08-05-2018, 09:24 AM | #1 |
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Tell niggas be themselves and they nobody
Life’s a head scratcher
Can’t rewrite the book when ur on the tenth chapter School of hard knocks head master Playlist full of dead rappers If I want it I visualize Bumping notorious big hypnotize Bad bitch all hips and thighs Niggas bitch up switching Swides Depression arise. I’m quick to sigh New coupe switch the ride rims a different size Can’t get close to a distant mind Introvert .. time to dip and hide Mind state re invent it Crooked system .. bigger sentence finger tips dollar scented You are not authentic Riding wit the carbon for the carbon copy’s Ur story fake them scars been copied Tell niggas be themselves and they nobody
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08-05-2018, 04:28 PM | #2 |
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Low key fire, shame you don’t write more tbh.
Opening and closing lines were the best to me. Felt it. Keep that pen moving!
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This would sound good rapped out loud. Well done, brother.
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08-06-2018, 09:18 AM | #4 |
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Word thx
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A body on the slick
Tough piece
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08-08-2018, 08:58 PM | #6 |
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I liked the dollar scent line. The whole thing was pretty clean.
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08-08-2018, 10:19 PM | #7 |
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Gotta echo Lars, your opener & closer were the best parts...no offense to the middle section tho as that was straight.
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08-12-2018, 10:25 PM | #8 |
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Can’t rewrite the book when ur on the tenth chapter
School of hard knocks head master Playlist full of dead rappers If I want it I visualize raw Mind state re invent it Crooked system .. bigger sentence finger tips dollar scented You are not authentic Riding wit the carbon for the carbon copy’s first 3 were great but whole thing was quotable title and obviously closing line was a good draw, and actually could be extrapolated into something super interesting as well. thanks
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09-05-2018, 10:35 AM | #9 |
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This shit fire homie.
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Dope piece harsh words could really feel does lines hahahaha good one!
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