust missed he missed bad

I think Bust edged it slightly but this is a debateable battler
no clear cut body by any means
v Bust

07-13-2015, 01:02 PM	#1
Hush NJ Devil Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 12,042 Battle Record: Who Cares Accomplishments - Hall of Fame Rep Power: 84181417	IAmRhetoric 2-3 vs Bust 2-3 {Bust wins} Netcees Battle League Season VIII Rules Due Dates: Verses are due Thursday, July 16th 2015 11:59 PM PST. and will be open until the following Sunday Battles that lack votes may close later. One sided battles may get closed early. Extensions are 24 hours Line Limit: Minimum of 12, maximum of 18 If not agreed upon, second drop must match length of the first For additional Rules refer to rule thread First to 5, win by at least two votes @IAmRhetoric 2-3 vs @Bust 2-3 __________________ Bed stuy fly Bushwick sick East ny walk

07-16-2015, 02:22 AM	#6
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,022 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349678	girls make him uncomfortable, he the type to tell a bitch "it's not that I don't like you, unfortunately i'm just selabit" that's kinda funny, but now i'm using ur internet search history to hurt you, First the 9mil bang bust, then we roll up n start taking shots at his girl too, ^^^^ I really wanted to find more about your verse to enjoy but the only lines I could really pull out of that were these... I feel as though you need to work more on your execution some lines seemed like they would go some where but it just came across rushed you don't need to rush to get up a verse before your opponent... you have several days, bulk up your concepts & peep a few battles & work your style in... either way...decent drop... said he had Barz fa Hush then got scarred n crushed, this punk was merciful I mean this pussy said he had 16 Strictly for Him.. N not ONE was personal I got a vicious can that'll shatter ya frame so don't cause this shit ta blam Cos 1 shot'll leave pieces of I Am all over a wall like nas' biggest fan His shits weak so we'll prolly hear quick key to cover up the fact all of its lame NFL 101, no matter how often u attempt to rush, Weak Lines WONT get u positive gain ^^^ you were the stronger out of both of you in this battle what leaned me was that 'I Am' Nas line, that was slick the NFL line was pretty dope as well, the rest was ehhhh your lines were more precise, but the filler could have killed you luckily you snuck a few gems through and kept it moving v/Bust, he was the stronger of both battlers today as for IAm I felt that you could have came with a stronger verse this came across rushed & didn't really help you in the end other then that, I think you are on the right track... cool battle guys... __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you

07-16-2015, 10:00 AM	#7
Useless 100% Join Date: Jul 2015 Posts: 1,803 Battle Record: 9-12 Champed - 1-2 Punch League Rep Power: 0	A few of rhetorics bars looked like they were going somewhere but then the execution was just not there. They were either really statementish or played and underwhelming. I wanna help u out n tell what u what to do but i really don't know. Concepts n wording I guess. Bust had more lines I liked than didn't like. U went punch, filler, punch, filler, etc. And I ain't mad at u, u did plenty to win. The opener was a nice personal and lulz, that 'I am' line was pretty dope, that involved in a crime line was dope IMO, could be played but I haven't seen it, which is crazy cause its a pretty obvious concept, I got one similar to it myself this week. I wasnt really feeling the NFL line i thought could've been flipped better but it was OK. Anyway other than the obvi filler I enjoyed ur verse. V. Busted Last edited by Useless; 07-16-2015 at 10:03 AM.

07-14-2015, 07:23 PM	#2
Bust Senior Member Join Date: Jun 2015 Posts: 164 Battle Record: 5-7 Rep Power: 3710879	10-12

07-15-2015, 04:15 PM	#5
Bust Senior Member Join Date: Jun 2015 Posts: 164 Battle Record: 5-7 Rep Power: 3710879	said he had Barz fa Hush then got scarred n crushed, this punk was merciful I mean this pussy said he had 16 Strictly for Him.. N not ONE was personal Ur text games as pathetic as ur sex game, dooog u should leave, Or instead of anticipating a ho show-win.... Go find a twat u could beat, I got a vicious can that'll shatter ya frame so don't cause this shit ta blam Cos 1 shot'll leave pieces of I Am all over a wall like nas' biggest fan His shits weak so we'll prolly hear quick key to cover up the fact all of its lame NFL 101, no matter how often u attempt to rush, Weak Lines WONT get u positive gain U ride Every big name but claim ur straight, muafucka u the gayest clown EVER No joke, so if u hear um say he only loooooves Muff.... S'Cos it Sounds better What's all this faggotry? Poppin 9's droppin dimes this false ass act we see Cos the only time he involved with crime.. Is being the victim of assault n battery.. just promise U'll Quit after this, cos each bar spit is a clutter, I I mean after u receive this L, Swear to us ull take ur garbage to another site..

07-16-2015, 11:15 AM	#8
Amen. Banned Join Date: Jun 2015 Location: New York Posts: 2,047 Battle Record: 16-9 Rep Power: 0	opener mild selabit had potential but you kept is basic an simple bang bust was good no bars concept played painful tips was ok but mild cooked for a minute mild closer wordy as fuck but had potential mild as is you improving bro. need to focus on trying to be a little more creative with your concepts man. try and jot down a concept and write 3 bars from it in different ways. go with the one that seems the harshest. that helped me backkkkkkkkk in the dino-text era when I started. you have potential but you still writing text battles like you face to face or something. be a little more creative bro and you'll be straight. vs opener was mild but cool personal approach hoe show win was dece I am/nas fan was good weak lines was nice loves muff was ok lol involved in crime was dece receive this L was basic bust got this

07-16-2015, 11:30 AM	#9
Bash Barrin' Out Join Date: Nov 2014 Posts: 577 Battle Record: 16-15 Champed - Fight Night 5 Rep Power: 13649167	Bang bust Vs I am, weak line V/Bust. IAmR still has few things to workout. Needs better concepts. I use to tell newer guys to read around n see what everyone likes. Then come back and incorporate what you saw in your writing. Bust takes this in all CATs IMO.