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Illume · 05-11-2015, 12:41 AM

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Mr. J · 05-15-2015, 01:15 PM

This was a pretty cool piece, the smoothness was off and on.
I enjoyed the beginning up until the smothered part of the segment
then it got interesting again until we got to the fifties & hippies
for some reason I wanted you to go into a Next Friday rendition
either way i thought this was pretty cool compared to what I've read so far
some dope work regardless..keep writing my dude

05-11-2015, 12:41 AM	#1
Illume Senior Member Join Date: Jun 2013 Posts: 145 Rep Power: 671776	Chains Deleted Last edited by Illume; 04-21-2021 at 12:02 PM.

05-15-2015, 01:15 PM	#2
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,023 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349678	This was a pretty cool piece, the smoothness was off and on. I enjoyed the beginning up until the smothered part of the segment then it got interesting again until we got to the fifties & hippies for some reason I wanted you to go into a Next Friday rendition either way i thought this was pretty cool compared to what I've read so far some dope work regardless..keep writing my dude __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you